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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2003-05-08 06:15 AM

down...
fateful light
shines and springs
and throws herself there
on the hay
like the stuff of yesterday--
I watch her eat and wonder--
should there be my face there
yearning
to take the good blood away....

down
fateful night
pines and springtime glimmers ring
and throws herself there
on the hat
like the stuff of yester-dazed...
I watch her stand and tremble
should there be my hand there
yearning
to partake her tremblings wake...

Down
faithful dawn
light of moon to die
and throws herself there
on the bay
like the love of yesterdays
I watch her toss herself to bits,
down my love!
I drink the foam.

Down faithful love,
down die,
and glimmer coming back in grit
of tiny shimmers in the sky--
down--faithful love--
down die!

Tell me, I am now adrift...

only to wash on the shore,
of down feather'd sand,

down...faithful love
commands,

down...m'love, I surely die...
watch me wake
anew again.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (05-08-2003 07:10 AM).]

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2003-05-08 10:23 AM

There's always a reawakening... usually unsurpassed for wont of wisdom gained...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2003-05-08 12:14 PM

Down
faithful dawn
light of moon to die
and throws herself there
on the bay
like the love of yesterdays
I watch her toss herself to bits,
down my love!
I drink the foam.

Down faithful love,
down die,
and glimmer coming back in grit
of tiny shimmers in the sky--
down--faithful love--
down die!

Tell me, I am now adrift...

only to wash on the shore,
of down feather'd sand,
=============================

you and me both baby...you and me both.

gawwwd I love the imagery in this...
and? I dont know if this is what you were going for..but as I read this...I felt the infuences of a certain groovy squirrel poet.
and by the way...where is that BOYEEEEE.

AWESOME write me twin.

You're the best I've ever felt ...
it's so wrong not to be with you.
It's getting harder to stay away,
it stops my heart just to be with you.

SH

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

3 posted 2003-05-08 02:26 PM

well done!

Soleil Noir
Senior Member

since 2001-12-19

Posts 688
USA

4 posted 2003-05-08 02:30 PM

When one allows
their mind to play with
words
as you do
substance is then added
to the mix
of the spell,
and sometimes I just thank God
you don't leave me
with a mental
hangover.

There are several words for
"awesome"
but that particular one
shawls you well.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2003-05-08 03:08 PM

K - this is *smiling* - so utterly beautiful - it reminds me of falling down and getting right back up again

like you always seem to do . . .

xxoo

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2003-05-09 08:11 AM

I'm not sure what I was going for either. I was completely tanked when I wrote this.

But thanks...grin

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2003-05-09 12:39 PM

in reawakening, we find that we have already risen. . .

you know. . . I like this one. . . a lot. . .

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