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Aenimal
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0 posted 2003-02-21 11:36 PM

Through wilderness
the number'd cast me
whereupon by chance
within a clearing
I'd found a place
unlooked for, and Sophia

She stood
before the gleaming
stonework of a chapel
unmarked and unadorned
and beckoned me
with a smile

"You've returned at last"
she softly spoke
"Do I know thee?"
I asked abashed
She laughed and answered,
"You know all as all know thee, come inside and you shall see"

Before the door I stood
but dared not take another step
"What shall I find in there?"
I asked and she replied
"All that you'd left behind"
and softly kissed my lips

Into her ancient eyes
I gazed awhile
and knew her again
"I've missed you"
she smiled and
lead me over threshold

"Come, take your soul, it's where you left it"

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-23-2003 01:57 PM).]

the_loner_23
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1 posted 2003-02-21 11:41 PM

This is a cool poem. I really liked it.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2003-02-21 11:42 PM

(smiles) Oh Raphael, this is wonderful, sweet friend, this made me smile to see you seeing that lovely face again and finding that smile return to you as though all just rejuvenated! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Raphael, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

SEA

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with you

3 posted 2003-02-22 01:41 AM

"Into her ancient eyes
I gazed awhile
and knew her again
"I've missed you" "

wow.....

you know this rocks

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2003-02-22 01:44 AM

smile...

and hugs, Raph.

You KNOW this is a personal favorite of mine...

thank you for submitting this one...

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

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highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2003-02-22 01:45 AM

Aenimal - oh yes, this is the one for the book, my vote for sure...

BC

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

6 posted 2003-02-22 01:45 AM

Hey! Nice to see you here. Glad you decided to offer this up...and I'm glad to be able to vote for it.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2003-02-22 06:09 AM

Raph... good choice. Very good choice. Thank you so much!

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2003-02-22 06:57 AM

Before the door I stood
but dared not take another step
"What shall I find in there?"
I asked and she replied
"All that you'd left behind"
and softly kissed my lips

Into her ancient eyes
I gazed awhile
and knew her again
"I've missed you"
she smiled and
lead me over threshold

"Come, take you soul, it's where you left it"
=================================

I love this...its surreal and haunting at the same time...cryptic and clever...
cool title...a unique write...
well done poet sir.

oouuu eeee oouu ah ah ting tang walla walla bing bang ...
oouuu eeee oouu ah ah ting tang walla walla bing bang
;)

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

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9 posted 2003-02-22 10:28 AM

'"Come, take you soul, it's where you left it"'

JM stole my adjectives!!!!!!

Ok...this gave me chills!!

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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the ass-end of space

10 posted 2003-02-22 01:13 PM

Thanks everybody glad you liked this it's always been one of my favourites even though it never went over well in open, in fact i actually have one more reply in here than i did when i posted it initially..

Dark Angel
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11 posted 2003-02-22 05:18 PM

This is one of my favourites from you Raph.

alaways a pleasure to read you

Maree

gemjop
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Pencilveinia, USA

12 posted 2003-02-22 09:31 PM

She stood
before the gleaming
stonework of a chapel
unmarked and unadorned
and beckoned me
with a smile

.......i can see what you've written in my mind as a beautifully ornate painting...as usual...of course this gets ma vote friend.

lots of love, gemma xxxxxxxxxxx

Chanson
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Up Creek w/Out Paddle

13 posted 2003-02-22 10:05 PM

Your well-expressed
imagination brought
this picture to life.
I think it's beautiful.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

Justbleu
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

14 posted 2003-02-23 01:09 AM

Hey you've got a cool writing style.....VERY NICE!!!!

Bridgette

ellie LeJeune
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King of Prussia, PA USA

15 posted 2003-02-23 08:02 AM

I have chills! Glorious poem of ancient truth and our eternal search for His Love and the Glory of finding it! You are a gifted poet! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

16 posted 2003-02-23 10:07 AM

This oozes sophistication! A very classic write!

Warm morning hugs,
EA

Midnitesun

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Gaia

17 posted 2003-02-23 10:10 AM

"Come, take you soul, it's where you left it"

Yes, I love this one too. Now go fix you typo.

You know how much I enjoy reading your thoughts?

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

18 posted 2003-02-23 01:57 PM

Maree that's very sweet of you to say

Gemma thank you love

Chanson very kind words, thank you

Bridgette thank you very much

Ellie I really appreciate the compliment

Linda warm hugs back

Kacy bloody hell how did i miss that one! lol Thanks for the save

bsquirrel

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19 posted 2003-02-24 01:17 PM

Smart.

christian
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20 posted 2003-02-24 03:28 PM

cleverly execute and ending with something
so thoughtfully done

'come take your soul where you left it'

if this isn't poetry, then i sure as hell
don't know what is. this is kickass raph.
it better end up in the book, or else ..
or else ::fading laughter:

kidding :smirk:

-chris.

christian
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since 2002-12-18

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21 posted 2003-02-24 03:30 PM

damn, forgot to vote.

here goes.

