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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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I want to find the one he read where he felt the liquid smooth, where some one thing I skimmed in thought could get him in that groove…. I wish to learn just how to be like the others that I read, where “liquid smooth” is their forte, and silver rims their keys… I love to find those poets here that trickle down their thoughts, where love is love and laughter's fine with words that can’t be bought. For were I to find pearled wisdom shelled, whether smooth dark black or pearly white, I’d give it to the poets whose fountains spill this love for sake of write… I want to find the one she read where she felt the liquid smooth, where some one thing I dreamed in thought could get her in that groove… and then I’d cache well this feel, this silk gone satin stream, and lay it there beside your head amid your night limned dreams then in briefest break of day with soft touch to your throat, the muse would then awaken well, and pen those words dreams wrought. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-11-2003 06:58 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Smiling at you!! Very beautiful piece here Karilea! ~Smiles & Hugs, hip-sis-one~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wonderful Karilea! Boy..oh boy. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
limned...I am always learning new words and phrasings from you *s M |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OH MY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! KARI????? where is the book vote box????? THIS IS A POETS POEM!!!! It BEGS to be in a poetry book.... Girl...get in here and make it so we can vote while there is still time!!!!! and dont make the moth ask twice  and? I WISH I HAD WROTE THIS!!!!! |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
I know I commented on this earlier, but my reply is not here. It is now...  Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh, Karilea, this is the most beautiful poem about poets I have ever seen. The words flowed like liquid gold..  Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
All I can do is sit here and smile at the wonder of this writing...beautiful! |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
This tells me that we all press to make our writing "better", even when we're not sure what better is, but that we want the flow of syllables, alliteration, verb choice, meter and foot to be "right" to convert our thoughts and moods to words. (The pedantic meter must be redlined!!) Such a lovely expression of poetry's purpose. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Karilea, A wonderful write. But you don't want to hear my dreams in poetry or prose.  Your generous heart shines through again.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
came back to put in my mothy library since I dont get to vote!!  tee heewhere “liquid smooth” is their forte, and silver rims their keys… --------------- I wish that if I were to find pearled wisdom shelled, smooth dark black or ever pearly white, I’d give it to the poets whose fountains pen spill in love for simple sake of write… ----------------- and then I’d cache well this feel, this silk gone satin stream, and lay it there beside your head amid your night limned dreams ----------------------- AGAIN I SAY-------- IWIHWT!!!!!!!!!!!! "and when we get to the pearly gates ... |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
I think you found it, Karilea.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
this is extremely beautiful work... my friend... much enjoyed... regards, sudhir |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
So beautiful. Even though it's about fluid silver it has a brilliant touch of gold. Love, Margherita |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ So delicate ... so lovely~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea....Exquisite....and I don't say that often! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Wow... I think thats Woman of Wonder. I tried Poet of Praise but it didnt look right. Wonderous work much enjoyed. Regards, Olias. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What lines you've weaved in this one to describe what lies behind a poets words. I have to copy from one of the earlier responses, this is truly a poet's poem Lovely!!!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Love the way that your words drip on the page and seep into my thoughts! Shenachie |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
.....a little hint.....I think you just wrote it.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This poem IS the essence of liquid smooth. Into my library, to soothe the roughest edges of my day. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Silver is my favorite color. i absolutely loved this Sunshine! Never be normal! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hugs, all of you... and JM? Remind me when #4 comes around, OK? This... IS a poet's poem. Bless your hearts. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-04-2003 11:02 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
mmmmm... |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
That is absolutely breathtaking. I'm putting it in my library Life may be hard, but it's your attitude that determines your happieness |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
oops  Life may be hard, but it's your attitude that determines your happieness |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I agree with JM, this is a MUST for the book. This is fantastic, Karilea, so beautiful. I'm proud to call you a poet and as always you inspire me Take care, Melissa~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
OK...a few of you beat me to death with your wings...So...I've submitted it for the book. Have at it - if you wish! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OOOOHHHHHHH A MOTH JUST LOVES TO HAVE HER WAY WITH HER POETRY .... and POETS LMAO THANK YOU Kari...this one NEEDS to be in the book!! Or I NEED it to be ... either way... I win  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
yeah... regards, sudhir |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Oh to be numbered among your "liquid smooth". Lovely, lovely. Joyce |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YES!! YES!! YES!! ..came the cheer from Canada!! You know this has to be in Reflections! ~Hugs~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yippeeee! By all the replies--and votes--this poetic jewel has engendered, this poem for poets will most assuredly find a home between the covers of Reflections!  Lovin' hugs, Linda |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Well, of course I think it should be in the book! hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
 I'M BACKKKKKKKKK!! Hugs, Ethel |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I'm back to vote! |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
I liked it. Very smooth. ex animo, Aaron IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Big votage Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Karilea, this is lovely, sweet friend, you always seem to make silver streaks across these pages which you briad with the sunbeams! This has my vote, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Vote's in! (JM, release my Spam!  ) |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I missed this? Well goodness me! Karilea this is such an example of you - giving and for the other poets, never yourself! I love it, and will of course Girl, you really have to send links around for us busy folks. God bless our soldiers, for it is now a brand new beginning for those so long suppressed. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (04-10-2003 07:31 PM).] |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
