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breathing patient air
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breathing patient air |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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I spoke to the air today broadcasting my thoughts in tentative whispers the breeze was in a sweeping mood as it took my words away from my lips to my shadow’s ears while my eyes awaited a knowing nod and the sight of a compassionate ‘I understand how you really feel’ look but an evil cloud came by dressed in its cloak of darkness to brush away the sun and sent it into a shrouded conceal in one blanketing sweep and I waited breathing lungs full of patient air for the sun to come out after the cold rain nightfall came instead and the sky felt the lack of the moon, too only the artificial lights of neon streetlights made a feeble attempt to revive my shadow but was not enough to make it signal a knowing nod and its eyes, I couldn’t see |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Sudir Sometimes you just can't get through and the clouds of life seem to have everything on hold....But keep breathing that patient air....I really like that thought. Good writing! Eric |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Good thoughts, good write, good read, enjoyed. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nice metaphor, Sudhir - I enjoyed, as always...  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sudhir, I am so glad you are posting here more often. I love your poetry. This is wonderful. Creative, thought provoking... it doesn't get better than this. Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us. Hugs, Pat |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir...I love the thought of "patient air"...and, if it helps, I understand how you feel.  |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sudhir, I love this. I was going to quote some of my favorite lines, but they are all favorites. It is so beautiful. I know exactly what you mean, too. Thanks for sharing your heart thoughts with us. Hugs, Ethel |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
now this, I like Sudhir. . . I love the way that you use the idea of the shadow, and how we "speak" to them, in hoping that we (or they) will hear. . . every time I read you, you get better my friend. . .well done. . . -------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all so very much for your coming by, for your wonderful responses, for your kindness... Regards, Sudhir |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Believe me, patience move sall things, it just doesn't make them vanish in a split second, but as the clouds move east I swear you'll find the missing sale through the horizon! (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a bautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
damn! Sudhir this is fantastic! I am looking for more you have rare vision man rereading now |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I always love to read you my friend...such words of wisdom you share |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thanks for sharing some patient air! I needed this gentle breeze.  |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
good thoughts and read Poetry gives us relief, We give poetry reason. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you, thank you and thank you... Dear friends, It is joy to be here for your words of appreciation warm my heart... regards to all, sudhir |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sudhir: I know that gaze and that feel . . . you are quite insightful amazing . . . just . . . xxoo |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks a lot sue... regards sudhir |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
"I spoke to the air today broadcasting my thoughts in tentative whispers" "nightfall came instead and the sky felt the lack of the moon, too" Excellent lines, sudhir...I enjoyed the images you used in this! Great write... sp just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
I really like this, Sudhir. Very cool thoughts, and so wonderfully penned. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
thanks a lot, sp and vicky... regards sudhir |
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