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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-15-2003 11:58 PM).] |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
'Stare into the red summer sun Kneel upon the starry sands like an anchor There are a thousand and one Arabic nights to discover Let's go and publish another' that's stanza's just damn gorgeous, and as far as the whole peice goes-- masterpeice material. really. [youve got my vote], keep on keep on. -chris. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I don't remember having read this one before, but it brims with imagery  |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I just love this, Noah. Sometimes it's hard to write poetry in second person and still do justice to the imagery involved, but you've described a very vivid scene even in a poem largely comprised of imperative phrases. I just love your use of vocab and repetition, this sounds like it borders on poetry and is almost a song, which is appropriate to the musical theme you've used in the poem. Is this about anybody in particular, or is it just a general ode to a musical preformer? Either way it's excellent poetry. Great choice for submission, Noah. Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Very good, Noah...wish they could put your picture in the book above your poem...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome write Noah. You defiently got my vote. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
enjoyed this very much Well Done Noah. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
i love the last two lines of the first stanza. they really drive the whole poem. i did not understand the third repetition of the last line. i feel it may be too much. you however, know your work best and if you would enlighten me as to what you meant by it i would be most grateful. -majnu |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Zaheer, these are song lyrics/poetry I wrote and somehow I have a habit of emphasizing the final line at the end of a song, almost as though it is the motto of the song, the gist, I kind of use it as a tool of deliverance, but can understand if you felt it was too redundant! (big hugggssssssss) Thanks for your wonderful comment, I love your poes by the way! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-16-2003 10:16 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - I must say that this is one of your best... BC |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - I think I missing voting for it but not this time... BC |
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LoveBug
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I'm really impressed with this one, Noah. Such a vivid and passionate piece, I enjoyed it very much. It's very exotic and beautiful! You have my vote. Peace I leave with you, My peace I give unto you: not as the world giveth, give I unto you.--Jesus Christ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Noah I look up some of your vocabulary and I have to admit I can't find them under your spellings, which then makes it hard for me to understand the whole of the poem. Seems like no one else is having that problem. Maybe you could email me with the definitions of some of the words. I would appreciate it. I know it would help me to enjoy your work more. *s M **for example tarbiah, Tarr, taqsim. I am probably showing my lack of knowledge here  [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (02-15-2003 06:42 PM).] |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
I love the way this reads and looks but like NakedThoughts I am somewhat ignorant about some of the words. I presumed that Tarbiah means her veil, although I can find it in no dictionary on the Internet or in my own dictionaries at home. Then I tried finding Kaffia, Bedleh, Taar, Tabia and Taqsim with no success I'm afraid. Could you please enlighten me in my ignorance as I want to cast my vote. I love it, but need to understand these words - I even went into a couple of Muslim sites and still could not come up with the words. Thank you, like I said I love the way it sounds and flows just need a little help. |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Thank you so much for sending me the list of words - this piece flows even better now I know them. I have very happily cast my vote for this lovely write. |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Words that will make your love melt in thy arms sir noah!!!!! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well Noah, I bet you that Shikara (did I spell that right?) inspired this one a bit didn't she? I loved your song, and now you have me hooked on her too, she is extremely good, you were right! |
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RedTapePoetry Junior Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 19 |
truly beautiful, in its own sense. |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
Dear Noah, This is a keeper, a real beauty. I have a friend who bellydances to stay fit. It is quite entrancing. I was amazed at the energy it takes and the discipline. You captured this well with your words. "Lift your tarbiah No disciple can own you...... Abundance has always been inside of you" You can live off the energy expressed here!!! This is definately one for our newest book. Sherry Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Noah, Shakira really did inspire you this time! Well done, lots of great imagery in here. Perhaps you've even lifted some tarbiahs with this one.  |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Wow Noah, what a write.....enjoyed it a lot!! ((hugs)) Charisma |
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dhicks03 Member
since 2002-12-26
Posts 267Missouri,USA |
Noah, enjoyed! Keep it up! Dennis |
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lorenlynn Member
since 2003-01-27
Posts 203California Beaches |
