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Between the cornfields |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Gone now from city clatter of brake over train track, wail of blue strobe spinning through any one of a thousand drunken nights it is too quiet here… against a background of normalcy I find no inspiration as if the number of my days was overlooked though purpose has expired still I walk and speak now without vision or verse and know how it feels to fade |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Life takes on it's own pale meadows, absent from distractions...easily could make us restless... But between the cornfields, that is where the flora and fauna reside. We must look to see them. Excellent write. TD |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Duncan I can relate so well to how you are feeling. Lately the words just haven't been flowing and I was at a loss to explain why. It was like a huge part of me went missing but I am glad to say that it seems to have returned and I hope the same happens to you. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I know the feeling, when it seems we are fading fast and nothing will ever be the same again. I guess it's an age thing, and here I am fading with the best of them. ~I assure you, your words never pale~ You got room on that porch of yours? I need a drink, I'm not picky, I'll sit on the steps, I wouldn't want to take your rocker, (unless you fall off) |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Whacha drinkin'? And ahhh...fell off my rocker long ago.  |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Duncan, Everyone needs a reprieve in order to be renourished. Even God rested on the the seventh day! You even write well when you are in the dulldrums..  SG [This message has been edited by SimplyGold (05-25-2003 10:58 PM).] |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Within your words is vision and emotion...those things will never fade...Silence holds its own beauty...Well done.. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ok you take the hammock and chill for a while. I said, I am not picky, I'll have whatever you're having. Preferably wine, the hard stuff makes me dizzy...and I would hate to trip over myself. Real women don't fall, they wake up and wonder what in the world was I thinking! Yank, yank!  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I'll see your yank...  /pip/Forum58/HTML/001762.html |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Wine huh? Do you mind if it's in a beer bottle? [This message has been edited by Duncan (05-25-2003 11:27 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It depends on the label, I am NOT a cheap drunk mind you. That was a nice poem, kind of sad though, but you know what they say, beauty is in the eye of the beholder and looks can be deceiving. Sometimes what we're seeing isn't really happening at all... and sometimes there is more. That's when the going gets gooder, goober! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Yeah, it's got a label... I see we're playing 'Let's confuse the blonde' again. Translator Aisle 12. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Figured you weren't bottling your own, I'm talking about the label, clueless one. Get your own damn translator, I have moved on from isle 12. But I won't check out just yet, I'm still shopping for something good to bring to the porch. *wink* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what an ending!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Those are some pretty vast cornfields to get you to fade so quickly...you've got to quit watching Field of Dreams...and build one of your own, so we can come [and watch you sit on the porch with the poet people!] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is a powerful piece, Duncan. You've captured the mood and feel of an emptiness here, that really came through in these sentiments. Excellent writing. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Damn you're good.... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Just read all of your replies and that is the sum total of what mine is! I especially love the Bluesy ones! Healing hugs and an understanding smile, EA |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
still I walk and speak now without vision or verse and know how it feels to fade =================== SO then what are these???? reads like poetry to me ... damn fine poetrt... so the muse is melancholy...not mute... I can live with that...how bout you? Besides..ya have to write once in awhile or the Capt will call ya a slacker  good to read your signature succinct again Dunc..bout time ya got off the porch... as for those cornfields? I keep telling ya...if ya want inspiration..ya gotta go to the beach hehDarkness cannot drive out darkness ... only light can do that. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
hey, porch puppy! you roasting those ears today? |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
"it is too quiet here… against a background of normalcy" oh how I know that feeling all too well these days...very cool words... "as if the number of my days was overlooked though purpose has expired" some days it just seems that way, doesn't it??? love those lines too...enjoyed the read... oh? and yeah, what JM said...beach beach beach!! all the way.........ain't gonna find 'em in the cornfields, that's fer sher....I'm finding that out all too harshly these days......ok, that's it...heh did I mention, GREAT WRITE....... just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nice work Dunc... somehow I don't see you fading, but then again I do so know the feeling that you are. Nice to see you write something again. |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Oh My!!!! Duncan, you take a lady's breath away...... ever deep...runs |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
and know how it feels to fade Duncan, Duncan, Duncan.......  Now where in the world is this coming from? YOU ARE NOT FADING!!!!!! My friend, you are a very big part of this home of ours here at Passions In Poetry and we sure do miss you when you aren't here. But, you know what? I understand about being away from the city. When I first moved out here to the country the quietness was so loud it deafened me...or I thought it did. But now, driving to visit my parents in the city makes me nervous.  Heart hugs to you, my friend  Ethel |
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