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0 posted 2003-02-20 09:36 PM



There have been many legends penned about the early West
Lawmen and desperados, boom towns, ghost towns and the rest
But one stands out above the rest within my memory...
The hooker with the golden smile by name of Jenny Lee.

The wild west was a very special era of our past
There weren't too many luxuries and life was hard and fast.
In Cottonwood, when days were long and over-filled with stress
The wranglers could unwind at Mary's House of Happiness.

Mary was a lady with a million-dollar smile
Who ran her House of Happiness with dignity and style.
A dozen ladies met the needs of all who had the fee
And, best above the rest, the sweetheart known as Jenny Lee.

Young Jenny was a pretty girl who had a certain flair
Of making cowboys feel special when they entered there.
She treated all with kindness and a sense of dignity
And everyone for miles around all worshipped Jenny Lee.

Piano music filled the house with joy on Friday nights
As cowboys came to sample House of Happiness delights.
A warm bath washed off trail dust and whiskey quenched the thirst
As voices sang in unison old tunes of naughty verse.

He came in on a Tuesday, late in June, as I recall
That stranger out of nowhere that nobody knew at all.
Five decades had carved wrinkles on a face made out of stone
Belonging to the kind of man who always rides alone.

He tied his horse at Mary’s, knocked politely on the door
And Mary smiled they way she had a million times before.
She offered him a drink and asked what might his pleasure be…
He said he came to see the girl the boys called Jenny Lee.

She sent a boy to fetch sweet Jenny, then walked to the door
And led him upstairs to a bedroom on the second floor.
He sat down on the bed and waited, quiet as could be
And, in no time at all appeared the face of Jenny Lee.

She said, “I’m honored, sir, that you would choose to seek me out.
I’m sure you will be satisfied. Of that I have no doubt.”
He rose and tossed a twenty dollar bill upon the shelf
And said, “ There’s just one thing I want –to know about yourself.”

This took her by surprise a bit but one thing she had learned
One never knew the crazy pathways that a man’s mind turned
And if he chose to pay for conversation, that’s ok
She’d humor him and hour or so and then send him away.

“My name is Jenny…I was born in Knoxville, Tennessee.
As near as I can recollect, my age is twenty-three.
I never knew my pa….ma said he was a travelin’ man.
She did her best to raise me up according to God’s plan.”

“Though we were poor, my momma always kept a happy mood.
She hunted game and raised some corn and cabbages for food.
She taught me how to read and write and do arithmetic
And then when I was seventeen, poor mama came down sick.

I wandered after momma died, just traveling around
Until one day I wound up in this little, one-horse town.
That’s when Mary saw me and gave me a place to stay
And that’s the story of my life and why I’m here today”

“Oh, I am not complaining, mister. Men like me a lot
And give me temporarily the love I never got.
I’m grateful for the life I have and I thank God above
For finding me a special place that’s filled with so much love.”

The old man got up slowly and, to Jenny Lee’s surprise,
She saw a trail of lonely teardrops falling from his eyes.
His face took on a saddened look – his shoulders slumped and fell
And she could tell his soul was falling through the depths of hell.

He said, “I’m just a drifter….been a drifter all my life.
I’ve had no time for family or time to take a wife.
I’ve done things I ain’t proud of but I never broke the law
And, Jenny Lee, I had to see you once ‘cause I’m your pa.”

“There was no way that I could know the day I rode away.
Your mama never told me she was in a family way.
She sent a letter ‘fore she died that I got just last year.
I’ve spent this whole time tracking you. That’s why I showed up here.”

“You needn’t say a thing, sweet girl.I’m glad your life is good.
I’d gladly change the past and make things different, if I could
But fate gave us this hand to play and play the hand we do.
I’m glad I finally had the chance to tell you I love you.”

“Tomorrow I’ll be riding out to find a little spread
Where I can build a house and have a place to rest my head.
It’s going to be quite difficult….I just know how to lose
But it is time I plop down and take off these traveling shoes.”

Jenny hadn’t moved a muscle all the time he spoke.
If she had tried to talk, she had no doubt that she would choke.
She saw him bend and kiss her cheek before he walked away
Then heard his footsteps echo out into the heat of day.

The legend has it Jenny Lee just up and disappeared.
Murdered by a jealous wife, some of the townfolk feared
She ran off with a millionaire, some other folk opined
Some others thought the fever got her and she lost her mind.

One young boy said he saw her in a buckboard with some guy
Her arm around his shoulder, smiling as they passed him by
But no one paid him any mind….a childish fantasy
Yet there was never found a single trace of Jenny Lee.

