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Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2003-06-24 12:19 PM

Single cells ain’t got no bars,
just grey steel doors
and cement walls
and cement floors
each with a drain
so when you puke
they bring the hose,
and flood the cell
through grey steel doors
that open out,
don’t open in
johns made of steel,
stainless steel,
no porcelain to crack or break,
as bare bulbs glare
from wire cages,
while down the run
a tweaker rages,
picking worms from out his arm
while in the cells,
the single cells
without no bars
you try to sleep
when someone yells,
and then the banging
incessant banging
of head to door
then bangs no more
bare bulbs go out
comes one last shout
as things go black
in single cells
which ain’t got bars,
just cement floors
and cement walls
behind steel doors
in shades of grey
tomorrow comes
another day.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-06-24 01:16 AM

Hmmm....this sounds like you know what you're talking about, or you've got a very good imagination. LOL

Very good writing. It sounded real.

Hugs

Ethel

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2003-06-24 02:09 AM

Geez Tim and I thought the holding center down here was bad . . .
not that I know what that is like
awesome write
xxoo

Black Swan
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 165
on the moon

3 posted 2003-06-24 02:30 AM

Brutally honest.
This is reality, you described it well,and made something good out of that harsh,bland place
enjoyed
~Talia

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-06-24 03:33 AM

dang! that's hard

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2003-06-24 06:45 AM

If anyone fails to capture the gist of this write,
they'd best read it again.
Excellent portrayal of a place
that at best
should have no reason to be....

sigh.

timothysangel1973

Senior Member

since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

6 posted 2003-06-26 01:59 AM

Okay Sunshine has me thinking now if I am understnding this one or not. Done read it twice.....do I have it or not?

martina
Member

since 2003-06-19

Posts 59

7 posted 2003-06-26 09:26 AM

Great write it  tells us what it is really like it gives us the reality.Hope you write more about stuff like that.It is more real that way.


           Martina

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

8 posted 2009-09-07 01:33 PM

I agree with Sunshine! lol

ARCTIC WIND

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