Open Poetry #27 |
Elysium (for 1slicklady) |
Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
And all my friends who feel the pain of breathing the same stale air..My first attempt at a sonnet. Restless seeds adrift are we strewn upon relentless wind such paths forlorn abrade esprit where dreams are lost and wills are thinned And though in life it seems decreed that we are bound to this affliction these swords of doubt can never bleed this weary heart and soul's conviction That o'er barren lands we'll sail to virgin plains that still yield hope to rest within a sunlit dale of rolling green and gentle slope It's here at last our time will come rebirth in soil Elysium [This message has been edited by Aenimal (06-25-2003 10:17 AM).] |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
and whatever else bounces up and down cos damn raph this was breathtaking and stuff... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (06-25-2003 10:46 AM).] |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
r...i would like to reply to you right now but i can't...i will be back...and know today...you gave me happy salt...ty...h |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
A beautiful tribute to all, who harbor hope in their hearts for a better future... Enjoyed immensely. Thank you. CG |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
ok i'm back.... I’ll Say It Anyway for Aenimal thank you seems so inadequate to someone who has become second skin my covering that catches salty sorrow who knows my feelings before I say them and how I ache in the knowledge in his internal intimate understanding of how deep this well of pain is and how no edges are just wet but immersed whose youth does not harbor safe shelter standing on searing sands from the steam of it and is far too tender for this world r, thank you... for knowing me... for...understanding for being and if there is a place...i KNOW you will be there too... h |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
to virgin plains that still yield hope to rest within a sunlit dale of rolling green and gentle slope It's here at last our time will come Raph, I hope with all my heart that you (and the others) will find this place real soon. I honestly feel that I have found this place with my Gary.....the other place just creeps in sometimes. But, like I said in the poem I posted today, the sunshine keeps shining back through those clouds. I'm really glad of that. Heart hugs to you, friend Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cheers! a stunning write Raph |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
dang, Raph, were we floating upon the same clouds this morning? This is a beauty, a keeper, a healing salve. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Kris..whatever else bounces up and down? I'm not gonna touch comment..grin Hugs H..happy salt..grin good way of putting it see youre a born poet Thank you CastGuard appreciate the read and kind words Hugs H, you're the best..i hear there are no more basketweaving classes there!! Ethel yer too sweet, i h..oops almost said it..I look forward to the possibility..there that sounds better that we'll all reach this place Thanks Dix wanted to try something different ..a a sonnet..b a poem with h..argh..you know starts with h ends with ope Thanks Kacy and thanks again for the poem..just a little respite from the dark |
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Gina Culliney Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 170 |
well done! Got anymore like that one???? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Gina Not bloody likely lol don't know where this came from..just wanted to write something different and challenge myself |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
how sweet, and true. I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Heh, this being the result, Raph, perhaps you should challenge yourself more often... ...for the benefit of all of us... CG |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very beautiful..well done... and much enjoyed by this reader of your work. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Liz hope so Cg lol I'll give it a try every now and then nancy thanks you and always nice to see you stop by |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph . . . I am so proud of you . . . xxoo |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A good theme for a sonnet... and may I be included in that list? For I surely walk into some stale now and then |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Look at YOU... smiling wide again. Two of my favorite peops connecting here. And a sonnet too! smiling more--now that you've done a sonnet? um...I whisper "sestina" and send you tylenol. (I DO push, don't I?) I agree with all the above, the theme is enchantingly gloomy/yearnful... Raph! |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
lol @ your 'not bloody likely!' bart. oh the laughter! read this several times today, and each time i get a feeling in my stomach. no, not sick, a good one. this m friend is beautiful. and i feel the H word growing in my vocabulary again when i read this. you make the rhyme so effortless and unforced. the words took me to a cornfield in summer. i too, am proud of you, and this. now shut me up. before i tell you you're the best thing since sliced cheese. now that would be stupid, would it not? |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
. . . beauty needs to breathe . . . |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Sue be proud of me when I do not say..thusfar it's only words Surely Karilea we all do of course K you're mad if you think I'm touching a sestina..the explanation was enough to give me a headache(takes the tylenol greatfully) hugs you Thanks gem oh how i hate that word..get me a thesaurus so i can use something other than the dreaded H. Hugs you and there's nothing wrong with cheese...mmmmmmmmmm cheese Sue keep breathing then..grin |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
hmmmmm . . . . [This message has been edited by littlewing (06-26-2003 06:25 AM).] |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
interesting Write! ARCTIC WIND |
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