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ice
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0 posted 2003-06-25 07:15 AM


"This is June, the month of grass and leaves . . .
already the aspens are trembling again,
and a new summer is offered me."
(Henry David Thoreau, Journal, June 6, 1857)
*
Observations On A June Morning
By f.hume aka ice...June 2003
*
The doe crops differently today
Avoids the walk to sweetness
Found in middle field, but chops
And rips at wood-edge, stubble.
From my hide I watch her,
Nervous-uneasy, a chestnut shadow
Moving slow along the shaded furrow,
June rain has carved into a ditch.
*
A copse is near, Beech children
Close spaced, rise from one mother.
There she hides turning circles,
Bleating pain at each contraction.  
Two soft feet, and a head appear
The membrane tears;
And the bloody mess of afterbirth,
Beholds a spotted, living mass.
*
June days bear weight of summer
Close and heavy, fly's buzz early
No breeze at play in aspen leaves
To stay them from their aggravation.
Whose plan is this anyway?
To sting the newborn fawn seems sin
No Just-God would deliver;
I glance around but nothing stands,
To say for me that answer;
So I rise to leave,
And join the ranks of men.
*
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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-06-25 07:32 AM





Just to watch life
in all of its forms...

I especially enjoyed the vision
of the beech children....

Thank you for this.  It seemed to me
to be a June gift of read.

Bonfirelight
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2 posted 2003-06-25 07:48 AM


superbly written.

Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2003-06-25 09:07 AM


You know, I make it a point to read everything I see that you do and it occurred to me today how ironic the name "ice" is for you.  What and how you write is anything but icy.  Your pieces are full of fire and warmth.  Always they leave a burning desire for more...

Susan

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4 posted 2003-06-25 09:17 AM


I would enjoy reading your observations on every single month of the year and everything else in between! Wonderfully descriptive writing!

Warm hugs,
Earth Angel

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5 posted 2003-06-25 09:23 AM


Fantastic use of imagery...just amazing..
I love the way you express yourself...excellent!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
   you haven't been listening.~

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-06-25 12:39 PM


awesome!
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7 posted 2003-06-25 01:25 PM


I love your naturalist's collage. thank you!
Yes, it seems an unkind cut, to sting a newborn. But maybe the next newborn will eat that fly. Poetic justice?

ice
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8 posted 2003-06-26 06:55 AM


Sunshine.:-)
The "beech children" do exist, they sourround the mother tree on a mountainside in Pennsylvania, where the fawn was born. How nice to think of poetry as a gift....thank you for the comments..ice

ice
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9 posted 2003-06-26 06:56 AM


Bonfirelight...
Thank you....:-)....ice

ice
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10 posted 2003-06-26 07:00 AM


Susan..:-)

The nic "ice" is short for icefishinluvr, I go fishing only in winter because of my occupation...Thank you for the nice comments..ice

ice
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11 posted 2003-06-26 07:03 AM


Angel.:-) That is a good idea, other poets have done this before and it makes interesting reading, see the "monthly" poems of Helen Hunt Jackson, they are superb...Thanks for the nice comments...ice
ice
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12 posted 2003-06-26 07:05 AM


Enchantress.
Smiles and hugs back at you..:-)
I just calls 'em as I sees em'
Thank you for the nice reply...ice

ice
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13 posted 2003-06-26 07:07 AM


Shadows....:-)
Thank you....:-)

ice
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14 posted 2003-06-26 07:14 AM


Midnight..:-)

The collage was, and still is inspired by people like Thoreau and Emerson...and yes, it is inevitable that the fly will be eaten, poetic justice is done whenever life form turns into life form..but my question still stands, even with this knowledge....ice

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15 posted 2009-09-07 12:03 PM


i really enjoyed this write!


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