Mary’s House of Happiness still packs them in at night
As cowboys put their money down for fantasy’s delight
And, right above the fireplace, placed for everyone to see
There hangs a picture ofthe sweetheart known as Jenny Lee.


© Copyright 2003 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-02-20 09:55 PM


Wonderful.  I enjoyed it to the end.Joyce
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2 posted 2003-02-20 10:03 PM


ONLY YOU could turn out the story telling theme and carry out the cadence while ya melt us with your heart on sleeve tenderness.

The master Balladeer has penned a masterpiece.

"Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky ...
We fell them down to turn them into paper that we may record our emptiness."

K.Gibran


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3 posted 2003-02-20 10:14 PM


Well, I'm glad you opted to include this one Michael.  And you know I loved the story!  Very cool.
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4 posted 2003-02-20 10:15 PM


...and that is why you are known as the balladeer!!!
Your sensitivity and story-telling ability, along with your fine poetic talent, come together in this wonderful saga.

Humble hugs,
EA

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(smiles) Oh Balladeer, this is wonderful, sweet friend, an absolute masterpiece, all of the wonderful tales you write are worthy of publication and I am so happy you chose this for the book! (big hugggssssssss) Sonme legends are forgotten as are heroes, but she is bound to ncharm the cowboys and drifters forever with her cheerful uplifting smile, God Bless You, I love this, you have my hearty vote, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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6 posted 2003-02-20 10:38 PM


This one I never read before and it's as good as any of the others. Don't know about your golf but your a damn good poet.
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7 posted 2003-02-20 10:55 PM


Sy said it and I agree....
You're a damn good poet....sir.
This one has to be in the book!

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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this is absolutely one of my favorites from you....and the list is quite long...
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9 posted 2003-02-20 11:20 PM


Having thought I'd read all you'd written, you took me by surprise with this one dear Deer As with any of your poems, this one is certainly worthy of print and has my vote. I'm just gald to see someone is even more long winded than I when it comes to writing You know you'll need three times the votes to get this in the book, does that mean I can vote three times for it?
hugs,
Ruth

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10 posted 2003-02-20 11:37 PM


Bal dear you do it too me every time....

This is also the second incredible read that I've read in just the past 5 minutes!!!!

You'll go down in my books as one of my all time favorite poets of all time!!!!

VERY NICE!!!!
HUGS,
Bridgette

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11 posted 2003-02-20 11:52 PM


Love your story tellin Deer.

Excellent as always

Vote's in!

Maree

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12 posted 2003-02-20 11:53 PM


No need for me to announce the obvious here, so I'll just mark the box in humble support of your master story telling.

-Bob

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13 posted 2003-02-21 12:12 PM


You had to do it didn't you?  Kleenix alert.

          
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14 posted 2003-02-21 12:20 PM


Your poems always
bring a smile, if not
an outright hearty guffaw,
but this one...definitely
a smile. *s

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15 posted 2003-02-21 12:41 PM


Balladeer - Now what would the book be without yours included, my vote is a click...

BC

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16 posted 2003-02-21 02:55 AM


Michael, you have my vote...

And you'd have my vote no matter how many submissions you made for the book....why did you say this is the last one????
Hugs,
Ethel

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17 posted 2003-02-21 03:46 AM


I salute you Dear Sir...

how often do you do this...

tell wonderful stories in the most pleasant way with the class of the poet that you are...

I'd say all the time...

Thanks for the treat...

regards,
sudhir

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18 posted 2003-02-21 03:56 AM


ah Balladeer what a treat to read, but then all your poetry are that way......

Charisma

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19 posted 2003-02-21 10:33 AM


Yer gonna make me sniffle and whimper, ya scalawag.  I love this story.  You have a great gift for writing Mike.  I wonder if you can write other names as well.  lol  I really enjoyed this.
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It never fails...
when you pluck at heartstrings
I seem to have to try to find my way
through the mist in my eyes...


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21 posted 2003-02-21 12:56 PM


I hope it makes it in. This reads like a fine-tuned novella.
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22 posted 2003-02-21 03:09 PM


yes yes yes yes yes yes yes... And an extra YES for making Long John snivel... I mean sniffle! *G*
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Mmmm...I think Ron should set aside 6 pages in the book for you Deer, all three deserve to be printed.

Titia

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24 posted 2003-02-21 04:01 PM


I sit here with my mouth open totally in awe of the marvellous storytelling here. Brilliant! Certainly gets my vote. My one regret is that I only get one vote.

I be me BUT who does me be?

