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In Burning Fields
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In Burning Fields |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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I'm a specter blindly running through a vision darkly standing wrapped around me like a shroud, a whirling burning cloud, sweetly sickening my mind, distorting what I find protecting me, from horror and the memories chasing me. I admit I am afraid, I know this fog of mine can't last for long, were it a song I wouldn't fear its loss, but I am weak, and when my shroud begins to fade I am afraid. Please help me; we're all dying and I'm frightened. I could light up like a highway flare, yet what to see that isn't there, illusionary these they fail to bind me; by chain and shackle I'm set free, while even now I see not going on, It's clear it will be worse before we're gone. Oh my God, where can I place the blame? I call a name, it issues forth a silent prayer to plead are we to bleed? Right there standing; it's a trick, be still the words unspoken hot and thickly clinging in my brain weaving branded braids of banded pain, as the very ground beneath me starts to sway still I try to find the words, I need to find an answer to believe, an answer to explain the path I see. There isn't one. Please help me; we're all dying and I'm frightened. ©2003 by icebox |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Are we not all running, frightened at times, lacking sometimes the understanding of what it is we flee from so hurriedly? You expressed this feeling well. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I have at times thought longingly that ignorance is bliss. Thank you for reading my poem and for your comment. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
This is so clear to me.(and I don't always understand other's words since I have been sheltered from the "sad of the world" until recently.) You are a poet of heart. This is a "forever" poem, one of those you want to print out and have on your wall. M |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
nakedthoughts ~ then we come from worlds apart; nice to find a common meeting ground. Thank you for reading my poem and for your kind comment. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"be still the words unspoken hot and thickly clinging in my brain weaving branded braids of banded pain," I like this so much....  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
We should stand our ground to move past the fear. Yes, unfortantely, we, as humans, are terminal. We are all dying. But we should live while we can, unshrouded by fear of our own demise. I find that so many things I haved feared (coming out of a very controlling marriage)and have now conquered...makes me wonder why I ever fell into the trap of fear. I moved past it, worked through it, conquered it. And now I feel free. Free to live! Hope this makes sense and I properly interpreted your piece. I really liked this, Icebox. You make me think, which is sometimes a dangerous thing according to my friends. They think I think too much! Much enjoyed, Patricia |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome writing! love the pic! we can finally put a face with the name...thanks |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
SEA ~ Thank you for reading my poem and for your comment. I am glad you liked it. Patricia ~ Thank you for reading my poem. I enjoyed your interpretation. Each apex of fear (which we survive) makes us more able to deal with that level of stress in the future. You are right about thinking sometimes being dangerous. One of my favorite quotes is from a politician who mis-spoke and said, "...the mind is a terrible thing." I am glad you enjoyed this poem. passing shadows ~ Thank you. I am pleased that you enjoyed it. Let me know if you see my picture on the post office wall, OK? *grin* |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
icebox~ I really enjoyed reading this...the rhythm, the flow, the words...the whole of it...wonderful. I'll be looking for more from you. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
vlraynes ~ Thank you for reading my poem and for your comment. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox Fear cripples...makes it hard to see the path or believe in anything but the steps already walked. Just a thought that came to me while reading this for the third time. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Martie ~ This is very true. Sometimes I think most people live in one of two states, either fear or quiet desperation. Either can cause paralysis. Thank you for reading and for your comments. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Not unlike Vincent, dear friend. The mind can really torment, chase you into dark corners and leave you wishing for that damn rainbow to hurry up and get here, for the storms have been too close together. Peaceful thoughts to you. Now, go open that window and let the wind carry it all away....all except the poetry.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
stunning! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks for revealing the depth of these types of feelings in these words. The beauty of poetic language. I appreciated this Eric |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done... strong images and words. to enjoy this rainy morning... |
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Ishmael Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 51 |
"we're all dying and I'm frightened." Indeed. Well written. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Midnitesun ~ Ah...Vincent! A favorite of mine. Go figure, right? *laugh* I still have both my ears though (but I did give up painting because it was too consuming). Thank you for reading my poem and for your comments. Oh...I always leave the windows open, even in winter. *smile* passing shadows ~ Thank you for reading my poem. I am pleased that you like it. ethome ~ It was difficult to put what I was really feeling into words; this merely comes close. Thank you for reading it and for your comments. Cpat Hair ~ I love the rain. There was rain here yesterday, a fine soft rain that went on for hours. This poem is more about a hard rain that almost fell. Thank you for reading my poem and for your comments. Ismael ~ Thank you for reading my poem and for taking time to comment. |
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22NICK22 Member
since 2003-05-29
Posts 54 |
icebox, I'm very anxious in pondering, when exactly is your book comming out? I'm also wanting to know what you think of my poetry! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
22NICK22 ~ *laugh* Is there a book deal I should know about? Hasn't anyone told you that there is no market for poetry? I do read your poetry. I am often at a loss for comments. The ideas are raw and the energy pours out of them like a river. Thank you for reading my poem and for your comment. |
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