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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
The moon is crescent tonight And sheds longer rays or light Through our window Reminding me of how unlike The open Mongol plains This place is. I do not know why you rose And stood gazing east As the light showed soft The contours of you I had but a few short hours ago Explored again as if There had never been a first time And would not be a last. I watched, Half lidded feign of sleep So as not to disturb you Or the beauty of the moment When you turned and in half light I made out the lines between Sun brown and fair Mapping them again To memory…. It was your sigh As if the breeze Through rush bed rustled On early morning Which brought me tears For fear you were unhappy With our return and this chore Of buy and sell I had chosen to provide. You saw my eyes And walked back to bed Where you straddled me in sit And kissed the salt from cheeks And lay tender palm on my chest To rise..then lower As you found the comfort of us You my love are The rose with petals soft That grows wild along the hills Where streams are born and I would not pluck you from that which you are born less you wilt and I lose your love. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
As tender as a lotus flower in a blue pooled oasis... when this epoch is finished, I'm coming back to hie them into my library and onto a very, very special shelf for replucking. |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
enjoyed the read good work keep it up my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Beautiful... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Your garden grows more exquisite with each post...and the moth is enjoying the singe of her wings with each one as well... Keep em coming...it'll keep me out of the bug zapper for awhile   |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Ron, you make me want to cry... I watched, Half lidded feign of sleep So as not to disturb you Or the beauty of the moment When you turned and in half light I made out the lines between Sun brown and fair Mapping them again To memory…. In a good way. oh and the ending. you truly are a magnificent poet. you always create such scenes, that i play out in my mind, as if in a movie, but in a quieter, more intimate way. with your words, readers really can ~see~ and ~feel~. like i said before, you make me see colours when you write. i shall stop blathering, add this to my library, and go and read it again. stunning, stunning, stunning! muchos love, gem xxx |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
sighhh I hope this isn't the end.... I started to read this first not knowing it was one of the series, thanks to Karilea who lead me to the first and said.. "you are in for so MUCH pleasure!" She was totally right! Thanks Karilea and Ron.. thank you for stirring my senses. Maree  doing the add thingy |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my...Ohhh myyyyy! This is...this is...(I can't say here) It is going into my library with the others. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
drooling in public now |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Told ya, ya done good....VERY GOOD. Nahhh, not very good....AWESOME! Enjoyed the tenderness of this, could really feel the emotions... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just beautiful! |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
You saw my eyes And walked back to bed Where you straddled me in sit And kissed the salt from cheeks And lay tender palm on my chest To rise..then lower As you found the comfort of us I'm like Nancy on this one...I can't say what I really want to say here, so all I'll say is Whew!! and go off to keep in so I can read it again.   |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'I watched, Half lidded feign of sleep So as not to disturb you Or the beauty of the moment When you turned and in half light I made out the lines between Sun brown and fair Mapping them again To memory….' Yep..... |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I must have missed this one. So sorry. Oh, what your words do to me. More, more. Patricia |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes...more! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...So tenderly written with love. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
You my love are The rose with petals soft That grows wild along the hills Where streams are born and I would not pluck you from that which you are born less you wilt and I lose your love. Wow.... speechless here... [This message has been edited by Skyfire (06-15-2003 09:18 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Cpat Hair - beautifully tender in its romantic words. Nice pen, very nice pen... BC |
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NickTofteland Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 74MN, USA |
Nothing less than amazing. Wonderful write. Psalms 20:7 "Some trust in chariots and some in horses, but we trust in the name of the Lord our God." |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
i'd say you're in the zone. could i borrow a cup of muse?  |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
never ceasing to amaze me. never. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
The moon is crescent tonight And sheds longer rays or light Through our window Reminding me of how unlike The open Mongol plains This place is................." very Much Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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