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25 posted 2003-02-22 12:12 PM


A tale as only you can tell.
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26 posted 2003-02-22 12:51 PM


WOW!!!!! That's all. WOW!!!!!!

I'm a reader - not a writer.

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27 posted 2003-02-24 01:39 PM


You're the MAN, m'Deer... This is awesome..
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28 posted 2003-02-24 11:08 PM


No one does it better.
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29 posted 2003-02-25 11:45 AM


OH YESSSSSS!! Give me that western ballad every time.  You have an apt pip name sir!  Ken J

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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30 posted 2003-02-25 05:19 PM


Michael:

This is an outstanding poem.  Considering the cast of characters, I still can't believe you pulled this one off as well as you did.  Excellent work.

Jim

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31 posted 2003-02-25 05:40 PM


Mike ..  you truly are our "Balladeer"...

thanx.

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32 posted 2003-02-25 11:00 PM


Thank you, fellow poets. I love telling stories and am very happy that you enjoy reading them. Each comment of yours makes me beam....thank you!
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33 posted 2003-02-25 11:28 PM



What is this?...payback?  You're trying to sneak
one past ME now?  LOL  Love this, m'Deer.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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34 posted 2003-02-26 07:11 AM


Your poetry has the ability of pulling the reader into the position of a character and becoming part of him/her.
You are an amazing story teller and poet
It's a privilege to read your poems
Liz

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35 posted 2003-02-27 12:34 PM


Yes sir Michael,
This was already in my collection. I absolutely love it. Here's my vote.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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36 posted 2003-02-27 08:16 AM


Even if that's one last one for the book, I'd like to hear the rest of it...the rest of it in your mind....

Voting :-)

HUGGLES

KS

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37 posted 2003-03-04 08:51 PM


’Deer dearest heart, I’ve always said that when you write the world stands to listen. When you write as well as this and the story is told with such amazing clarity those who hear sigh with delight and envy. Delight because yet again you are the master story-teller, and envy because they know they will never even in their best days be as good as you. I’ve mentioned once or twice before you are truly an outstanding writer and always your work shrieks quality, if this gem weren’t included in the book then it would be a crime against poetry. You have my vote ‘Deer and I know that when the Mushettes get a chance they will come and vote too. Mummy will make sure of it


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

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but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
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38 posted 2003-03-05 03:39 PM


This is FOR the book?  This one IS a book Mike, and a fine one at that.  Got my vote.

fh

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39 posted 2003-03-13 09:11 PM


Okay! So I can't vote again, just giving it a gentle bump to the top of the page. Love it!!!!!!
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40 posted 2003-03-15 12:35 PM


I've read it several times now and it just gets better each time. It gets my vote.
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41 posted 2003-03-15 12:55 PM


This is unbelievable. Lovely!
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42 posted 2003-03-18 09:27 PM


Even though I've read this before somewhere
I love it to pieces - so of course it has my vote. BTW next time you write about my life change the name willya!
Kethry

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43 posted 2003-03-18 10:32 PM


This is just awesome.
Jason

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Wow, this was a very enjoyable read.

Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.



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45 posted 2003-03-22 02:13 PM


Well the Balladeer rides on into the sunset leaving us with eyes wide and in awe. Well done cowboy!

SG

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Yee hah....let's get this here poem in gear.....

I enjoyed this too much for it to get lost!!!!
Bridgette

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47 posted 2003-03-28 10:19 PM


I will never tire of your reading you 'deer ~ It is simply pure enjoyment ~ Bonnie
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48 posted 2003-03-28 11:12 PM


I loved this! Absolutely loved it! It's right up there with the face on the barroom floor!

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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49 posted 2003-03-29 04:12 AM


Deer this very very good indeed excellent writing, outstanding another one for the book I see I will really really vote for this one.
Very well written


love and warm stuff
as always
Krissy

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50 posted 2003-03-30 12:42 PM


All hail the master storyteller..this is a MUST for the book and to think that Im lucky enough to be your manager   You are a true poet m'friend, this is excellent

Melissa~

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51 posted 2003-03-31 04:21 PM


Bump.....I really like this!!!
Bridgette

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52 posted 2003-03-31 07:44 PM




Just love a happy ending! And all the rest of your poetry. How blessed we are you share it here.


Enjoyed, Pat

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53 posted 2003-04-01 04:39 AM


You are an astounding storyteller.
Muys

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54 posted 2003-04-01 02:15 PM


Simple yet a warm touch to the words you give, dear...gotta to be in the book...thanks for sharing...
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Thank you all, my friends

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56 posted 2003-04-03 11:29 PM


Can't let this slip away...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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57 posted 2003-04-04 12:11 PM


Balladeer - only you can tell a tale like this, wonderful. My vote is cast...