Great read - thank you. Wisdom comes with winters. ** Oscar Wilde. |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dear poet how you have sent my imagination in a whirl with this firey and vibrant poem! In the book this belongs, my friend! Hugs Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
i liked it |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
You write on dear friend and I'll keep enjoying them. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Dance your dance, Noah...  |
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Singing Sparrow Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 94 |
Noah, my good man, this rocks! I eagerly anticipate the publication of this book so I can keep your work as a memoir of the student I was lucky to have! Rock on Mozart! SS [This message has been edited by Singing Sparrow (02-17-2003 11:58 PM).] |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Enjoyed.  Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Very nicely done, Noah. I enjoyed this. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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angsana Member
since 2002-11-11
Posts 77 |
I see a commotion to this write! And I'm gonna add on to it by casting my vote. Passion flows thru' this piece. Very wonderfully expressed!! angsana |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Noah, this is by far, your best! I am so blown away!  |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful choice for book submission, Noah ... beautifully descriptive! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is such a wonderful poem Noah, thanks for sharing |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I know you don't need my vote, Noah...but I'm giving it anyway... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I love how you can transport me to far-off places without me having to expend the energy of my wings carrying me there! tehe Your love for other peoples and their cultures is reflected in many of your poetic works. They entertain, educate and help unite us all to one another! You increase our understanding and appreciation of one another! Warm appreciative hugs for another incredible piece of writing! Linda [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (02-18-2003 12:43 PM).] |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Superior work my friend. Indeed worthy of inclusion. I love the images that you have in this. Well done. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is what makes you such a special writer, my friend... Brilliant work... Regards, Sudhir |
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Stanley Climbfall Junior Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 16 |
Young man, your poetry is indubitably a remedy and a paper clip that brings people of all races and creeds together, I humbly thank you for making my day with your soul and positive spirit, so I wish you a pleasant day and a round of hearty applause. Stanley Climbfall |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Noah...Your mastery of all languages never ceases to amaze me. Keep dancing to the words in your heart and keep sharing them with us...I sure hope this makes the book...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I have a tattoo etched on my lung Of an ancient camaraderie that quivers with my lips Set my soul on flame one more time So you can watch these rainbows unveil So you can feel the smoke rise You can feel the flame shine You know this is ethereal You know this is the deal Lift your tarbiah No disciple can own you You've got expression You've got soul, so let's rendezvous Abundance has always been inside of you ========================================== I could have sworn I already replied to this...the moth is losing it Outstanding vocab and imagery Noah... I see your muse Shakira has belly danced into your pen again. very cool writing poet sir " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Has joie de vivre. Well done. I thought a 'tabla' was played with the hands and not the feet, or at least that's how I've seen it being played? Thanks. It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Noah, This whole poem, presentation, graphic, expression.... simply everything fits perfectly together. It's just all simply Gorgeous!!! Oh how I wish that I was more like Al-Farabi, but I think that your poem as does this beautiful dance of which you write transcends variations in language and in culture. I think that we can all get lost in it no matter what language we speak or no matter what nationality of which we might be associated. Again, this is a most beautiful creation my friend, thank you for sharing, and I am believing that many many more will enjoy reading your poem in years to come. God bless you. -Bob |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Noah..my sidekick! You know you have my vote with ths one!! ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Noah everytime I've read your poetry you amaze and move me by your words.....yes very passionate piece!!! LOVED IT!!!! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Noah, this poem is definitely one of your best! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Just beautiful, M'toe... *S* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
this sings with your heart, sweet noah. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Noah, ths is amazing, as all your writings are. I know we will see it in the book. Sandra |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This must go in the book Noah!! Wonderful job on a most colourful and enjoyable write. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Noah, this was really good! I enjoyed reading the picture you painted with your words here.  --Liz It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got... |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is wonderful dear friend and I am proud to vote for it. Thanks for the definitions. Joyce |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
After so many comments.......I cant add anything but a vote! Jason |
