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j-oh-E
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0 posted 2003-05-06 05:10 PM


I'll tell you something in a foreign tongue
De los ojos de un mujer Espana
Of the Spanish eyes of a woman
In a dream
When I was young
She would dance naked in subtle breath
And ribboned grace
With desperate tears for the love we'd never taste.
Then waking,
I'd find the world somehow colder
'Cause in my sleeping comfort,
Dreaming,
I'd die each time I held her
And I'd paint the hours
Blue in every wasted waking moment
As a slave to something far away
Imprisoned in an unreal woman's torment
Because the power of a woman's love
Means more than the strength I'm made of.

© Copyright 2003 Joe Gomez - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-05-06 05:13 PM


That which is made up in your mind
can be fire and brimstone,
deep wells and awesome falls...

this is certainly due another read
by my eyes, Sir...thank you.

j-oh-E
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2 posted 2003-05-06 05:27 PM


I lost someone once...
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3 posted 2003-05-06 08:38 PM


I'd die each time I held her
And I'd paint the hours
Blue in every wasted waking moment
As a slave to something far away

These lines literally ache and are so poignant.  I too have experienced a loss such as this and it feels at first like a part of you had died with them.

I really enjoyed this and it sure caught the emotions.

                 

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4 posted 2003-05-06 08:55 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Joe, I know this inexplicable feeling all too well, sweet friend, I have never yet felt true love but I always see my loves eyes in my dreams and they are beautiful Spanish or Arabic eyes that seem to have a flame I couldn't imagine living without! (sigh) I send healing hugs your way and may those eyes again stare deep into yours, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Joe, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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5 posted 2003-05-06 08:56 PM


Joe, a most unusual read, made even more mysterious by your attendant comment.  It now sounds as if you might have known this woman "from afar" and loved her very much.  It also gives light to this woman perhaps being older than you had been when you knew her, and you later "lost" her in some fashion.  By the way you phrase yourself, I wonder if it was through death, and not just geography.

An interesting write.  You leave much to the imagination, something I admire in a poet.  

Thank you...


JamesMichael
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6 posted 2003-05-07 05:39 AM


Enjoyed...I like Asian eyes...James
j-oh-E
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7 posted 2003-05-07 01:15 PM


THANK YOU EVERYONE.  THIS POEM MEANS A LOT TO ME.  
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8 posted 2003-05-07 04:21 PM


words straigth from the heart....enjoyed it very much!

Charisma

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9 posted 2003-05-07 07:26 PM


I really enjoyed Very cool.

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10 posted 2003-05-07 07:28 PM


This poem is incredibly good....It speaks from the heart in a way that is wonderful to the reader....I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!!!STUNNING!!

j-oh-E
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11 posted 2003-05-09 11:51 AM


I'm glad someone feels me.  It's hard to express yourself sometimes.  You people make it worth the effort.  Thanks.
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