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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA ![]() |
I stand unclad in cold façade of stone, My eyes downcast lest passers-by might see A glimmering uncast that may have shown What lies beneath the calloused flesh of me. I stand alone within a clouded pane, Ensconced by shades of calcified obscure. Travails of time run through my tattered vein, Imbrued in concrete wall of life’s endure I stand enchambered by a furrowed sill, Etched gravely now upon once florid brow, With sash held taut unscathed from bitter chill… A shell secure as winter’s leafless bough. I stand in solitude midst bustling wrest, Pulsation’s sound the faintest of discern. As shades of lichened green across my breast, Enshroud all semblances of worldly yearn. I stand in crevices of self impose In wraithlike specter’s resolute disguise. Dare not those passers-by presume suppose Of that which lies behind my languid eyes. I stand defaced neath veils of sanctity, Protective labyrinth of lattice shorn From marrow’s soft invisibility. Sole piece of olive wisp my true adorn I stand unclad in cold façade of stone, Yet passion’s breath still flickers silently. One solitary kindling’s ember shone From far beneath the calloused flesh of me. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Fabulous poem Nan! |
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Local Parasite![]()
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Some very nice poetry, Nan. I like how the description of your surroundings was tied in with the description of yourself, the contrast you created was very interesting. Enjoyed reading this. Good pick for submission. ![]() Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. ~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche [This message has been edited by Local Parasite (02-15-2003 03:55 PM).] |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Nan, you've knocked my slippers off with this unbelievable piece of writing. Damn you're good! Huggles and wish I could be with you girls for the weekend. Thinking of you all. Luvs, Marti 'I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars.' |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
wow..this is suberbly written.the imagery of everything was very strong, kind of like it was physical in my mind...anyways. this was a wonderful piece. Regina "heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello |
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LoveBug![]()
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"I stand unclad in cold façade of stone, Yet passion’s breath still flickers silently. One solitary kindling’s ember shone From far beneath the calloused flesh of me." Such a wonderfully vivid piece.. I love the whole jist of this piece, and the last stanza is the best!! ![]() Peace I leave with you, My peace I give unto you: not as the world giveth, give I unto you.--Jesus Christ |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Absolutely fantastic first class poetry Nan. I have learned to expect nothing less from you. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh my yes!! I do like this one a lot. ![]() |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is simply beautiful, Nan. I enjoyed reading it very much....... Yep...the book!! "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-15-2003 01:06 PM).] |
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Essorant Member Elite
since 2002-08-10
Posts 4769Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada |
My vote is cast for this. Very well writ. |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
I swear it must be a crime for someone to write this well. Again, this is another WONDERFUL write. Brava! |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (smiles) Yay!!! Oh Nan, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I could feel the serenity, the breath of fresh air, the ring side seat to this comfort, and I just love your imagery here to captivate it! (kiss on cheek) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nan, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Absolutely perfect!!!! This one gets my vote for sure ![]() ![]() |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is absolutely fantastic!!! Maree ![]() |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Nan - hi you, you have my vote... BC |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile...not just skill here, but artistry. You take this metaphor and it's like looking at a gemstone through a loop... frank admiration, Nanners... ![]() |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
And also mine. |
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Paul Wilson![]() ![]()
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Nan~ A masterpiece of poetry. If I could vote more than once for this poem I would, I would believe me...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" [This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (02-16-2003 02:17 AM).] |
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dhicks03 Member
since 2002-12-26
Posts 267Missouri,USA |
Wow, gets my vote too. Very nice! |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Very very good, slighty creepy and dark, nice atmosphere and good rhyming structure |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Well, you already know that I love this one. It's definitely one of my favorites of yours. An excellent write. Hugs to you, friend. ![]() "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is amazing! So well done, Nan..voting here. ![]() |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Gladly I'll give my vote to this beautiful piece Nan. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Wind![]()
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I didn't understand it, a little to deep for me. But nonetheless... I am living proof that ghosts exist. Which is an oximoron but I don't care ;) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Thank you all very much for taking the time to stop by and enjoy.. and a special thanks for your votes... ![]() |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A phenomenal piece Nan ... I love this one. An excellent submission for the book, my friend! ![]() Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
A wonderful poem Nan, thanks for sharing ![]() |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sheer poetry. Definitely one to be read again and again... Warm hugs, Linda |
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Connel![]()
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Very cool poem. Enjoyed the whole thing! ![]() Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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bsquirrel![]()
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Love how it carves itself away, here. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Hey, I loved your seven quatrains of iambic pentemeter... Though I loved it in a morbid statuesque kind of way, you're still the best in my book and of course you got my vote for sure. -Bob |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
but of course... you, the poet... ![]() Regards to you, Sudhir P.S. hi teach, how r u doin'... hope my absence from school hasn't given me too much homework... ![]() |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this explains why some teach and some clean erasers ![]() The vocabulary alone in this is just so impressive...and the rhyme leaves me giddy ![]() " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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Larry C![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Nan, Makes one look deeper inside. Excellent write. ![]() If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Excellent. Classic Nan! |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
ive read the two submissions by now, in consecutive order. the spuddlin' one and this now. and i see two sides of a poet, both sides worthy of a page in the anthology i think. there's always time to laugh, and there's always room to cry too. |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
hi nan pretty poem |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This knocked the socks off me. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Exquisite... Smiles2uPoetFriend Nan... *~coco~* |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I don't have words to do this justice. *S* But I do have a box to check. *S* |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A flickering little flame perhaps, but a flame all the same. A shade to the dark for you. Enjoyed |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Nan - you writer of beautiful contabluiosly fatagratedly poetry are just wonderful. What would this book be without your writing... BCI |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Nan - You are so deep - and so beautiful. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...*click* ![]() ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Nan, Take your time in the shower, I'm just going to read this one over again. Got to be one of your best ever. Liz |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
reminded me of DeVines challenge. Beautifully descriptive...so well written M |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, I not only like it but crown it an epopee. ![]() [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-21-2003 11:51 AM).] |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nan~ You polished the stones brilliantly ... the gem is remarkable~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I stand to applaud. A very fine poem Nan. ![]() There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Excellent, Nan...excellent. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You've got my vote! This is an exceptional piece of writing, Nan! Well done! |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
My vote too. This is a gem. (Do I vote right here?) |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
Oops. sorry for the multi-posts, I didn't realize this until I clicked on the last page. Hope the moderator deletes the extra posts. [This message has been edited by jjote (02-25-2003 11:36 AM).] |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
You get my vote, Nan. This is a gem. |
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Joyce Johnson![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
sHow did I miss this? Wonderful. Joyce |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
excellent work Nan ![]() Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Inspired. Voted. Susan |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
There's much more than an ember burning in there Nan. Outstanding writing. |
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