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Sea Of Sorrow |
Paragon Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 114 |
Rolling tides in the sea called sorrow pull me apart at the seams the sea's endless ebb and flow hide the once endless dreams and aspirations for tomorrow I glance up as I have a million times before only to see the same veil of grey obscuring the distant shores hiding non-existant blue skies and in that moment, icy rain began to pierce the somber clouds as if they began to cry the constant yet, sporadic, patter of the rain seems to scatter my concentration and ease the pain Here I am suspended in this timeless rift somewhere between trepidation and monotony without sensation, floating adrift perfect disarray has caught ahold of me the sands of time continue to sift through the fabric of being slowly I close my eyes to prevent seeing and fade away to a place beyond without a word to say |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
A very cool poem. I love poetry that personifies and explores natural phenomena so intimately, in describing an emotion. I hope this one gets into the book. 2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2 |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
rolling tides of the sea!! i always love writes of the sea! vote! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
liked this one |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I really like this a lot....Good write!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
This is a very emotive write... I think it's really brilliant... Simply love the imagery. My vote's in! Cheers! |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
A handsomely penned, emotional escape from the pits of torment! Excellent use of words, and play on emotions. Vote! ~Sheri |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Wow! Very good. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well, I must tell you this!--I thoroughly appreciate your poetic abilities through the reading of your descriptive writing! Love & Light, EA |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a rhyme scheme! I must have been sleepy last time I read it... |
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Guardurthoughts Member
since 2001-10-16
Posts 66 |
"slowly I close my eyes to prevent seeing and fade away to a place beyond without a word to say" Its mystery is captivating and I can only say that some how it touched me in a way I cannot fathom. Thank you! ~~~Gaurdurthoughts~~~ |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
I glance up as I have a million times before only to see the same veil of grey obscuring the distant shores hiding non-existant blue skies and in that moment, icy rain began to pierce the somber clouds as if they began to cry the constant yet, sporadic, patter of the rain seems to scatter my concentration and ease the pain |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
tried to reply and think i did it wrong lol. but i wanted to tell you how much i enjoyed your write. i found it very moving and i am in awe of your talent. brilliant hugs from june |
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