The Holy Water of the Urban Shaman

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Open Poetry #26

The Holy Water of the Urban Shaman

Effigy
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since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2003-05-07 02:58 PM

In the back left hand corner
of the parking lot
between tires edge, under
shadow of red steel and black rubber
an oily puddle collects lost
rainbows (an asphalt oasis).

The sole reflecting pond in a
parking lot jungle reflects concrete
intentions with a slightly greasy nature.

[This message has been edited by Effigy (05-07-2003 05:34 PM).]

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2003-05-07 05:30 PM

Very Cool

rosepetals25

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since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

2 posted 2003-05-07 07:22 PM

I liked.

Tara

Effigy
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since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

3 posted 2003-05-07 11:41 PM

thanks.

forne_marin
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since 2004-04-13

Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina

4 posted 2004-05-14 10:05 AM

And I say it again. You amaze me sometimes. I got though 10 to 12 mediocre poems, get about to the point where I'm getting bored, and you suddenly blow me out of the water again. This one is great. Heck, this one is PUBLISHABLE. That's my highest compliment.

I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry.

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