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what it is like with out you
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what it is like with out you |
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martina Member
since 2003-06-19
Posts 59 |
With out you I wonder if you will ever return i wait yet i now you have past i can not belive what has happened i always think it was my fault but it is not. I think it should not have turned out they way it did. You should have forgave and forgot cause what you did was not the way to solve it.It just created more problems now everyone wishes she did not walk out on you cause now we have to deal with the pian you caused us when she left cause you were vilent to her and your kids. I do not belive some of the stories they tell me about you why were you the way you were? I can not see my grandpa doing that to his children, I guess it was a part of life for you but i do miss you. GOOD BYE GRANDFATHER. [This message has been edited by martina (06-25-2003 09:13 PM).] |
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Hockeychick19 Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 430Massachusetts, USA |
Once again Carrie very nice work. This poem has a lot of emotions in it, but I really like it. ~Kelly~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
People, all people...even those we love and admire sometimes do things that are wrong or very bad. It is just a part of life, for we all are human and we make mistakes... More important...learning from them... changing behaviors... Why is a very huge little word...sometimes we never know. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martina, this one hurt to read....I know it must have hurt to write. Thank you for sharing your heart with us.  Hugs  Ethel |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
You asked me to read some of your poetry...so I did right away!  This is the first one of yours that I've read, and I think that you're conveying a really beautiful message. I think there may be a few spelling mistakes, but other than that, it is a very nice poem. I'm guessing that you have just started writing? As you continue to write, I find that your style changes...so I'm sure yours will, too. And without a doubt, change for the better! Keep writing and keep posting! Nice work! "I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing of your emotions....James |
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