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Gift wrapped
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Gift wrapped Subjective suspense detailed the penning of me. My sins and sorrows were uncovered one by one and inked into darkness. I wrote what could not be spoken and gave life to that which had want to remain buried. Of all the blunders recorded in my life neither my sanity nor lack thereof were excluded. I held tightly to my pen for I thought it a savior, oh so certain that I would soon be able to write myself wings. But my pen and I we did not fly, instead with leaden feet my paper turned cold, unfeeling and eventually unyielding. Dreams collapsed inward; exhaustion was not excused nor forgiven. Silence and my pen argued and angered. On the altar of absolution I laid it down – but no respite was to be found, my words still had need of pardon. Round and round they wound, expanding, awaiting a sky high explosion. When back to earth I crashed, in desperation, I penned a single prayer. I watched it come to life and soar upwards…my transformation began. I gave my pen to God; He gift-wrapped it with his blessings and gave it back again. [This message has been edited by jellybeans (05-29-2003 01:17 PM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I am so VERY glad you posted this... I was about to email you and beg you to do so... thank you for saving my aching knees! *G* Reading it again just makes me more impressed... Through trials no one should face, your pen has poured forth your heart's cry... but it couldn't stop the cry or the anguish that caused it... or write a song instead. Now, I think we're really going to be in for a treat... and more importantly, you and your pen will reacquaint yourselves with peace and joy and hope. *S* This is a beautiful song of faith... and one of your best. *S* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You just tickle me. You can take a seemlingly simple subject matter and give it such an in-depth examination...reading you becomes a participatory meditation! and your first line? "Subjective suspense detailed the penning of me" This actually becomes the thing which you describe. Clever girl, you!  |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
suthern.....*smile* you know me, posting it makes it 'official' now I can't go back even if I would be crazy enough to want to...thank you lady, for you and your comments ser...thank you, I rarely start and don't finish a poem, when they come to me they must be written, but this one seemed to hold a vested interest in my future, and I couldn't write the finish I wanted, until it was true...thank you for your comments and your care |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
well done |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
jellybeans The trip your poetry took, was your spirit's ride...and the end just perfect, for in the end is the beginning. Wonderful! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
brad thank you martie, yes I think you are right *smiling here* and it is a journey I am looking forward to, for the first time in a very long time....thank you so much for your comments |
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