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Maybe Tomorrow
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Maybe Tomorrow |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Too many stops and i'm wondering why all six carriages are crawling with hate dropping people closer to their homes? Play hangman with me the missing letters are we but you've already tied the noose nearer than before to my mind Now i remember just why i laughed every escape you make lacks a ticket platform rain tastes heavier than before. |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
nice |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Now i remember just why i laughed every escape you make lacks a ticket platform rain tastes heavier than before strong ending lines... very nicely done |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
power packed punch at the end there! awesome write! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
whewwww, this packed a punch...walloped me right in the heart...but then I think...welp, you know something, you've experienced a love like non other in your lifetime...and that in itself was worth the pain...the hurt...the loss...and perhaps lady jane...you will love again, just as much, if not more...better and with the soul mate of your being. Wishing you much strength and happiness. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Now i remember just why i laughed every escape you make lacks a ticket platform rain tastes heavier than before. I don't know what to say, Little friend, so I'll just give you more hugs....   We love you, Gemma girl xoxoxo Ethel Mae |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"Play hangman with me the missing letters are we but you've already tied the noose " You write so well~ *envy* Enjoyed  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Play hangman with me the missing letters are we but you've already tied the noose Aye loov is grand in'it? Hugs ta yoo |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Maybe tomorrow .... the trip will be worth it and the rain will stop. I can see the soul in the depth of your skies. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
every escape you make lacks a ticket Mannn ya know? I know . . . love the metaphors in this gem cool very cool write indeed (well the content no but the image yes) xxoo |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Definately a keeper. I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Deeply enjoyed! ~ Emotions in this are clearly stated! ~ I liked this  ARCTIC WIND |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
good closing lines! In his mantle gray he walked one day across a shining floor and with crystal key in secrecy he opened an ivory door -J.R.R. Tolkien(T.Bombadil) |
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