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Munda
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0 posted 2003-02-14 07:43 PM

Seasons Of The Heart – Sonnets

Awakened by the early sun of Spring,
And whispers in the wind of love anew;
Enchanted by the melody it sings,
A rosebud rises in the morning dew.
Whilst snow and frost flee for a beacon bright,
A Red Rose cuddles up in sun's embrace.
Enlightened, yet without a trace of fright,
Unfolding velvet leaves with loving grace.
Bestowed with passion of his golden rays,
She grows into a beauteous red Rose,
Aloft on rainbows proudly she displays,
True shades of red, composed by love's repose.
Amid the composition of his art,
She knows this is the Summer of her heart.

But suddenly the Summer turns to Fall,
And Winter tears asunder unity;
The magic of the snow cannot enthral;
Oh Rose, no bloom's intent infinity!
Deprived of joie de vivre and its mystique,
She can't endure its loss, nor its torment.
While crystal teardrops seal her loss unique,
The wrath of silence raves through firmament.
Thus overcome by smart to death she yields;
Her love - now still; faith perished; hope's decay,
And petals flutter onto withered fields,
Bereft of life upon a Winter's day.
The Rose - her heart – withheld of love she weeps;
Withdraws into eternal Winter sleep.

Munda

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1 posted 2003-02-14 08:20 PM

Hah... I think it's neat how polar our submissions are, both use the theme of a seasonal being coming into existence, living, and dying when the season is done. Wouldn't it be cool to both get in and have our pages next to each other?

Okay enough of that... I have to say, I really enjoyed reading this. The choice of theme is perfect, as is your description of the rose from birth, to life, to death. Love all the fancy personifications you used to get the reader good and attached, and I especially like where you decided to divide the two sonnets. They compliment one another very well, and I can appreciate the importance of each having its own complete space.

I also like how the closing couplets of the two sonnets seem to correspond -- the sun gives warmth that allows the rose to enjoy the "summer of her heart," but once the sun is gone, the rose will grow no more, and it withdraws into winter sleep.

I don't think this was meant entirely literally, either... so I'm going to congratulate you on a love-to-loss poem very well expressed. I'd love to see this in the pages of Reflections.

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

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2 posted 2003-02-14 08:41 PM

I love sonnets, and I think this is a wonderful piece... it's sad how things that were so bright and beautiful in spring just fade away in the winter. A great addition this will be to our book!

Peace I leave with you, My peace I give unto you: not as the world giveth, give I unto you.--Jesus Christ

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3 posted 2003-02-14 09:35 PM

A perfect choice for the book!

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4 posted 2003-02-14 09:45 PM

An excellent double sonnet, Munda, more than worthy for the book

the_loner_23
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5 posted 2003-02-14 09:46 PM

I really like this a lot. it is so beautiful. Great for a book.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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6 posted 2003-02-15 01:03 AM

(big hugggsssssss) Seasons can indeed hurt and be obfuscating sometimes, but know the spring is inevitable following winter and with that in mind the birds and sun will shine again! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Munda, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Nan

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7 posted 2003-02-15 08:02 AM

It wouldn't be the same without your wonderful work, Munda... My vote's in for you...

hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 2003-02-15 08:40 AM

Absolutely enchanting

garysgirl

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9 posted 2003-02-15 01:03 PM

Yes, Munda, definitely book material...

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

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10 posted 2003-02-15 01:14 PM

very nice

ellie LeJeune
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11 posted 2003-02-15 08:52 PM

Munda these are exquisite sonnets! I love roses and you have penned them into life here! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Jason Lyle
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12 posted 2003-02-15 09:58 PM

If I could only write so beautiful.(trys to vote twice).
Jason

Charisma

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13 posted 2003-02-16 02:28 PM

Beautiful penned Munda!!

Charisma

Andrew Scott
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14 posted 2003-02-17 02:27 AM

Most beautiful! My vote is cast.

Mysteria

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15 posted 2003-02-17 03:27 AM

Well not only didn't you miss submitting this time but you did it with such style and grace, this is lovely Munda.

Parker
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16 posted 2003-02-17 05:11 PM

Munda, loved these sonnets. got my vote.

Parker

Kit McCallum

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17 posted 2003-02-18 07:14 AM

This is beautifully crafted, Munda ... an excellent choice for book submission.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Janet Marie
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18 posted 2003-02-18 10:11 PM

I do so enjoy being sonnetized

rhymes divine poetess Munda...perfect choice for the book.

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ... it then directs your course."

K.Gibran

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19 posted 2003-02-19 02:03 PM

This is a beautiful portrait you've painted of the seasons, Munda... excellent! *S*

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20 posted 2003-02-19 05:13 PM

Beautiful depiction of life and death through the metaphor of a rose in the snow.

Munda
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21 posted 2003-02-20 11:47 AM

Thank you all for your warm support.

Sudhir Iyer
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22 posted 2003-02-20 12:54 PM

A most perfect choice, I must say...

Enjoyed your words...

regards,
sudhir

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23 posted 2003-02-21 06:51 AM

Munda, you knew I would get here eventually...so many posts to read! As everyone has already mentioned, one way or the other, this IS a perfect selection for the book!

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24 posted 2003-02-21 07:22 AM

"Oh Rose, no bloom's intent infinity!"

I love that line!
All around, a touching
sonnet, Munda.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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25 posted 2003-02-21 08:28 AM

But, the wonderful thing besides this poem is that spring will return....

Munda this was truly lovely!!!
WONDERFUL!!!!

Bridgette :

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26 posted 2003-02-21 08:34 PM

"into eternal Winter sleep." I am waiting for Spring, this Winter's sleep is a long one

a lovely poem, Munda
M

Joyce Johnson

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27 posted 2003-02-21 08:47 PM

Very beautiful. Joyce

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28 posted 2003-02-24 01:09 AM

Sweet....easy on the eye, this one.

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29 posted 2003-02-24 01:12 AM

Just beautiful, Munda...an excellent choice.
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Bill Charles
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30 posted 2003-02-24 01:20 AM

Munda - another vote for this well written poem...

BC

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31 posted 2003-02-24 02:04 AM

I hope you know just how beautiful this one is, Munda. What a wonderful poem for the next passionate publication!

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32 posted 2003-02-24 12:40 PM

Munda,

This is a great set of sonnets. One of my favorites from you. I'm very happy you have decided this one for the book.

Dawn

[This message has been edited by DawnG (02-24-2003 02:51 PM).]

Lighthousebob
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33 posted 2003-02-26 06:28 PM

OK, I love Sonnets and I am so glad that you responded to my poem to give me some inspiration to look you up and then there and behold when I did... WOW!!! Not one, but two Sonnets. (Yay) ...and like roses these are both beautiful!!! I love how you procede through the rose's life, the seasons of the heart, and the four seasons. Very very nice Sonnets. You've further inspired my need to write one..... soon. Thank you and my vote.

-Bob

Munda
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34 posted 2003-03-04 05:26 AM

Thanks you all again for your very kind words and support.

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35 posted 2003-03-05 10:03 AM

Sheer poetry...

Warm hugs for someone who truly sees and feels--and writes,
Earth Angel

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36 posted 2003-03-05 11:43 AM

Munda
This gets my vote.

Kethry
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37 posted 2003-03-05 02:42 PM

What perfect form, the layers of meaning go on and on. Definitely a contender.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

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