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Midnitesun

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Gaia

0 posted 2003-05-31 01:14 PM

I hated that last chapter...
the one that foretold
the closing of the book
of our love affair.

I had a different ending in mind.
No, it wasn’t one of roses and honeydew.
But it was a whole lot more pleasant
than the ending you wrote for us.

Hearing the walls echo my screams
at night doesn’t help me sleep.
But I would have it
no other way.

For to forget
you
would be the death of my soul,
and it’s not ready to go just yet.

But some nights the wall
screams too loudly and
I curl up fetal,
remembering

the way you held me
before the walls of our love
crumbled into dust
with a silent cry.

Funny,
I had always thought
walls coming down imagery
would be positive.

passing shadows
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displaced

1 posted 2003-05-31 01:17 PM

this one aches

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2003-05-31 03:54 PM

Another testimony that love is a game of win or lose...like a baseball game...sometimes you win and sometimes you lose...to believe otherwise will guarantee disappointment...James

Mistletoe Angel

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3 posted 2003-05-31 03:59 PM

(big hugggsssssssss) I like the way James pointed it out, if one truly thinks love is perfect, then that person is one sad soul; love MUST be true, honest, and faithful, yet we all make mistakes hat are not out of dishonesty and that makes the adventure of love so much more healthier as we have the ability to exercise with the tools of virtue! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kacy, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2003-05-31 05:47 PM

Hey you.

Yer on my cloud again.

grin.

I was just thinking in those terms myself.

shaking my head and sighing

"There's GOT to be a better ending..."

loved this.

Marilyn
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5 posted 2003-05-31 07:25 PM

I liked the way the feelings came through in this piece. Nice write.

Marilyn.

Midnitesun

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Gaia

6 posted 2003-05-31 07:30 PM

Thanks to each of you.
Though this is an ache from the past, it still lingers.

icebox
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in the shadows

7 posted 2003-05-31 07:39 PM

Some cuts never completely heal Sometimes it is good to open the windows of the soul and let the wind blow through even if it brings a little rain.

Thank you for sharing this.

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

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8 posted 2003-05-31 07:54 PM

Heartachingly real! I think you need to write a new chapter.

Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

vandana

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9 posted 2003-05-31 08:27 PM

enjoyed

bbent
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10 posted 2003-06-01 01:34 AM

this one's just to real,like you been living in my head though i'm sure most people have been there...indeed a special gift you have,your ability to pen life in verse but this one got a sting i won't soon forget...excellent write.

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

Richy
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11 posted 2003-06-01 01:49 AM

Kacy, have you ever seen the movie, “It Happened One Night” with Clark Gable and Claudette Colbert?

(One of my favorites)

Your poem reminded me of their, “Walls of Jericho.” I won’t tell you what happened in the end, in case you haven’t seen it.

You wrote:

“I hated that last chapter...
the one that foretold
the closing of the book
of our love affair.”

Hey, who ever said that the story of our life had to be contained in one book?

Heck, make it a whole library!

I hope your well on your way to,

“The Guiding Light Of The Midnight Sun Volume II”

Coming to the bookshelves of Barnes and Noble, soon...

I really enjoyed this one Kacy,

Richy

Midnitesun

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Gaia

12 posted 2003-06-01 03:19 AM

ice, warm smiling thanks for opening another window for me

Kethry, yes, I agree

vandana, thank you dear

Ray, I'm so sorry if I caused you any pain

I believe you do know this heartache.

Richy? LOL at your B& N comment. Can I give you a giant hug for that?

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