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Come Not the Night...
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Come Not the Night... |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
If bright of sun would never sleep, And dark of night would never rise, Then perchance I would not weep, Or ever need to close my eyes. As black night casts out its spell, Dark shadows reach as tentacles Pulling me down moss covered well, Cold waters grasp as manacles Preventing me from reaching out In vain for hope, instead I flounder, No one there to hear my shout, What is my sin? Why comes night's rounder? If bright of sun would never sleep, Then never would come midnight's warnings, And tears would fade at end of weep, In ever morn, end of dark's mournings. [This message has been edited by Tim (05-27-2003 12:19 AM).] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
with so much of our lives spent asleep...I think you've tackled a good topic and get it a surreal slant 
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome rhyming! great theme! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ok, this cinches is...I've got to keep practicing on sonnets...you make it look so smooth, so easy...and as beautiful as only you can make them. Thank you Sir...for this keeper... |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
"If bright of sun would never sleep, Then never would come midnight's warnings, And tears would fade at end of weep, In ever morn, end of dark's mournings." very cool lines...I love the cadence and the theme of this one...excellent job!! sp just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday... |
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