Open Poetry #26 |
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'Neath Watering Oak |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA ![]() |
Among the meadow of the green greatly stands the watering oak. Where battles raged the hard fought land and whispers fell the ears in cloak. A wish was made upon the halt of wars that waged upon the dale. To be laid down beneath the limbs of mighty oak ‘neath darkened vail. A tomb was laid of rough hewn stone where in the king would lie if killed. But when the oak was sighted, seen it was this place then spoken, willed. And in the tomb of darkness damp no souls were laid in honored sleep. For ‘neath the oak a promise kept the king then lay in earthen keep. Though now the years have downed the limbs a trunk still stands burned, black and charred. Where warriors come to hail their king from battles won, from battles warred. Beside the trunk, below the knell a stone does lie among the weed. A story told, the oak did stand through raging wars and crimson bleed. And as the years do take a toll upon the trunk once tall and proud A warrior rides and waits the knoll to be the next ‘neath oaken shroud. [This message has been edited by Magnus (05-28-2003 08:03 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This needs no photo, no illustration. You just did that quite masterfully with your words. You told a story, AND painted the picture Mag. And funny, but when it reads easy, it SEEMS easy, but oh yes, I appreciate the work that goes into that. You just keep knocking them outta the park. ![]() |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (big hugggssssssss) Oh Barry, this is a very noble dedication, dearest friend, the tree may be gone but the roots are still deep in the soil and the blood of the king has stained them to a golden amber! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, seems the purple blood is always boiling in your chivalrous heart, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
terrific poetry!!!!! gMt |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Karen, you are right....none of these are a cake walk. But each of them are fun, because I see that picture too. Thanx, and we will try for another home run!! Noah, ya know we love ya for all you have given with each cheerful reply, thanx. Glenn, it is just fun...much enjoy this, and thanx for the comment. Appreciated! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah very well put together with such a pure element of traditional poetry. Nice! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Always something new to learn, from such a masterful artist. Enjoyed the message and the theme. TD |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ The title drew me ... the write outstanding~ Just yesterday, I was on a lens-walk through my woods ... snapped some haunting photos of the stately water oaks ... and though they are good photographs ... your poetic voice painted the vision even more magnificiently~ Thank you for being a poet ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Holy Smokes you are good !! What a tale you have given us to enjoy...again and again..as it is going into my library!! hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Someone said the title drew them to read...I say the author's name drew me to read. I can always expect a magnficent read from you, Mr. Magnus. But, of course, I must make sure I am not distracted by life...which in my house is rare. I need time to savor, read and reread. Then I wonder, then I ponder, how does Mr. Magnus write with such eloquence...never failing. Perhaps you will share your secret? I have a feeling it is a gift from God which cannot be explained with words of this world. So, maybe I should instead count my blessings that you are here with us. Beautiful as always, Patricia |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
Always, always our romantic Magnus fills full our hearts. |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Magnificent. I love the form. I will have to check your other poems as well. Great job on this one. CG |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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