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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050
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I Wonder When I no longer have the will or strength to carry on I wonder if the world will even know that I am gone? I wonder if I’ll leave my mark like footprints in the sand? Or if I’m just forgotten like some far off distant land? I wonder if they’ll recollect old memories from the past? I wonder if they’ll wish to leave or make the moment last? I wonder if my ashes help to make the flowers bloom? I wonder if my soul exudes a spicy sweet perfume? I wonder when the blossoms fade and start to draw within They start to wither and become dried petals in the wind That drift along a gentle sigh that ruffles through the trees Making tears stream down your face, cause you want to believe The feeling in your heart that tells you I’m there by your side I’m blowing gently on your face to dry the tears you cried And when you feel your chest get tight, and find it hard to breathe It’s cause my arms are wrapped around you giving you a squeeze I’ve had so many days along my path, when life was good I also had some mountains I couldn’t cross that others could I wish that I could tell you that I tried my very best But that is something better left for other’s to attest I wonder if somebody saw the side I always hid? I wonder if someone was glad for something that I did? I wonder if somebody found the goodness that I lost? I wonder if the sins I made came at too high a cost? I wonder if the memories that we made are all erased? I wonder if each word we said is drifting out in space? I wonder if the tears we cried helped make the oceans blue? I wonder if we brought some joy to those we never knew? I wonder if we see a light that helps us find the way? I wonder if you close your eyes your spirit then can stay? And so I bid you all adieu and wish you fond farewell Thanks for always lifting me each time my spirit fell I hope that you can always deal with those cards that your dealt And that the ripples from a drop far off can still be felt And if you close your eyes at night and see me in your dreams Please know that finally I’m at peace as hard as that may seem Copyrighted 01/23/03 Richard Arnold Borbon [This message has been edited by Richy (05-04-2003 09:32 AM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
The feeling in your heart that tells you I’m there by your side I’m blowing gently on your face to dry the tears you cried And when you feel your chest get tight, and find it hard to breathe It’s cause my arms are wrapped around you giving you a squeeze my favorite lines, but I enjoyed the ease of flow and the soft, wonderful thoughts... *S M [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (05-04-2003 09:37 AM).] |
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Zaynab Member
since 2003-05-04
Posts 59Kuwait |
I really enjoyed this poem. It's quite thought-provoking (with all the 'I wonders') which I find extremely attractive in a poem. The rhyme doesn't seem at all forced, and the rhythm flows smoothly. Well done Take care Zaynab Kill me tonight and I will love again |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I have wondered too...I wish I can answer your questions. We may never know how we impact others' lives. We simply do our best to help our brothers and sisters through their journey. Our answers may lie with God, and we will be clued in when our journey here is finished and we make our way to our eternal home. I like to think we all live on in the way He intended, that is if we fulfill His mission for our lives. My dear, your written words will certainly live on, inspiring thought and bringing wisdom to all. Perhaps this is the legacy you will leave those who come after you. I am so glad I found your writing. I will be seeking your wisdom and beauty henceforth. -Patricia |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This does indeed, read like a prayer. Each verse could stand alone on it's own and yet it flows both outward and inwardly. Gives me pause to wonder of my life and times and all the beauty it beholds. Really nice writing Richy. |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
How does one respond to such a poem as this...I too have wondered these things but you have put it into words that touch the soul in a very deep way....Magnificent writing that has my vote...Very well written... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very beautiful poem, holding many questions to which we can all relate more or less ... Well done! Love, Margherita |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Richy...perhaps you have written your own memorial poem. It is beautiful and I think universal in thought and feelings that we all have. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Thank you Nakedthoughts for the very nice comments... Oh, and I love your name! Zaynab, I’m glad the poem provoked some thought... it is something I think many have thought about at one time or another... Thank you for the nice reply! Hey we both started this group within a day of each other... Kuwait huh? I hope all is settling down over in your neck of the woods? Take Care Friend, Richy Dear Patricia, once again I am floored by your comments! Are you sure your replying to the right poem...lol... Boy I wish I could tell you I could live up to even a smidgeon of such praise... But alas, we can always “wish not to seem, but to be, the best“ Hey that wasn’t bad was it? Too bad I didn’t write it... lol Thanks for the help Aeschylus... Patricia, your generosity is exceeded only by your gracefulness... And I’m all the better for knowing thee... Blessings, Richy Thank you BluesSerenade, I’m a big fan (of yours) A comment such as yours is very special to me... Thanks Again! Startime55, Wow my first vote... WoooHooo!! Hey you know what? Your comments alone are votes (of confidence) enough... Thanks Friend! Thank You Margherita, your comments are very