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Softer Shade of Sorrow... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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 I want a softer shade of sorrow when the summer storm comes to wash my sins away sweet drops of confession in puddles - I pray whispering of wanting finding strength somewhere within raging, calling to the sky not another night..... I have no more tears to cry under thick moody, brooding cloud flashes of light and rumble-speak scream in heavy, angry air... an intensity to match my own in reverent rain dance prayer hands cover upturned face then fall slowly to aching heart please.....make these thoughts of him stop.... tears mingle with the rain .....I pray upon every drop.... ~SEA~ |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I too have expeirenced anger like this with my ex Greg. Great write. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Susan...I can't even begin to tell you how deeply this one touches right now...this hurts. And this... "please.....make these thoughts of him stop...." Amen. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (06-01-2003 11:34 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful..haunting..heartfelt write Susan. You pen your feelings so very well... Yes, it is SO good to have you back. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Hey you! Girl that was an extremely heartwrenching, well written poem and not at all our usual romantic Sea. Susan, that was fantastic writing, I sure enjoyed this keeper. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
SEA - if this is your feelings I feel your pain, if not, I still feel it in the words. It's that good... BC |
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apoetdreams Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 52NJ, USA |
Wonderful picture and poem. Also, I love the title and think it would make a great "hook" for a song! (Do you write music too)?  Make your words as sweet as honey, someday you may have to eat them. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I really like this Sea There so much going on and with such passion. Beautiful action!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
my friend... you know the drops listen only to the wind.... nice to read you again... I'm around if you need to talk. |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
"not another night..... I have no more tears to cry" Maybe the sky is crying for you... So that you don't have to bear the sorrow anymore. Good write. “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ I'm with Vicky on this one~ Beautiful emote of the heart~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I want a softer shade of sorrow when the summer storm comes to wash my sins away sweet drops of confession in puddles - I pray whispering of wanting finding strength somewhere within raging, calling to the sky not another night..... I have no more tears to cry ================================ ahhh the rhyme..the alliterations..the ache... and the rain that you love so... both the ache and the storms are always the perfect muse for your pen. very cool brooding write Sue-girlie. Im still imagining your voice ... |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
awesome write! |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
The emotion in this is quite intense! |
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Ishmael Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 51 |
Very nice. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Ohhhhh. I know this. I have attacks of this when I am alone. You did a wonderful job of expressing the anger mixed with pain. And the graphic you used perfectly described the emotion. Thanks for sharing, Patricia |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
terrific write,,,,, QjQ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'tears mingle with the rain .....I pray upon every drop....' Have I mentioned how cool it is that you're back????  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Sometimes the heart of the storm is to best place to comfort sorrow, for there when we hear the thunder claps of Him, we know we are not alone and I'd take that over a mere cloudy day! (sad sigh) I send many angel hugs your way, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Wonderfully written and expressed, I think we all have felt feelings similar to what you expressed here.  Julie "Dont cry because its over, smile because it happened. " |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
This has Everything from start to finish Sea. Beautiful write, very, very well written. jwesley |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
hands cover upturned face then fall slowly to aching heart please.....make these thoughts of him stop.... Oh, the feeling in this makes my heart ache. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Your kind words, your sweetness.....all of you, thank you so much. It means a great deal to me.  [This message has been edited by SEA (06-02-2003 10:40 PM).] |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Wow. Sometimes I have to go out and stand in the rain and be washed in the blood of the storm; for some feelings it is the only way. I hope the evening rests gently on your shoulders. |
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goodhrtd Junior Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 12 |
What a wonderful poem. You capture the heart of the storm in the emotion of the work. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you both very much |
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