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Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

0 posted 2003-04-21 04:28 AM

Be the answer by my bedside when needed most of all
Be the book that holds the words of wise men and recall
Have the verse that sooths the soul, when from my time I hide
Let in you all truth and right and peacefulness reside

Will you guide my fingers to the line that tells me so?
That shows the path to what is right and how the right will grow
Will the words all speak to me with voice of peace and truth
Relieve me of my worries and ignite some hidden youth

Be the book, the masterpiece that all would wish to own
Filled with life and secrets that can spare me from alone
Be the treasure that I found where none had thought to look
Upon its shelf of destiny, my little poets book

[This message has been edited by Rick (04-21-2003 06:16 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

1 posted 2003-04-21 04:35 AM

~sigh~

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

2 posted 2003-04-21 04:51 AM

passing shadows, thanks for the sigh, now tell me what you really think, nice to get your reply always appreciated.

Sincerely
Rick

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-04-21 09:02 AM

Smiling...

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

4 posted 2003-04-21 01:20 PM

a masterpeice indeed this is a great write

SPIRIT
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since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

5 posted 2003-04-21 03:03 PM

Another soft write, I look for your name because I know it will be most worthwhile.

Mystic Mystron
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since 2002-02-15

Posts 69
North York .Ontario

6 posted 2003-04-21 06:36 PM

WOW!!! is all i can say this would be a great addition to the book

You are a good poet as soon as you try to reach others with your words.
You are a great poet when those same words touch your heart first.

Magicmystery
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since 2002-02-13

Posts 821
Windsor, Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2003-04-21 08:13 PM

Well... I loved the way you spread this poem out... smooth as warm butter off the knife. And I had to re read it after I came to the last line because it was not what I was expecting it to be. At first glance, I thought you were talking about the Bible, but then when I read it again with the last line in mind, it all made sense. I used to keep a pad of paper on my nightstand. I used to get rhymes the porportion of the novels pouring through my head, some when I was sleeping, and some barely awake, none made it in their entirety onto paper..... sadly. Voting for this one. I think every one here in Pip has been there once or twice.. I think this would make a fine addition to the book.

Sherry

Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today.

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

8 posted 2003-04-22 06:48 AM

Dear Sunshine, nice to see you smiling, always lovely to get a reply from you, thank you.

SPIRIT, what a lovely complement you give me tonight, I hope you can always find my work as worthwhile, thank you very much.

Mystic Mystron, what a wonderful word to share with me, thank you for the reply and vote.

Sherry, at first I was thinking of the Bible, so really it is great that you came to that way of thinking, but then the thought of a old book filled with poems of different poets came to mind and made its way to my poem. Different poets, ideas and thoughts, can give one freedom of mind and inspirations to explore, I love an old book of poetry, if only just to have it there.
Thanks for you great reply, very much appreciated.

Thank you to you all.

Sincerely
Rick

Verve
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 348
Singapore

9 posted 2003-04-23 07:28 AM

WoW... what a lovely write...

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

10 posted 2003-04-23 08:08 AM

Verve, again thank you for this great reply, much appreciated.

Sincerely
Rick

Poet4Christ
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since 2003-02-19

Posts 211
Oklahoma City

11 posted 2003-04-23 01:11 PM

Rick - Your work flows very well and I enjoy the style of your writing. Also it is very personal the way good poetry should be. A well deserved vote .. God bless you

Tim

He that trusteth in his own heart is a fool: but whoso walketh wisely, he shall be delivered. Proverbs 28:26

[This message has been edited by Poet4Christ (04-23-2003 01:11 PM).]

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

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Washington State

12 posted 2003-04-23 02:19 PM

this is a definite winner. Joyce

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

13 posted 2003-04-24 08:35 AM

Tim, thanks for your reply and vote, your comments are heart felt and much appreciated.

Joyce, lovely of you to say, thank you for that.

Sincerely
Rick

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

14 posted 2003-04-24 10:17 AM

This poetic masterpiece of yours, Dear Rick, shall itself stand the test of time--especially if it finds its way between the covers of Reflections!

Lovin' hugs,
EA

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

15 posted 2003-04-25 06:46 AM

Dear Earth Angel, thanks for your wonderful comments here, with people like yourself replying all the time, it seems there is a chance of that.

Sincerely
Rick

Poet4Christ
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since 2003-02-19

Posts 211
Oklahoma City

16 posted 2003-04-26 12:56 PM

Rick I would have to say this poem is my favorite of yours and I had to come back and read it again. I hope you dont mind the "bump". It would be a priveledge to see your work in the book beside one of my poems. Again, very nice.

Thanx - Tim

He that trusteth in his own heart is a fool: but whoso walketh wisely, he shall be delivered. Proverbs 28:26

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

17 posted 2003-04-26 06:43 PM

Tim, thanx for the bump up, it would be great if we all could have a poem that shares the same book cover, I think that everyone in passions has a good chance.
Your comments are much appreciated and heart felt, again thank you.

Sincerely
Rick

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