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Billie Breaking Me Again
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Billie Breaking Me Again |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Untangle the notes So twined together as they fell To hard checked floor among table legs And humans scattered around In an order of dis Reflecting the absorb That ends in cacophony Untrue to intent Leave me a lazy sax and Billie To gravel the sounds addiction left Marked on her throat and our hearts And I’ll sweep up later… The litter of my little mind Never knowing truly the depth of pain Or the driven rain cried ten thousand times in tears Of closed doors and segregated rooms Lost loves and voices… Always the voices inside That laugh at the edges of a needle Or a bottle mixed And leave you to sweat Cry them for me But pull the strings and unravel this noise Isn’t it time to go home Time for the unknown Leave me those chords. I’ll tie up my own package And someday, When I am intelligent enough I’ll unwrap it again as streams of smoke rise from the fires within And listen to the sounds Crisp As they break My heart Again [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (05-02-2003 01:00 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's not often that I get to cry over such a write... I hope no one walks into the office... sometimes we think our life is tough, but we keep applying the bandaids, especially tight, when we know someone else has known a deeper hell...  Library and of course, it should be in Reflections, as well... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I love it when you listen...  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
This is a hard rain, my friend |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ahh yes, Cpat. Let Billie tell a tale of "them that's got shall get...them that's not..shall lose." This is outstanding writing and going directly into my library. Awesome!! Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Oh sad,  You write angst so well.... Hugs to you, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (05-02-2003 01:46 PM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Is this about my old girlfriend Billie..James |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I'm torn..wishing I was a sax or Billie..very 'bluesy' sir.  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Leave me a lazy sax and Billie To gravel the sounds addiction left Marked on her throat and our hearts And I’ll sweep up later…' Ron, I've read this several times (because I liked it, not because I didn't get it...lol) and honestly...some of the best writing I've come across in a long time.... I could've quoted the entire piece. (Where is JM anyway..lol). Really excellent write here bud.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron... "The litter of my little mind Never knowing truly the depth of pain Or the driven rain cried ten thousand times in tears Of closed doors and segregated rooms Lost loves and voices… Always the voices inside That laugh at the edges of a needle Or a bottle mixed And leave you to sweat" This tears and splinters and mends...and I don't know what to say really except...you wrote from a deep place that understands this...so, hugs to you, my friend. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I too know of these feeling.....thank you for sharing yours....hugsssss Lauren~ Through the darkness |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The litter of my little mind Never knowing truly the depth of pain Or the driven rain cried ten thousand times in tears ================================ damn...................... the moth comes back and you knock the words right out of me........... (thank you)  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is a hard-hitting and visual piece, that left me feeling the emotions as deeply as they were written. An excellent write. Very much enjoyed the flow and power in this, Ron. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'The litter of my little mind Never knowing truly the depth of pain Or the driven rain cried ten thousand times in tears Of closed doors and segregated rooms Lost loves and voices… Always the voices inside That laugh at the edges of a needle Or a bottle mixed And leave you to sweat' Just damn...(again)  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
.....may I join you? Headed toward the steeo NOW..... Well captured, my friend. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Leave me those chords. I’ll tie up my own package And someday, When I am intelligent enough I’ll unwrap it again as streams of smoke rise from the fires within And listen to the sounds Crisp As they break My heart Again Oh yes, Capt. Ron, this kind does make you think.....and you told what we think so well, as only you can. Hugs, Ethel |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
" . . . all of me . . . why not take allll of me . . . cant you seee . . .I'm no good with out youuuu . . . " Loved this Ron goodness now you got me on a Lady Day kick here . . . xxoo |
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