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Asleep 15 Years
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Asleep 15 Years |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Is it so strange to lie awake grasp for a vision... heaven's sake minds awake behind eye lids the world awaits ya kid! asleep for centuries..life has its forms mutated through cosmic dust norms invisible particles dance to surround sound mind awake...yet the lids remain shut for heaven's sake...what to make of it. Take the happy ones who lace mud with straw, content with a ground meal loaf or two... grapple with the vision of a needed flute To play for hardened sorrows to escape so strange eyes remain open...to lie awake peeled to a ceiling fan to grasp ideas of new encounters. Though I sailed the seas asleep for centuries my life took to different costumes on the way my manners became acquainted to the odd custom, but my eyelids were difficult to open had to manoeuvre among assorted corrective lenses.. then to open a pair of eyes there's a world I despised yet I must continue must sound out lonely flute notes grasp ever pervasive encounters... have the present slide nto anonymity... for I have slept for so many years there came and went all those peers [This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-01-2003 06:10 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is very interesting. I really liked it. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I have some of those contempary and temporary encounters also. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Keth, meeting people on the constant go in this endless shuffle of cards... loner, I like the cold hands bit..it is the heart that matters |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
thought-provoking as always |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Good write  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
though I sailed the seas asleep for centuries my life took to different costumes on the way ~*~ Some day, I may ask you to throw some lines at me, that I might use for my very own... this...has very special meaning to me...thank you, Ecrivan. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
thanks for allowing us to share a moment on that sailboat |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Martin: geez this is brilliant: though I sailed the seas asleep for centuries yes yes yes and kind of makes you want to shut your eyes back up sometimes doesnt it? the question lies: to see or not to see . . . hard choices brilliant write xxoo |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Littlewing, And some of the entourage is really not worth seeing...the old adage ignorance is bliss holds Passing you're a regular reader, thanks Karilea, anytime you need a line or two...drop a line  [This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-01-2003 06:21 PM).] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Midnite, am asail on a regular basis..yet I hit shoals and underwater cliffs scathe my purpose. Bernie, Please to receive a comment from you...the closest I've come to your job is working for Teamsoft, a calendaing software 2 years back. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-01-2003 06:19 PM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thought this was a very interesting write so I thought I'd send it back up. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
---a rude awakening! Set sail once more and hopefully the seas will be smooth and friendly and worth keeping your eyes open! Warm hugs, EA |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Ethome, thought provoking yes...always looking disappointment in the eye unflinchingly Earth Angel, ouch..all that salt water spray...hehe  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
My friend this touches deeply it cuts close |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
To play for hardened sorrows to escape so strange eyes remain open...to lie awake peeled to a ceiling fan to grasp ideas of new encounters. I do that, more often than I like M |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Maureen, just goes to show you..I do have a ceiling fan too..oh! Aenimal, trying my best at being cutting edge in sentiment at least...let the words work for us |
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