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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2003-05-26 02:46 AM



Throwing up my arms
moving in beside myself
measuring my happiness
through faraway looks in your eyes.

Where time is of the essence
that lies so far and few between
fitting in the corners
around the boarders of my mind.

Turned halfway in the middle
coming together and apart
just when I think I'm over you
tearing pieces of my heart.

If time could just stand still
I might find a better way
without losing my direction
when the weeks run into days.

Sorting out my feelings
stacked on top of one another
rearranging my content
that stirs my restless wonder.

I no longer look for pieces
that make my missing incomplete
shaping things, imperfectly
once the figures factor in.

Then it comes to me so clearly
slipping in beside myself
in that moment interlocking
forever,and unfinished~

~*~

*revised*no date, no time~


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wranx
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1 posted 2003-05-26 02:51 AM


You just get better n' better Bluesy.
Like this one much.

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2 posted 2003-05-26 03:00 AM


You sure do!  This had its twists and turns and kept me right to the very last word.  I felt the gut wrenching of this one big time, and that is great writing.
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3 posted 2003-05-26 03:02 AM


awesome write! every verse is perfect!
Richy
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4 posted 2003-05-26 03:27 AM



BluesSerenade, I’m really glad, that in the end, it came to you so clearly...

It must be hard to find your way sometimes, in a heart as big as yours...


Your poetry, really is amazing!

Thanks as always, for gracing us with your heartfelt splendor...


Richy


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5 posted 2003-05-26 10:37 AM


You have written a very normal part of all
our lives well.  Peace to you and in your
heart...Thanx Bluesy..

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6 posted 2003-05-26 10:53 AM


BluesSerenade~
I so enjoy reading you~

'If time could just stand still'

I've certainly known that moment-of-thought~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
7 posted 2003-05-26 12:51 PM


If time could just stand still
I might find a better way
without losing my direction
when the weeks run into days.

my favorite part...I sit here sometimes wondering how time has slipped away and yet it seems like only yesterday that...

~smiling to your words~

M

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in the shadows
8 posted 2003-05-26 12:56 PM


Love touches the timeless part of the soul...and so did you.

Beautiful work, thank you for sharing it.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
9 posted 2003-05-26 01:04 PM


This definitely was a bluer shade of blue.

"Turned halfway in the middle
coming together and apart..."

Yep! I have known that feeling but could never have said it sooo well!

Healing hugs,
Linda

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
10 posted 2003-05-26 03:37 PM


Thanks to all of you for reading me.
Sometimes I think I am so far out there,
but hey, it's not such a bad place to be.
Reality checks are a fact of life, even if
I am missing something.  

Hugs all around~

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11 posted 2003-05-26 09:38 PM




(sigh) Faster.....sooner.....NOW!!! That's the way it has to be, while all the same I wish we could get some nice Kodak moments for once! (big hugggsssssss) If only there can be progress and all the same be caesuras within progress, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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