[This message has been edited by christian (02-24-2003 03:33 PM).]

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

22 posted 2003-02-24 08:31 PM

Thanks bsq I'd hoped so

Christian thanks both times lol

hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA

23 posted 2003-02-25 11:44 AM

Oh Yeah, got this ones number

Good write and a good read

Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

24 posted 2003-02-25 12:10 PM

At the risk of sounding like I have started your fan club, I must vote for this.I love your writes.
Jason

Sudhir Iyer
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25 posted 2003-02-25 02:49 PM

Come, take you soul, it's where you left it

....

great work... and exquisite ending...

regards,
sudhir

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

26 posted 2003-02-25 03:10 PM

YES!!! Good choice!

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

27 posted 2003-02-25 09:18 PM

Thanks hoot

Jason lol thanks man I really appreciate the support

sudhir thank you

thanks Enchantress glad you like this

Joyce Johnson

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28 posted 2003-02-26 03:33 PM

You get a vote. Joyce

Ceinwyn
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29 posted 2003-02-26 04:03 PM

Ohh how you doin!? Hi hehe Hrmm..I haven't seen you around here before..hrm..no it's not a pick up line!! btw I'm usually not good at this critique thing but omg I could not leave without saying I like your poem..I know really how creative but I dig the the images and such it paints..great..I'm a sucker for such things..ohh duh after all that rambling I did vote obviously...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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Aenimal
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30 posted 2003-02-26 08:35 PM

Thank you Joyce I appreciate it

Ceinwyn thanks for the vote and the interesting reply lol

jbouder
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Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash

31 posted 2003-02-27 01:49 PM

ALthough I don't think you need it, you've gotten my vote. Nicely done.

Jim

Aenimal
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32 posted 2003-02-27 03:50 PM

thank you kindly jbouder

suthern

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33 posted 2003-02-27 04:00 PM

One of the nicest things about the book... at least to me... is the chance to read poems I might have missed when they were initially posted. *S* I like this very much! *S*

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

34 posted 2003-02-27 05:22 PM

So amazing!!! I am speechless with this...

Lauren~

Aenimal
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35 posted 2003-02-27 08:44 PM

Thanks suthern and whisper there is an archive..just kidding lol

greeneyes thank you very much this is one of my favourites i think i should revisit this place sooner than later

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

36 posted 2003-03-01 01:57 PM

A beautfiul poem, with a theme for the ages.
Sandra

Aenimal
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37 posted 2003-03-01 03:33 PM

Thank you kindly Sandra and yes I agree if only more people entered the chapel

Margherita
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Eternity

38 posted 2003-03-01 04:45 PM

Intriguing and mysterious.
... and the music is there.
Love it.
Margherita

Aenimal
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39 posted 2003-03-01 06:01 PM

Thank you so much Margherita I really appreciate it,
ciao
Raff

Mysteria

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40 posted 2003-03-08 05:15 PM

I have missed so much not knowing your poetry and will not miss out on one of your poems again. "come take your soul it's where you left it" - strong writing - and your imagery is extremely vivid. I sure hope this makes it into the book, it is a wonderful piece.

R.E.S.P.E.C.T.
Aretha Franklin

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

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New York

41 posted 2003-03-08 06:03 PM

Raph - I loved this the first time I read it in asots - it still is alive - will always be - just beautiful writing . . .
xxoo click click

Aenimal
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42 posted 2003-03-08 06:26 PM

Thanks Mysteria very kind words

Sue thanks this is one of the few i like

Ratleader

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43 posted 2003-03-09 09:16 PM

"Do I know thee?" WHACK! Love it!

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Anvrill
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in the interzone now

44 posted 2003-03-11 02:39 PM

Anything with classic speech wins me over.

Very cool.

remember the sound
that could wake the dead
but nobody woke up at all

rs

SPIRIT
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45 posted 2003-03-12 09:57 PM

Great post. My vote is in.

Aenimal
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46 posted 2003-03-12 10:55 PM

thanks ratleader,anvrill,and spirit appreciate the replies!

littlewing
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47 posted 2003-03-19 12:22 PM

It is time for her to breathe . . . and she will now - eternal . . . this IS my favorite - and you - as always - congrats sweety - here for others to see and hopefully just maybe take a visit . . . xxoo

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