Open Poetry #26 |
Giftwrapped |
Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Crying never crossed my mind it was laughing that concerned me sermons have a way of doing that to me I hadn't cried even as those around me did saying our goodbyes by his deathbed as he lay withered and white It was inevitable he'd hung on longer than we'd expected and I'd made my peace with it long before In the church I bowed my head low to hide my smirk as the priest played the crowd the way priests do As the sermon closed and the casket rolled I lost my compusure at the silliness of it all I looked around embarrased to have laughed But as a hand touched my shoulder in sympathy I realized that I was crying and felt the warmth of tears roll down my cheek Nothing had prepared me for the utter finality of the site of him carried away packaged in pine, decorated with flowers and bows A gift to be placed six feet under Death's tree |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This touched in places I cannot describe right now. But I do understand. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
... Thank you for this. ~Heart Hugs, Nancy~ |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
This is so amazing. i have never seen this descibed so beautifully before now. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks everybody, it's been about 3 years since my uncle passed from cancer and this all just came back to me today don't ask me why. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I saw my grandmother when I read this..you know you have a way with words and making me on the verge of crying!? If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Raph, this also touched places in my heart that I can't say now. It brought back memories of my husband's funeral. Every time I think about him, some actions of his I've learned of since he died come rushing to my mind. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Me thinks your Uncle may be around you honey. Raph your feelings were was so wonderfully described here and shows how outstandingly talented you are m'friend. most enjoyed. Maree |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Kris it's my picture too..it maks me cry all the time Ethel I'm sorry Thanks Maree and my uncle bless him was a character right out of an Avati sketch always made me laugh but stubborn as a goat |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I was surprised by the title... but your words fit it well. I have been to many funerals, relatives, friends and neighbors in the last 10 years, and no matter how you think you will react or hold your composure, the memories bring emotions to surface, that often can't be controlled. M |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanks vandana thanks M, it was the image of it..just blew me away |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I cannot express how much this poem evoked so many feelings in me for my Grandma. Raph, you're just too good of a writer and I share your melancholy. I'm saving this~ Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph: even in death . . . you find beauty . . . You know what this one means to me as I know what this means for you . . . and yes . . . that finality . . . I do understand this very well and you know that . . . a brilliant write and I am sorry also he is proud of you - I am sure of that xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (05-21-2003 12:43 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hey Raphael, my mom passed away 23 years ago and it still comes back, I think it always will...hugs to you friend |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
This has me in my law class with tears streaming down my face. After having several deaths recently, these tears are close to the surface as usual. I was fine at my patient's funeral a couple of weeks ago. I sat at the viewing refusing to cry, until they closed the casket. Then I went to the burial with regained composure. I refused to cry until they placed the casket into the ground, at which time I lost it. The pain from years past and from present never seems to fully go away... and you put it quite eloquently... Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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