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Girlygirl Tears
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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Worn and tattered from too many winters, the tree stands without a prayer of Summer rhapsody, as Spring has shirked its branches bare. I cry in vain for you girlygirl tears, standing naked before you stripped of pride, without even a mere glance or kindness from you. Weary with rain, the trees can delude into dreams of rebirth as their falling tears still thrive beneath them on receptive green. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so sad but I loved the whole poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
the trees can delude into dreams of rebirth Ironically was thinking about this today, more generally about the seasons and cycles and how eventually things change..or maybe as you say that's just delusion |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks guys, raf.....it depends on the day and on the mood, this water sign just is too changeable , cant stay fixed on any thing too long , dark or light |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
inkedgoddess - a touch to wipe away those girlygirl tears... BC |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh boy, I really liked that receptive green! Don't you be crying now girly girl! I'm so glad you're back Michele~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"I cry in vain for you girlygirl tears, standing naked before you stripped of pride, without even a mere glance or kindness from you." I've been that man....and I've learned that if a man deserves the pronoun, he will return honesty, all that he can see and understand....and then honesty is kindness....kindness being love, and love is not just its own repayment, but an invitation for love to be returned. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hang on to those "dreams of rebirth" and look forward to more glorious days of "Summer rhapsody"!  A wonderfully descriptive and emotional write! Warm hugs, Linda |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
. . . those tears God . . . delusion? hmm . . I would rather have the tears sometimes than none at all . . . I know - sick you named this beautifully Michele xxoo |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Michele, I like this poem, though it is sad. And.....speaking of delusion??? We all need hope and dreams, or we would all be most miserable... and, delusion....who's to say that magic isn't real....sometimes.......so, if we don't believe....sometimes....we might miss out on the one time it is real... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome writing! I missed you! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
good point Ethel . . . |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
woo hoo! michelle is back!  |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Nice poem....glad you mentioned trees and stuff....alot better than you know who or what. Girlygirl tears need to gently kissed away....not wiped |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Nothing wrong with girly girl tears... if they open a soul to understanding or release the pain of the past.... nicely done Inked... I enjoyed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You do the best stuff with leaves. Not kidding. This is just lovely. I could see it.  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for the nice feedback, yes, serene one, i do have a thing with those leaves, truly and really, kids, beneath the shell, i am truly a pathetic girlygirl afterall [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (06-10-2003 08:08 AM).] |
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