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ThunderMage Senior Member
since 2002-06-20
Posts 812Canada |
Another good poem. What is life without poetry and adventure? |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Noah, This poem is wonderful! A great submission choice that I have voted for. Dawn |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Woe is me! I tried to warn you to stay away from those dancing wimmen! Now you've succumbed to their veils! You're ruined, you poor lad. lol Great writing, Noah. I didn't know where the song was going until I slowed down and read it. I enjoyed every line. Well done. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
I have a tattoo etched on my lung Of an ancient camaraderie that quivers with my lips Noah, excellent lines here! man, i wish i have written those myself... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, I'm impressed my friend, you have my voe. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Scheherazade will make use of such a fine story. Enjoyed |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
What can one say that has not already been said! I think it's the other way around young one! I am YOUR fan! In you go!!  |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
I loved it!!!! WOW (¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨) |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wow Noah! Your words had me mesmerized and they danced on the page. I enjoyed this very much and it certainly gets my vote. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Noah, I have a feeling that one day you will be a well known poet. You simply amaze me Your poetry is fresh, original, colorful and exciting Best regards Liz |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Noah: This is truly awesome! I'm glad you explained some of the words, as I was not familiar with most of them. I re-read it after reading the definitions and enjoyed it even more. Of course, I am voting for it! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Noah, I have read and voted, but just had to read again and comment "You move mysteriously Glimpsing the eyes of your spirit" This is an awesome line, as is the whole poem. My applause to you for this wonderful piece. Liz |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
*sigh* as always your words are truly amazing..your secret? and I to must agree excellent choice for submission..(voted for you obviously!) If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Yay! I'd like to tale this time to thank you all for your wonderful comments, you are all such wonderful friends and always bring joy to my heart, yay! (big group hug) I wish I could thank each of you individually, but there are so many of you wonderful friends I just had to settle for the big sun angel hug, yay! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is wonderful, Noah! You have my vote. [This message has been edited by SmartChick (02-26-2003 08:06 PM).] |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Cha ching! Yep, that was the sound of my vote. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Loved it lil brother, and it is a very sensuous, exotic work of art in your words!! I especially enjoyed learning what those words meant, as it increased the pleasure of the read!! My check is definitely in the box for this one!! Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Noah, I enjoyed this song, this dance, these colours and mysteries unveiled ...Just beautiful. You have been seduced and seduce the reader too.... Love, Margherita |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Beautiful, I love the motion of it. You weave a wonderful rhythm with your words. This certainly does belong in the book. And thank you for your wonderful email, dear friend. It brought a smile to my face. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Well Mr. Man! Sultry sensuality and a large dash of culture to boot. well done my fine friend, well done indeed! p.s. After this I just had to add you to my library Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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poohbear19 Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 94Colorado, USA |
Great poem. Very beautiful, keep up the good work Noah. Andrea |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Dang this is beautiful. I loved reading it! It is so much in one.. ~jen Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Stanley Climbfall Junior Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 16 |
Back up you go, young man, bravisimo! Stanley Climbfall |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
Well,Noah,you certainly increased my vocabulary! Very Visual and enjoyable.You have my vote,my friend! I would like to know what inspired you to write this. Peace,Geoff If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living. |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca |
Most excellent write! Thank YOU for sharing! [This message has been edited by Red (03-14-2003 07:23 PM).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
mezmerising |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Very nice. I was wondering where you found the meanings of those arabic words. If it was a website it would be great if you could point me the way. ex animo, Aaron Woodside IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI [This message has been edited by aaron woodside (04-26-2003 04:13 PM).] |
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Guardurthoughts Member
since 2001-10-16
Posts 66 |
Mistletoe Angel- I have yet to thank you for all the kind words you have said to me and my poetry. Or even repay you with same Courtesy, and with that said thank you!   Your writing is beautiful and such passion roars from its words. The emotion was so raw and genuine thank you for sharing. Much love** Erica  [This message has been edited by Guardurthoughts (04-27-2003 03:19 AM).] |
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