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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
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Your silence frightens me to make resolve whenever winters lay to break our bonds. For when I speak to darkness I dissolve, not knowing then the way your heart responds. How should I read the pictures in my eyes that blare their ugly colors in my sleep when you do not but utter one word's highs, and I am left to ponder what you keep? And if no thoughts, then just one whispered start. Oh, just to know the dreams which you impart. I ask you, if you wish to keep me sane but speak one syllable to ease my brain. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Been there a time or two. Silence can be nice at times, at others, it truly sucks! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've been waiting for you...and delighted with this one. One of my faves... welcome back, Mikie! |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wonderful work! This will be great in the book! Peace I leave with you, My peace I give unto you: not as the world giveth, give I unto you.--Jesus Christ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) I too get petrified of silence, it is almost to me like a ghostly answer spoken in Solitaire with doubt! (big hugggssssss) This is very poignant, sweet friend, I think so many can relate to times without responses and henceforth my vote goes to you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A beauty, Squirrel dude! Worthy of binding! (As is most of your work, but that's just MY opinion. (what do I know.)) Ed |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
enjoyed this one, Bsquirrel.  Sunkissed. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mike, I think I like this one better than any of yours I've read.....so   |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hi, Mike! Long time no read! This is yet another fine example of your poetic talent! I read it twice and enjoyed it even more the second time through. Gentle, flowing and yet had an impact. Warm hugs, Linda |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
mmm i like it a Lot |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Mike, it gives me great pleasure to vote for this poem. I would love to see your work in the book.  |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Very good poem.. Votin for ya. Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Michael, Excellent choice. Here's my vote. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
My vote's in |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A small suggestion, Michael...if I might...last line... speak but...just a switch. I stumbled on that last line. However, poetic intent and all, you may very well have wanted me to stumble, knowing that I'm a klutz and all!  |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
enjoyed it a lot! Charisma |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
A wonderful read, thanks for sharing |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
Fr some reason, babe, this reminds me of my own; You Sang This the Night You Were Afraid. Only shorter. Heh. And more bloody structured. I still don't get how you can do that whole 'structure' thing.Anyway. I'm so tired. I'm gonna go curl up in a corner with Poppy Z. Brite fr a while. Drawing Blood isn't NEARLY as graphic as Lost Souls, so maybe you oughtta go check that one out first, oh squeamish boy. Love you and your poetry. remember the sound |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
As I love you, Lori. And heh -- I'm not THAT squeamish, am I? And don't you like how I spell out THAT in all caps to denote emphasis? How classy. Thanks, everyone who has responded thus far to this fractured sonnet. The stumble is intentional -- as is the hopefully cloying sense of dead weight and desperation and wait wait wait. I'll be readin'. Mike |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
I enjoyed this, Mike. It's definitely one of your best. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Very nice. Talking to darkness is especially terrible when you can't really know for sure if the person is there and listening, or is simply away and leaving you to wonder. Silence can be so cruel because our imaginations of what silence means can be so cruel. Of course, we all have to be away sometimes... try to be optimistic about silence and it won't be such a problem, hm? Lovely structure, didn't distract too terribly from the quality of your words, and maybe even added to them. This is poetry written for both of the right reasons. I'll vote. Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I give you mine too,I like it. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You have my vote! |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Ahhh, the things we ponder, what goes on in another's head. If we only knew. I enjoyed this, bsquirrel. Thank you. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
when you rhyme the screen chimes like that sound of rightness this is.....different from what I read of yours but obviously not because you always surprise and delight thank you |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sometimes the silence speaks louder than words ever can |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
dont know how you could ever choose...you have so many remarkable pieces. hope to see more submissions from you... Im a poet greedy moth you know  " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
i don't think there's anything i can say to par up to the poetry in itself. it's wonderful. an inviting start and ends with such a banging conclusion ( speak one syllable ...), speechless. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
From "Your silence frightens me to make resolve whenever winters lay to break our bonds." to How should I read the pictures in my eyes that blare their ugly colors in my sleep to I ask you, if you wish to keep me sane but speak one syllable to ease my brain .... exquisite... great work... regards, sudhir |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I always enjoy reading you Mike... |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
One of my favs of yours - glad to see you submitting. I've always enjoyed your poems. Got my vote! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, everyone, for your support. Please take a moment to search out some of Anvrill's poetry if you get the chance. She's a wonderful writer herself (and my long-time girlfriend). She inspires my poetry more than any other person or force. Thank you all again for reading. Mike |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is very powerful... very well written! *S* |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Silence is agonizing.....VERY GOOD!!! Bridgette |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
In it's silence it spoke to me. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Mike--I don't read you as often as I'd like, but I do remember this one and it is truly fine poetry. A pleasure in its pain. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Making music out of silence. You get my vote. Joyce [This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (02-20-2003 02:07 PM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I would have sworn I'd responded to this one... but I enjoyed reading again and correcting my oversight! *S* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am going to love seeing this in the book |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I love this! I agree, sometimes silence can be the worst thing in the world.  --Liz It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It's an excellent sonnet, Mike...not one syllable out of place with accents in the right places....very admirable work. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent choice Mikey!! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
bsquirrel - You do write well, and my vote to you... BC |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The power of silence is an amazing entity, isn't it?... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I appreciate all your responses on this poem. It was a challenge for me to get the rhythms and rhymes right, as I tend to be erratic and more free-versey. So thank you for reading it. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Sometimes silence just is...that. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Love the new pic lol |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
beautiful sonnet...loved the wording "How should I read the pictures in my eyes" especially the above. hugss M |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Mike - not scattered sonnet - as a matter of fact reminded me a lot like Shakespeare - it did- it does - it lives . . . xxoo |
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