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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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I might have had a favorite bear to cuddle needed to refer to some comfort..to huddle away from the chill bite of winter winds hidden somewhere where there was traquility. That a parakeet's company meant so much it succumbed to desease..there was a hush some tears were shed.. hearts spang a leak..bled consoled with another to take its place the corner of the living room..offered space. The need to write to a special friend and say 'stick around to the very end.' consolation broke when distance divided reality spoke up when flight took hold experience came by the book..grew bold. might have had a favorite game around the house and read beyond curfew..silent as a mouse removed from the chill bite of winter winds buried beneath the covers on a dark lonely night. grew to know how to console another's sorrow reconcile the past and see a brighter tomorrow developed a knack of seeing myself from the outside put some peace between me and trivial circumstances this material world...is all but a brief instance so why nuture heart pains life has its strains wiser to be gentler on myself. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-16-2003 09:09 PM).] |
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Quiet Acquiescence Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 70somewhere out here |
at one point it sounds like the person's spirit is at peace, and then at another, burdened by sadness. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I suppose that is what consolation is all about... to help relieve our conscience of disquieting burdens so as to attain peace of mind...but that is so fragile...thanks for sharing |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It's wise to be gentle to oneself indeed...  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggssssss) It can be so much harder when you get so hard on yourself, and I can forgive those many times when I was left defenseless and dropped off on the shoulder lane and to appreciate oneself is an even bigger advantage! (sigh) This is so wonderfully expressed, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
yes I like this poem a lot. You get my vote. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Loner, I did think of you when I wrote this, you and Noah..and myself..you are not the only one who feels something isn't right with how you feel about yourself..so it's always good to be positive and make that shine through  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Nan, wise to be gentle and yet firm...wouldn't want to be too soft  |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
An uplifting piece. I like the second stanza quite a bit, it was just unusual enough to keep me interested throughout the rest of the poem. Nicely written. Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
When I need some consolation and there is nobody around to give it, I grab my "cuddly bear" and a good "book" and I'm on my way to being consoled! I enjoyed this gentle and introspective piece from you! May you never have the need to be consoled, but if you do, I will send you some warm, loving hugs. EA |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Parasite, unusual in form as I'm still trying alternate rhyme endings like visual rhymes... using lot more reference to fiction/myth/hostorical opinion so alluding to them...thanks for sharing |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hey Linda Had a couple of crystals in Europe...and apprciate your spirituality...yeah I'll keep you mind |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Really cool....yep sounds like consolation to me Bridgette |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sometimes it's easier said than done to be less hard on ourselves. We are often our own worst critics and toughest bosses |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very well written... Regards to you, Sudhir |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Ruth, I see your point, that's what spurred the motivation on this one..the need to spend less head time on analysis and just doing what my heart was set on...being as less harsh on myself as possible..utopia for me  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Brigitte, Sudhir it serves it's purpose..thanks for sharing |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
It's a great accomplishment to be able to see ourselves from outside ourselves. Enjoyed, as always. *s When you think you have heard it all, listen more closely. ~Dorene [This message has been edited by Chanson (02-22-2003 10:10 PM).] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Doreen, and I hope that continues...yet the opportunity is there for all of us to open an external eye on what we do [This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-22-2003 10:36 PM).] |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Excellent write! |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Wnderfully written...my path exactly, when i realized that i was my own worst enemy, I made a decision to be my own best friend, with God's help, I'm slowly learning how! It is a journey well worth the travel! Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Munda, Ellie Thanks for reading..planning a trip to Amsterdam soon. Ellie still my own best critic..but hey..there is so much one can physically do and I still run around like a 'spring chicken' sometimes. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well now this speaks loudly to the me that just up and quit work one day, and decided to get to know the world I lived in before I was gone. Well done and I have no idea now I missed this one either. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Mysteria, very true, there's so much more to knowing life than just being "dedicated" at a job place..especially in the revovlving door ones! |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
You've got my vote Dawn |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YES Martin my friend. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
thanks for your encouragement Nancy and Dawn |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
So true, Martin...didn't know I missed this one...Sorry... "Love makes the world go around" |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
thanks for voting on this...it's rare for me to express sentimentality on the forum...here is one piece that shows it |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
grew to know how to console another's sorrow reconcile the past and see a brighter tomorrow developed a knack of seeing myself from the outside put some peace between me and trivial circumstances This is such a tranquil write. Peace seems attainable. A lovely thought. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Martin - you touched me deep with this one - wish I had your attitude - need to take lessons . . . this one hit home xxoo |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
WhiteRose, Inner peace is attainable what's frightening is how global peace gets repeatedly fragmented. Martin |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
There's so much to be said for remaining true to ourselves~ put some peace between me and trivial circumstances this material world...is all but a brief instance I'll be looking for this in the book. Peace to you Ecrivan~ |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Martin, it's so true that to be able to console others you have to develop empathy by feeling loss yourself. You have a lot of wisdom in this one. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Excellent, enjoyed much. Sandra |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
grew to know how to console another's sorrow reconcile the past and see a brighter tomorrow developed a knack of seeing myself from the outside put some peace between me and trivial circumstances how I understand this...I'm still trying to not be so hard on myself. ~A~ |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
This one struck a chord.My vote Jason |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Beautiful form and wisdom, all tied into one great poem. Man! I wish I had some of your inspiration. This a great piece of writing. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
LngJohn inspiration comes experience and age...and we each have our own style. Thanks for sharing. Jason, thanks for the vote of confidence [This message has been edited by ecrivan (04-02-2003 12:33 AM).] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Sandra, it's good to read again and remind myself of the objectivity I have to have sometimes. Thanks |
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