This is beautiful, but I don't understand how I missed it. Happily voted on this great piece. I be me BUT who does me be? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Voting again...as many times as it takes |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
What would a book of poetry be without this beautiful weave Karilea ~ absolutely outstanding ~ Bonnie |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A poets poem indeed..... grinz*****it's gotta be in the book.... I must have had my momma's will |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This brought a big smile to my face.... Much Enjoyed Karilea!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a wonderful example of "liquid smooth", Karilea! Beautifully done! p.s. thank you for the birthday card! You made my day! |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Sunshine: Just totally lovely and touching! It has my vote and I hope it makes it into the book. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
I knew there was a reason why I loved Sunshine. Beautiful! Sunkissed. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Karilea So very fluid were your lovely words. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Another gem, Kari. Sandra |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
Very nice,Karilea,very.....liquid smooth You have my vote,m'dear. Peace,Geoffrey If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine Just beautiful you have my vote. |
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waldopepper Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 157Tennessee, USA |
Liquid smooth...I really like that image. And you let it flow, unchecked, with boundless beauty and grace. A wonderful poem. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You folks are the best. This wouldn't be here if I had not been cajoled [and a bit wing-beaten] and that you have all come to vote, is a blessing that cannot be repaid. You sure all bring the "aw, shucks" out... bless you all! |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Karilea, thank goodness I stumbled upon this. It was 'silky smooth' and I just loved it. But then, I love evrything you write. Hugs, Marti |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
thank you |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Hi Sunshine, finally got here and I'm glad I did. Very nice and smooth. Good job and good luck!! mysticpoe |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
When all you want is words that flow Liquid smooth's the way to go When Erato passes by ? Liquid smooth gives you a high. Sunshine has the technique cold Liquid smooth will ne'er grow old I'm so glad you submitted this. But you've given me such a quandry. Which of your poems do I like best. Count a vote here!! KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Flower Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 240California |
Absolutely wonderful. Love reading all these great writes. |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
I simply love the 'melody' of this poem!!! Neeraja |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well you already know how much I have always enjoyed your writing and this one is no exception. It is a perfect selection for the book also as it gives insight to the thoughts of writers but it also pays a wonderful tribute to all of us that hold a desire to pen our feelings, thoughts, dreams, etc ... you get the point. Very much enjoyed and so glad to read your words as I always come out a with a little more understanding. |
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Krystopher Morris Member
since 2002-11-11
Posts 130Ancient land called Chivalry |
Wow...All I can say...Thanks for sharing! "Death, so called, is a thing which makes men weep, and yet a third of life is passed in sleep." -Lord Byron |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
(moth gloating) heh |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karliea~ Beautiful thoughts from your pin to share with us.To dream it and write it what a gift. Thanks for sharing...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Karilea.. I'm sitting here absolutely stunned..I don't know how I missed this, this beautiful beautiful write. I'm smilin at ya hitting the vote button and adding it to my library. hugs Maree  |
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just a junkie Member
since 2003-03-04
Posts 53 |
I loved this!!!! Going to vote. Thank you |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
You're right. This one should be in too. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Good Morning Sunshine! Sorry I'm so late... |
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pjtalty Member
since 2002-07-17
Posts 111W.A., Australia |
The imagery in this beautiful piece is expressed in sharp,sensuous, concrete language. You have chosen language through the use of what my English professor used to describe as words that bear with them strong emotional overtones for all lovers of poetry and, in particular, for those who aspire to the title of *poet*.This is truly a poet's poem and a delight to read and reflect on. I am proud to be able (I hope) to vote it into the anthology. Patrick Talty |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
BUMP |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Oh my....what a treat Karilea, ashamed that I haven´t read it till now.....but not to late to cast my vote I hope ((hugs)) Charisma |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
what a charming write and with so much feeling. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Voting's about over, folks. I don't know if there will be a round five, but I can guarantee, if you come back to read this, you'll know I haven't submitted another [I can hear the cheers!] for I'm quadruply pleased to know that I have what I have in Reflections. Some of you are moths, some of you are angels, some of you are poets who have it in your hearts to see other poets get a leg up. I have a good feeling about what you have all done for me. I have a small novel in the works...some of you have seen bits and parts when I was first putting it in the Prose forum...but folks, it's taking on a life of its own...and it's all because of you that I have grown to the point where I am now beginning to think "it can happen" and you know what? If it doesn't...? You'll all know it hasn't been because I haven't tried. If I were to begin to thank folks...I would have to thank you ALL! So I shall begin, and end, with one. Ron, thank you. For giving me a place to find myself; a place for me to grow...a place to say...thank you...to you, and all of our "family" in Passions. Family usually comes by blood ~ we don't get to pick them; you give us that second family; where we can pick to stay, or go; learn, or lose; share, and educate.... Ron, I know what I've done with this wonderful home of yours; I only hope you know what you have done for the thousands of us who have come, and gone, come, and stayed. Until I can find a way to better pay? Thank you. |
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