Open Poetry #26 |
Keeping Peace |
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
larry's challenge~~ /pip/Forum7/HTML/000552.html I scratch, scratch, scratch til I draw blood but my trimmed fingertips won't stop they, programmed to do so, like a delirious dog, clawing, digging mad towards my bone of grief Only then can I break through this exterior and breathe 2 parties collide, 2 conflicting accounts that I believe in Pray, the answer isn't as simple as whoever gets to place his feet on the ground in a game of see-saw No winners, only losers So wipe that smirk off your faces, guarded by indifference walls designed to safeguard your vulnerability but only block well-meaning facilitation You won't listen to this one hand clapping So I'm like a goldfish, confused, aimless, swimming in circles in a bowl of noncommittal Except that I also scratch, scratch, scratch, drawing blood but not yet healed [This message has been edited by kaile (05-20-2003 12:42 PM).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wow. . . you've really stretched with this one kaile. . .I love the line, "you won't listen to this one hand clapping". . . it's perfect. . . great work here my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
*You won't listen to this one hand clapping i liked the way you expressed this write Poetry gives us relief, We give poetry reason. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
a new one for my treasured goldfish bowl peaceful scratching day to you |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
kaile, Thanks for the link! ==================== one hand clapping ==================== It says so much. A discomforting write...as it should be. Well done. I am proud of your work. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
i hope everything is ok. i found a hidden message in it even if you didnt mean it to be there. this is a very powerful pice. i loved how it was written. keep writing.
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ouch |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
You won't listen to this one hand clapping Kaile, thank you for being a peacemaker instead of a troublemaker. That's what the whole world needs........everywhere. Sometimes things should just be allowed to die. Especially when there seems to be no peaceable solution for all the parties concerned. Thank you for this poem. |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
pretty damn good, especially when you stop "telling" us and let the imagery do the work... good job... "more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you" |
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