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The Tear |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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The first trickle is etched in folkloric memory may have come with a hardy, uncontrollable laugh some say it came out of tremendous sadness when the skies, upheld by a female's arched body, whose arms and legs supported the heavenly vault opened and rain, like tears began to fall... The first trickle felt so subtle... then as discontent mounted in the valleys below, select valley women climbed the nearest summit, joined the arched goddess in her lament and weeped openly... The first act of jealousy between brothers magnified itself on grander scales these were their men they cried for... The first trickle became then an announcement. Inhabitants would know of future jealous acts cause the rain would fall, at first as tears and rush down as daggers..then clear sheets created torrents from dry river basins widened their banks and deepened their beds... the women on the crests chose to weep instead. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-25-2003 01:45 AM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
completely cool! I like the way you tell a story like this  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
pleasure to hear from you after so long..there have been many more like this in previous forums. What's happening with the Reflections publication by the way? [This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-25-2003 01:48 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome write martin! love the ending! click on the "discussion" forums (link is at the top of this page here) and click on "about reflections" There is no news so far, manuscript has been at the printers for two weeks...so far so good...Ron says he'll try to get an update by the end of the week. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Martin? What an insightful man you are! The first trickle is etched in folkloric memory may have come with a hardy, uncontrollable laugh some say it came out of tremendous sadness when the skies, upheld by a female's arched body, whose arms and legs supported the heavenly vault opened and rain, like tears began to fall... and THAT is beautiful writing indeed xxoo |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
A very good way to end the write.  ARCTIC WIND |
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