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ecrivan
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my own state

0 posted 2003-06-23 10:59 PM


Shipped to a special house
known for it's room under the stairs
known for a jealous ritual of affairs
kept under lock and key
disallowed to be free...


Sent with a special mark
a mark of wizardry to evolve
and mysteries of evil to solve
in cahoots with peers to sweep...
away with the decadent heap


Was it you who learned to ride a broom
was it you who vanished from your room
under the stairs, kept with no supper
a rogue, imposter or david copper..


Come to share your adventure with me
am still locked up in my home tree
put a mark of wizardry on my forehead
to venture from this world of the dead...


[This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-23-2003 11:01 PM).]

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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
1 posted 2003-06-23 11:47 PM


chilling write my friend
littlewing
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New York
2 posted 2003-06-23 11:49 PM


Martin:

goodness this one creeped me out
awesome write
xxoo  

ecrivan
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my own state
3 posted 2003-06-24 12:20 PM


Raph,

fightened?...it's just the final rhyme..I was wondering about changing the last word..but it does seem to summerize that state of sleep so many of us are in.

Littlewing,

definitely not your average love poem man


Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
4 posted 2003-06-24 12:24 PM


No not the line in itself but as you said the state that many are in..i find it chiiling how many are locked in things both internal and external..ok i'm probably not making much sense so I'm off..great writing as usual. go habs go..grins
passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2003-06-24 04:35 AM


kinda glad you're not the average love poem man
ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10
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my own state
6 posted 2003-06-24 07:28 AM


Raph,

you're not off at all, were all kind of locked in...hope the Als can do what the Expos haven't

Passing,

pleaseure to read that


[This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-24-2003 07:28 AM).]

Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
7 posted 2008-08-13 01:41 PM


Spookalishicous


lol
ARCTIC WIND

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