touching... (why do I have a sudden urge to get my blender out and make my favorite drink???) Martie, you just nailed it! It is something that I had been wanting to do for a while... I have another one to... I will post it in the near future... Thanks for the wonderful reply Martie... Hey what’s with the weather out here in “The Big Orange?” Oh well, it’s supposed to hit the 80’s in the next few days... Thank god to... I am a sun freak...lol Take Care All Have a Great Afternoon/Evening Richy |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Richy, Yes, I do think we've all done this wondering. For you to bring these questions all together in one poem helps me in knowing others wonder, too. It does remind there are things which I need to do....not necessarily believing it will make a difference after I am gone but will make me feel better, I knowing I did my best...especially in helping others in the hundreds of ways we can each day.....even the gift of a genuine smile can make a big difference to one who has none. and the list goes on and on.... Hugs, Pat  |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Richard I am in awe at this exquisite piece of writing and didn't want it to end. Your words were very inspiring. "The source of love is deep in us and we can help others realise a lot of happiness. One word, one action, one thought, can reduce another person's suffering and bring that person joy" Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Richard, this is such a beautiful poem. I had a hard time picking out a favorite verse, because they are all so wonderful. This part especially touched me, though... I wonder if the tears we cried helped make the oceans blue? I wonder if we brought some joy to those we never knew? I'm really enjoying your poetry, Sir.  Hugs, Ethel |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Richy: I wonder if you realize what a mark you have left here on my soul . . . amazing writing here xxoo |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Thanks for the great reply Pat... By gosh, I think I hit on one that many can relate to... You know what they say, “throw enough cow dung against the barn and a chunk or three is liable to stick now and again...” sorry...lol It’s late, and I’m getting a little slappy I think... can’t sleep... Oh, and one more th.... ZZZZzzzZZZZzzzzzzz.... lol Hello Sue, really, you didn’t want it to end??? Well that’s a first...lol My problem is knowing when to stop... writing that is... Sue, your comments were so sincere, I was really touched! Thank you sooo much... You take care too... I hope we meet again, soon... Hi Ethel, that’s funny that you picked that one stanza... because I just took out a couple verses the other day, that just weren’t quite tickling my fancy that day and added that one and another or two... Funny huh? Next week, it might have some more changes... I was thinking the other day, how with writing, it is one creative endeavor that you can totally change, so easily, at any whim, you so desire... Depending of course, on which way the wind is blowing... Thanks again, Ethel littlewing, that is one of the more meaningful things anyone has ever said to me about something I have written! Man I love creating!!!!!!!! I’m sure there are much more important and noble ways to be appreciated... But, I’m not a doctor... and I can’t dance... Well, OK... I can dance a little, when I got something to dance about... But... Where else can I get such good feelings from so many, for so little? Dang! Sometimes, it’s just nice to be alive! |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Richy, Another wonderful piece of work. I commend you on a job well done. Very good flow! quatro |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Wonderful and voted |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, the ever present questions of whether someone will know if we were ever here... with writing like this, and a presence such as you have shown us so far... I have a feeling the answer will be yes. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just beautiful...one of my favorites! |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Wow!! I love this, it's so smooooooth and searching. The images used for the "I wonder"s were very evocative. (How many times I can vote for one poem?  )"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is one fantastic write! I say 'one' because all of yours are so very special! Gets my vote and a hug! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is a wonderful poem. I have wondered these things myself. [This message has been edited by SmartChick (05-09-2003 09:46 AM).] |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
It's a shame I can't help answer your questions but this is a wonderful piece of poetry!!! I very much enjoyed!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Richy: you know - what a nice response - had to come back to say *smiling* how very sincere you are . . . Good Luck! xxoo |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Richy, this is a wonderful poem, inspiring one to travel and be part of, you have a true talent here, which I am so happy you shared with us all. I am sure we all wonder on your wonders, none have come to tell us from beyond, so onward we guess, we dream and we write. Well done my friend, much enjoyed. Till the next time. Sincerely Rick |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Quatro - Thanks for always taking the time, it is so appreciated! Brad Majors - Much Appreciated Brad! Sunshine - That is just such a nice thing to say... you are just so kind! Passing Shadows - Wow, thanks so much! Enchantress - I think your special too! And two hugs back! SmartChick - I sincerely thank you... Justbleu - Thank you Justbleu... I’m glad you liked it littlewing - littlewing you are just so gracious, and classy! Rick - Rick I am a big fan! Your kind remarks mean a lot to me... Thank You Everyone! |
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