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And Yet, I Die
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And Yet, I Die |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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And Yet, I Die Today, I died. A final act in a series of survival through false promises and battered flesh agony. I’ve long since passed that threshold of cope and God giving me more than I can handle. I’m out of time and understanding of sorrow stained tomorrows that drag me through hell, only to wake the next morning, a reckless ritual, to face it all again. I’ve tried everyone and everything, and still, there are no answers, no Band-Aids large enough to stop the gush of vile throbbing through my heart. And no surgeon has yet to cut out this ache, the listless complacency of it all; this robotic numb with it’s mechanical beat pumping faithless blood through veins. Still, rose-coloured-glass-eye men in white lab coats with their thoughtless theories and indifferent statistics say that it can’t be done. That a heart is unable to break in the science of things. But, as they polish the glass glazed lettering of my name while darkness falls on cemetery stone, I’m proof that a heart can snap, jagged as bone. I cry broken tears in a field of broken dreams, this heart is paper, leprosy torn and without the wind, it cannot fly. Though the lark softly sings outside my window pain, and the sun still stings my skin with cock-eyed smiles, I am paralyzed, fearing not the death that becomes so clear, wanted, inevitable. Hope places its hand on the heave of my chest, as heart, apart, drudges on to pace up and down. Yet, without love, my world has no meaning... inside I die. By Melissa Long-Monette [This message has been edited by Honeybee (05-24-2003 11:25 PM).] |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Without love, or at least without even the sense of love's existence in the world, life has little value. Sad. Life however can always surprise us. I hope the evening rests gently on your shoulders. The poem leaks pain from its pores, yet is an excellent piece of work. Thank you for sharing it. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
*****I cry broken tears in a field of broken dreams, terrific lines and write, you do so well!!! QjQ |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Great piece, I enjoyed reading it very much  well done Julie |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~icebox, QjQ and whiskey: Thank you for reading and for your great replies.~ This poem has been wanting to be written for a long time now and upon reading Aenimal's poem "Love" it all just poured out. So, thanks to Raph for inspiring me yet again Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
God never gives you more than you can handle  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Hope places its hand on the heave of my chest, as heart, apart, drudges on to pace up and down. Yet, without love, my world has no meaning... inside I die. I feel the same as your words...without love...what is there? *s M |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Melissa glad to inspire but sad at the same time. That you feel this way, that i feel this way, that others feel this way..argh |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
You left me speechless with this one Melissa!  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Melissa, painful in write, but beautiful in composition... I think we have all survived a moment in our lives like this.. Excellent use of metaphors throughout.. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Melissa, You write of that side that many know too well but few can express. In the science of living my life I have experienced the broken heart. What I never knew was that friendship can put it back together again. I love your writing almost as much as I adore your spirit!  &  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) You know...I just saw Bruce Almighty in the theatre today (it is a wondefful movie) and some parts really made me cry and deeply touched me. The way Jim Carrey's character stared through the mirror in prayer and could see Jennifer Aniston (she plays his girlfriend) in pain and praying for him, then Jim prays in the rain on a highway and gets hit by a truck and meets God in heaven where he unselfishly wishes his love happiness and how in himself and being himself at first, he got his love back all over again as he recovered in the hospital! (sigh) I brought this up just to show that to love, you must start by being and believing yourself, you are the calyx and the love you shall find is like the petals that decorate your heart! But give to yourself first, God less You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
wow... I don't know what to say but that. This is excellent, I can feel it, and I can see it. I hope, that things get better for you. Keep writing, though, this is great. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, You jam the door of the damn There is no room for I am. Excellent write my dear,  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Melissa. Hauntingly sad..yet so well worded. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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jennirey Member
since 2002-01-24
Posts 198North Richland HillsTx |
Such Sadness, (virtual hugs) all brought together in such a well written poem. Jen |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
yes, this is an awesome write of pain.I love it, words that make life real. Jason |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
What do the scientists know?? I can attest to the fact, a heart can break. And it takes so little, yet so very much to mend. Very nicely written, the sentiments I've often felt... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Melissa: "I have long since passed that threshold of cope" EXACTLY wonder where coping starts and madness begins brilliant write xxoo |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
We are taught that you can only survive when you have air, water, and food. But without any purpose, or meaning. Without something to really live for. And without some kind of feeling of love. Then it can really make you ponder your own existence. Very nice write Honeybee! I enjoyed it very much, Richy |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Melissa~ This is so sad, yet so beautifully penned. Wonderfully expressed, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Melissa - your hurt pours forth with your pen. Hang in there, my best to you... BC |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
 BUMP If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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