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Hallucination
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0 posted 2003-03-22 09:45 PM


"Why Am I Wrong?"
(23/03/03)
© 2003 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved

I am alone, the laughter around me is crying to my ears. I know it sound strange, but that's the way I feel. Sometimes, most of the time. Well, all the time.
You could say that I'm an empty pocket, or a stain on a pair of new jeans.
A smile is only a smile, if you want it to be. And I'm not a smile.
It's difficult to talk about, it's a mess to vocal without wetting my eyes. Maybe that's the reason I desire rainy days? Hanging half way out the window, in hopes of having the raindrops wash me clean? Maybe?
And I try, I really do. But I never get it right. Seen seasons come and go. Spring, Summer, Fall and Winter is all the same. My setting is someone elses rising sun, I guess I'll have to live with that, untill tomorrow.

I am alone, even in a packed city bus I am alone. They're not where I am, They are ghosts in my eyes. sometimes, most of the time. No, all the time.
Everybody says to follow my dream, but I can't follow what I have lost.
A dream is only a dream, if you believe in it. but I'm a former dreamer.
Sweaty poms and a bowed head, molding my self a somewhat brave face every day.
Monday, tuesday, wedensday, thursday. Friday's my mile stone. But it's really tough to be strong, when just under your skin you know you are weak. Maybe?
And I fight, I really do. But it's never quit enough. Spending hours praying, pulling my chin up while hiding in bushes. Try to be normal, try to be excepted, "but no one wants to play with me", why am I alone?

Deep inside a voice whisper: "Why Am I Wrong??"

[This message has been edited by Hallucination (03-22-2003 09:46 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-03-23 02:35 AM


The sounds of desperation ring through this one. Your character appears to be on the brink, and not know why he is all alone.
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2 posted 2003-03-23 03:31 AM


I can really relate to the character in your story. I enjoyed very much.

                                Dawn

Amara
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3 posted 2003-03-23 03:15 PM


'...it's really tough to be strong, when just under your skin you know you are weak.'

'...to have to appear strong, be tough and fearless, when inside you don't know what strength is anymore.'

The second line is one from my own piece of prose. They're similar. ^^

This reminds me of a friend. I can't relate, but she could. This is wonderful, very deep, and meaningful. Thanks.

Blessed Be Thee,
Stephanie


Every heart has hidden treasures...a secret wish, a silent dream, and a cherished love. [Unknown]

[This message has been edited by Amara (03-23-2003 03:16 PM).]

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4 posted 2003-03-23 04:37 PM




(big hugggsssss) Oh Brian, this is so very touching, dearest friend, I know this feeling of yearning and loneliness and self-doubt ever so much and I pray now you have found solace of your own! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs and a vote your way, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brian, thank you for sahring!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2003-03-29 11:49 PM


A very touching write.
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6 posted 2003-04-11 10:08 PM


Touching and sad.
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