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Another Gloomy Day (from DKPoetry3) |
nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Another Gloomy Day As I look out the window and feel the loneliness closing in on me, I watch as each drop lands upon the window ledge outside. Through the bay windows, the splatterings remind me of my life...seeping from the whole of me. As each day continues whether I wish for it to or not, the lack of you, your words, your insight (or is that incite) pulls me under the gray. Hope is there, hidden within the swirls of darkness, watching me, every move I make, and often those I don't. Fever has almost cleared yet the heat of desires still rise at the oddest times, keeping me from clear thinking, and thoughts often run wild. I see myself as if in a commercial running through Spring's garden of fragrant blossoms, sheerness of dress captured by the breeze of my coursing, to your waiting arms. I sigh at every grain of thought, every minute of the hour glassed before me in wait, and as time runs out, I keep into a "forever" hold, by turning you over and over, knowing that time shall stand still, one day... and wipe away this gray. ~Wynter 2001 "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." (Will Moss) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (02-15-2003 06:31 PM).] |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This is a really interesting piece of poetry. It's a very familiar concept, I've seen it written many times before, but still you show a lot of talent by being able to give it originality and uniqueness without changing the theme too much. Very nice work. Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maureen, even though this is sad, it's beautifully written, as only you can do... "Love makes the world go around" |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssssss) Oh Maureen, this is so very heartfelt, sweet friend, this deeply touched my heart and I hope all is well as my heart sends angel hugs out to you! (sigh) This is touching, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you, each. This was an older poem from 2001..It just was one of my own favorites. M |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I think it's one of my favorites too Maureen, thank you for reposting. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
I like the weather/emotion similarities and how real they are. Well expressed, M. *s |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully descriptive, Maureen ... a lovely book submission choice. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
M, I'll always love your writing. You make so much from your past that offers so much to the rest of us. Bless you. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Since I rarely visit Dark, I'd missed this one... and it's excellent! *S* |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
me too missed almost this gem, excellent piece. Charisma |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
very nice write. Jason |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yes, 'tis gloomy, but somehow it is rather calming and peaceful. You have quite a knack at creating a mood... Warm hugs, EA |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
As they say, there's always a silver lining around every cloud and yes, better days ahead |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
As always Maureen, I see myself in your words. Well done. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I keep into a "forever" hold, ~*~ gloom dissipates... sooner or later.... reflective, indeed.... |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Yes, an excellent choice and a unique form. Both are given your own special voice. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
An excellent choice indeed.... Such a nice work Regards, sudhir |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I know of this all too well....LOVED THIS!!! Would be a nice addition to the book.... Bridgette |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I thank each of you for taking the time to stop and read. I appreciate the kindness. *s M [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (02-21-2003 11:07 AM).] |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
this is nice. ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ah...now you should know I KNOW this feeling. (sorry it took me so long to get here, time is NOT my friend these days...) enjoyed the read, m'friend. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
What IS there about the greyness of winter that brings loneliness out in us, and makes us shiver a little deeper. You bring this out so well. You get my vote. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
nakdthoughts - I finally caught up to you and your writing, my vote my dear... BC |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
love this one....relate.... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'I see myself as if in a commercial running through Spring's garden of fragrant blossoms, sheerness of dress captured by the breeze of my coursing, to your waiting arms.' Whatever the commercial is for, I'll take two! I can see why this is one of your favorites. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I think this is a reflective piece that we can all relate to.... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
WynterGal~ Count me in~ 'I sigh at every grain of thought, every minute of the hour glassed before me in wait, and as time runs out, I keep into a "forever" hold, by turning you over and over, knowing that time shall stand still, one day...' I love these 'hour-glassed' thoughts, running through your head~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done Maureen...much enjoyed! ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Post another? This one is good, but I've seen great from you, Maureen. You can tell by some of my replies. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Gloomy and beautiful. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
thank you for your responses and Mike. I chose this poem not for it being one of my best (although I wouldn't be a good judge of that) but because it has meaning to me thanks M |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Little Mo dearest one this is as always truly exquisite writing and so atmospheric, I swear I know this feeling darling heart, you write it so very well. I love this one darling heart, it is as smooth as silk which slips over my mind like a cloak of wonder. Truly you are excellent and I love it utterly If this isn’t included it will be a travesty Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This is still one of my favourites from you. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Hugs Marsha and Kethry. Thank you for reading and responding. I am not on as much right now, so I apologize for being so late in thanking you. M |
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