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Independence Day |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
Hear what I say Act like I do This is the way I push on you Just like the day Felt out of tune I walked away And left the room In came the sun Outshined the moon No more the one That you impugn I found the road Out from the dark And so I strode To find my mark Now I’m out there Unguided hand Breathing new air Making my stand |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
really like the ending of this...  |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
nice |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
"Now I’m out there Unguided hand Breathing new air Making my stand" Excellent close of wonderful poem about true inner freedom. Nice write. TD |
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apoetdreams Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 52NJ, USA |
I like this poem and also really likeed the end as well. Nice write.  Make your words as sweet as honey, someday you may have to eat them. [This message has been edited by apoetdreams (06-03-2003 12:36 PM).] |
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