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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Hey all, first off, Thnx for all the peeps who voted for my poem, "Sorrow", over in the Teen section. It got in. Anyway here's another poem I'd like to try out. This is a repost of a poem I posted over in the Crit Anaylsis forum awhile back. This has not been up for submission yet. Hope you like Her Secret She sits alone, unheard red lightning in her swollen eyes her hand brushes away her hair that claws at her tears of misery overflowing, she can’t hold back each droplet, slowly inching, full of years of pain and sorrow, each a sigh of letting go. Shining through the open window silvery luminescence lights her figure slumped against the kitchen wall, curling her legs up to her breast her face battered and broken shades of blue and black taint, the woman she used to be a woman of pride and dignity He did it to her again. his anger, his love treacherous but he says “I still love you” and she stays to believe that the stars in the endless void her ideals, goals, and dreams are close and not forgotten just forever out of reach The floorboards above creak melancholy as the jewels of her soul stare to the heavens above rimmed in her oceans of silence. the thunder of footfalls upon the stairs pound relentlessly in her ears he shouts and she cringes in despair for she knows her love is near Her head bowed in defeat she accepts this as her penance for the wrongs of her past to him for making him feel worthless and for speaking to another man she doesn’t blame him for her faults but as the pain starts once again she can’t help but grasp for those stars. ex animo, Aaron Woodside [This message has been edited by aaron woodside (04-24-2003 04:38 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
congrats, and this i to belive will make it, nicely written "one needs not challenge all the players to win the game" |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
OH, You ARE good!!!! First.... you placed this woman's pain in perspective, and Just describing her seated position was enough to indicate you have seen such things first hand. Her problem is the fact that she still loves this waste of testosterone. It is unclear to my why some choose to stay in such abusive relationships... but then again I have too.... just not the physical kind. Well written dear poet! has my vote. Sherry |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Thnx. ex animo, Aaron IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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rcl 4eva Junior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 19 |
I luved it...wish I cud give two votes |
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Lynda Member
since 2003-04-26
Posts 52Vic, Australia |
I can see this woman -I see her often at my place of employment. It's sad and difficult to understand, and your poem illustrates her despair, fear, love and hope so well. Lynda |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
good one |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Thnx for the replies everyone. Glad you liked it. ex animo, Aaron Woodside IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
A lot of insight here, very nicely done. |
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