Open Poetry #26 |
Sky Tears |
Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Sky Tears the sky is crying stars the tears fall here, there little spats of light that break go streaking down the night's enshadowed face tumbling through the surface of an endless depth of space light drops go dropping without sound and never touch the ground when sun comes they'll be falling still a sadness we will never see sky tears in daylight falling endlessly |
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Musicmaker1969
since 2000-06-25
Posts 589Peterborough, Ontario Canada |
Beautifully written and expressed. Very lovely. Jesus lives in my heart! |
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JingleBear Member
since 2003-05-08
Posts 76Pennsylvania, USA |
I loved this! Nice job relating the stars to tears! I really enjoyed this line: *when sun comes they'll be falling still a sadness we will never see |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the sky is crying stars the tears fall here, there little spats of light that break go streaking down the night's enshadowed face ================ well..ya had me from the very cool title on. I was gonna raz ya bout where the next verse is..but this is too lovely to care. well done poet sir. I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Guilty, JM....this little meteor shower did get in the way of our duet....as such things will... I promise to be a good boy and write more as soon as my muse dries herself off a bit, changes into that terrycloth bathrobe I like so much.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Ratleader - one nice write, and h'mmmm, who's in that terry cloth.... BC |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
I shall forever think of the rain as sky tears. Beautifully written SG |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yo Bill --- sometimes nobody's IN it.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I'm just no good tonight..everything I read makes me wanna cry!! this is sooo refreshingly beautiful!! If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed light drops go dropping without sound and never touch the ground Not sure how to reply to such beautiful sadness I feel from this, except |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
There is so much we will never see, or allow others to come that close to where our tears fall. For me, it only adds to my heartache. Sadly, the weeping in this. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Great picture of expression here, much enjoyed, thank you. Sincerely Rick |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
There is definitely something magical about meteor showers. I have even wakened up my daughters in the middle of the night, driven out into the countryside--away from the light pollution of the burbs--for them to behold the splendor of a meteor shower. Wrapped in blankets and armed with binoculars and cameras, we truly enjoy the celestial display. Your poem was absolutely delightful! Thank you! Lovin' hugs, EA |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lovely! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very very nicely written.. the words spill down the page like a meteor shower....lovely. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ This is as lovely a write as I'll read this day~ Softly emoted from the heart~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
this was beautiful...very descriptive. Love it! Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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