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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages 
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 Ocean’s Rhythm Waves rolling, rushing over the edge Salty Ocean splashes millions of drops Whenever she meets rocky line Hugs him with endless needs Flowing thoughts of oceans depths Within the secret of sacred life Sometimes she wants to share As she opens her blue virginity To show her inner treasure Corals of gorgeous beauty Rare oysters imply within a plea of oceans mysterious future Don’t rape her innermost beauty Respect her sacred depths Breath of life she shares Within so many precious lives Float upon stream of restless waves Ocean’s rhythm guides rushing stream Charisma Art: Danny Hahlbohm ~*Theresia~* |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) Oh Charisma, this brought me to tears reading this, thinking of the sweet little girl and her innocence and hoping she never changes and will always believe in such beauty! (wipes tears) I love children with all my heart and believe they are so special and it saddens me to see so many lose their innocence seeing the sorrows and abuse in the world and I want to devote my life to reaching out to the children with love, this deeply touched my heart so very much, God Bless this sweet girl and all the children and may love and grace be with them all, you absolutely have my vote on this, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Charisma, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Charisma - this flows just beautiful, my vote you have... BC |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Charisma, this is absolutel beautiful. I really wish the picture could be in the book above the poem. It adds so much to it...  . . Hugs, Ethel |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Charisma, I love the sea and you have brought me roght to the beach....gloriously! Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Charisma dear, you know I love the sea and you descibed it so beautiful Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
 Lovely! I could feel the salt air. |
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Essorant Member Elite
since 2002-08-10
Posts 4769Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada |
Charisma, Lovely descriptions. A pleasure to read. Essorant |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is wonderful, Charisma...  |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Hugs him with endless needs Flowing thoughts of oceans depths Within the secret of sacred life" this is so beautiful  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
The descriptive qualities in this, are excellent Charisma ... just beautiful. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I could see the personifications and parallels you drew here, with the language you chose to use (virginity, rape) and the fact that you applied a specific gender to your subject. But I was really hesitant to decide whether this is a poem personifying the ocean, or oceanifying a person... then I read Noah's reply and it didn't help, as I was leaning more in the direction of a personified ocean. Well now I'm just confused, but I'll settle with my own interpretation. You've described beautifully both the ocean scenery and the innocence of childhood. My vote is cast in your favour. Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I see this as a social poem... with strong link between polluting the oceans (oil spills and all that) and corrupting childhood joys and innocence... but then I may be thinking tangentially... Well in three words, I loved it Regards, Sudhir |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
I love this, Charisma. It's simply beautiful. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Truly beautiful Charisma! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sometimes she wants to share As she opens her blue virginity To show her inner treasure Corals of gorgeous beauty Rare oysters imply within a plea of oceans mysterious future ====================================== what a stunning verse... such a lovely write poetess Charisma. must have this gem in the book " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Captivating! The lure of the undulating sea...Totally enjoyed this reading experience! Warm hugs for this oceanic treasure, Linda |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Thank you all for reading and I am glad you enjoyed this one, as it is one of my personal favourites. In first place I wrote this piece for the ocean, as she (ok i personified it, maybe because I am a she too) have many sights to view. She can be calm and gloriues, wild and rough, but also very serene like a virgin. And I cannot stand it, that we human beings spoil the oceans with oil, chemical trash.....etc. etc. And yes I always try to link nature with my life experiences. Maybe confusing, but well thats the way I am But once again, I enjoyed all your replies and thoughts here. love you all (((hugs))) Charisma |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
the book wouldn't be complete without something of yours in it, I'm so glad you chose this one. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
INCREDIBLE POEM!!!!!! This is sooo pretty!!!! Bridgette |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Well this is lovely. *s Nicely written. When you think you have heard it all, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Charisma what an excellent choice for presentation, you know I have to vote for this lovely piece. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Charisma~ You are such a joy to read~ This is as lovely a presentation as I've seen~ Thanks for the e-mail ... I'm sitting this one out~ But appreciate you thinking of me~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Charisma, I love poems of the sea, and you made it alive. Very well done! Loved this! Liz |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Charisma, I love poems of the sea, and you made it alive. Very well done! Loved this! Liz |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Wonderful JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Oh yes. Another for the book. Joyce [This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (02-25-2003 12:04 AM).] |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
This poem that you have chosen for your first choice I believe is a perfect choice for the book. It would be excellent if the graphic you chose could be included because your poem describes it so perfectly.... but, even without the graphic, your poem's imagery paints a perfect picture of the similarities between a young woman and the ocean. Your last stanza, from my perspective, describes in beauty and in unity how natural and wonderful procreation can truly be. -Bob |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
it calls to many my friend. . . wonderful work. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
voting, lady! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I just love the ocean....and this |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I thought I'd responded to this... but can't find it. *S* Artemis doesn't know how easily I confuse, or she wouldn't have bothered losing data! LOL This is beautifully written. *S* |
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