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Open Poetry #26
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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
0 posted 2003-05-18 07:42 PM

Tracking Metal


I boarded
to take
a journey
wheels spun
so fast
metal melting
I saw
the world
in passing
the view
from window
calmed me
then the
train stopped
suddenly before
my ride
was over
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littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-05-18 07:47 PM

Helen:

this sounds like my life . . .

amazing ride here
have missed reading you
brilliant
xxoo
garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
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2 posted 2003-05-18 08:03 PM

Sccccrrrreeeeccchhhhh!!!  LOL

then the
train stopped
suddenly before
my ride
was over


Helen, I almost felt the train screeching to a sudden stop with this last part. Your writing always makes me feel what I'm reading. Thanks for that.
Hugs,
Ethel
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