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the sea is calm on the other side
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the sea is calm on the other side |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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we sit in the span of our airs legs stretched across the sand breathing whispered sighs dreaming an unfamiliar joy feeling brave to persuade thoughts of the unseen and see beyond the horizon of the setting sun we watch the eclectic sea uniting waves in matrimony that meet and kiss and then clash frothing in superficiality before drawing back their steps in swift undercurrents and cleaning up their prints from the golden sand faraway the reddish star melts into the deep blue of the sea as if to cool down its heat leaving the clouds to shed yellow and give way to crimson before succumbing to the grey of ash seems like the sea is brutal on our side and calming on the other and like clockwork, the bird sings in mobile phone rings tweeting reality back through the ears and bringing a sense of fear of what should be done and how and ‘where should we go from here’ thoughts |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nice write and thoughts It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you QjQ ...  regards, sudhir |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Hmmm... Maybe we should try and cross the sea. I don't know if I am ready to try it yet, though. I enjoyed reading this “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson [This message has been edited by El_Campeador (05-16-2003 10:44 AM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am always impressed by your words Sudhir. I felt this one... *s M |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
faraway the reddish star melts into the deep blue of the sea as if to cool down its heat leaving the clouds to shed yellow and give way to crimson before succumbing to the grey of ash ********************************* exceptionally nice visual imagery here, Sudhir |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Sudhir, You have a wonderful eye for capturing. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sudhir: you had me in another time and place until that cell phone rang . . . what an an amazing illusionist you my friend . . . amazing xxoo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
vivid imagery, you get better with each write |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Gee, I was just drifting along on your words and that dang cell phone rang and jarred me awake! Fantastic imagery here Sudhir.. always a pleasure to read you! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Oh, how it pleases this heart to see your responses... your words are rivers of kindness flowing from the great mountains of generosity... Thank you all, regards sudhir |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The tides rule the earth, my friend - We must go with them...Nice write... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O Dear Nan, I thank you so very much regards sudhir |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
"and like clockwork, the bird sings in mobile phone rings tweeting reality back through the ears and bringing a sense of fear of what should be done and how and ‘where should we go from here’ thoughts" beautiful write, and I like how you put the dread of "getting back to reality..." I understand that all too well...I enjoyed the read...thanks! sp just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful write, enjoyed the travel |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
wonderful capturing picture you painted, very nice write. Jason |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
That line in the distance always looks very inviting doesn't it? Love the imagery here Sudi... most enjoyed. Maree |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir Such a contrast you have painted between the dreamy sea and the reality of life. I so enjoy reading you. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This made me think of the last time I watched a sunset on a beach. It was wonderful, and getting up after it was over was very difficult. I love your images..most especially what you do with the image of the ocean, the waves, the sand, etc. I have never read those descriptions before..and they are brilliant. You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
A beautiful, vivid imagery you have woven. For some reason I especially like this part: uniting waves in matrimony that meet and kiss and then clash frothing in superficiality A rude awakening to reality; though, I think, both are but parts of our reality. One part we own... and one...we can only visit. CG |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sudhir - lovely imagery and great to read your work as always! cor |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Sudir, great visuals. Nicely done once again my friend. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and 'where we should go from here' thoughts... ~*~ now, that's intriguing... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
the ocean always beacons me...enjoyed this piece < img src="http://kit.netpoets.net/kit-hootowl.gif"> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
many many thanks, my friends... regards sudhir |
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