BC

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        Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

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59 posted 2003-04-04 09:35 PM


Bump!
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Upsy-daisy!!  
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62 posted 2003-04-07 05:23 AM


Michael - I must say - this is the BEST tale I have read in a very long time and with style and grace - very well done - you had me at every line . . .   xxoo
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Of course a third for the book...

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64 posted 2003-04-08 01:49 PM


Always look forward to your grand tales 'deer.

J

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65 posted 2003-04-08 02:13 PM


Michael,you never cease to amaze me.This is terrific and definitely needs to be in the book.I have to say,though "The Statue In Central Park" is my fav of yours,this one runs a very close second.Vote!

Peace,Geoffrey

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66 posted 2003-04-08 02:38 PM


I am in awe of how you hold a rhyme rythme and story so very well as this.
Your story was fantastic.... I was 17 before I was reunited with my "father".  I last remembered him when I was about 2 or three. Reunions are such happy occasions.  
You certainly have my vote...and I am adding this to my library too!

Sherry

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67 posted 2003-04-09 12:50 PM


Bump.....

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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68 posted 2003-04-09 01:12 PM


I'm glad I had the chance to vote for this.
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And a 'yes' to go with it~
Lovely, my friend~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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70 posted 2003-04-10 05:07 PM


I know I can't vote again but I can bump back up. Would love to see this make the book, worthy of all the space it would take.
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71 posted 2003-04-10 08:08 PM


Michael... This has to be the cream of the crop. Wonderful story...Paul

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72 posted 2003-04-10 09:13 PM


Once again, I thank you all, bumpers and voters alike...I appreciate (and am unworthy of) you all
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73 posted 2003-04-10 09:25 PM


Definitely should be included in the book! Fantastic piece, Michael!
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74 posted 2003-04-10 11:27 PM


I love this one....
Bump....
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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75 posted 2003-04-11 08:36 AM


How DO you do this? Man, with all that talent there has to be a book somewhere of your collective works.
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76 posted 2003-04-13 12:04 PM


Hmmm...does Jeffrey not know about your book???  I know about it but, still need to buy it!!!  This 3rd submission has just gotta make it into Reflections!!!!
Bump.....

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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77 posted 2003-04-13 12:12 PM


Yes, Bridgette, he does now...I saw his post in Announcements. Thanks, bumper pal!
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78 posted 2003-04-13 09:08 AM


What a story!!!

Click!!!

Neeraja

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79 posted 2003-04-13 11:28 AM


There is not much I can say that hasn't been already said but I will tell you that I have read this one quite a few times and each time it is just as enjoyable as the last.  I also find that each time I read it there is something new that sticks out in my mind.  I bow to the master of story telling and proudly cast my vote for this one.  Well done sir as all your writings are.  
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80 posted 2003-04-13 12:00 PM


Than k you, Neeraja!

Mark, I know your words are sincere and I appreciate them very much. Receiving approval from people like you makes writing worthwhile.

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81 posted 2003-04-14 02:21 PM


If I didn't vote for this
I would certainly cry
Your godly writing sets me at bliss,
For your talent I would die!

Never stop writing such AWSOME writes!
Thanks sooooo much for sharing!

"Death, so called, is a thing which makes men weep, and yet a third of life is passed in sleep." -Lord Byron

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82 posted 2003-04-14 02:23 PM


Wow balladeer.....that was long, yet it was so good... Whatever happened to "Short and sweet" ?

(¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨)
  ·.¸(¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´
     *`·.¸.·´*
    Love Always
       Kellie

I TAWT I TAW a puddy CAT!

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83 posted 2003-04-16 10:55 AM


Back to the top with thee....

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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84 posted 2003-04-20 11:33 AM


BUMP
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85 posted 2003-04-21 02:25 PM


wait a minute... haven't I voted for this yet??

Well, third submission and about three pages long, so my vote will only be nominal, most likely... still, I have to let you know that I love this one.  I read it at my girlfriend's place, and read it aloud to her... she was really impressed too.  Great work, 'Deer.  

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86 posted 2003-04-21 02:32 PM


very good write held my attention from start to finnish
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87 posted 2003-04-23 11:17 PM


This poem should have honorary inclusion 'Deer!!!!!
Hey Ron whatdya think???
Bridgette

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88 posted 2003-04-24 12:00 PM


Thank you, Bridgette

Parasite, I think one of the greatest compliments a poet can receive is to have someone read his work to a third party...I thank you, sir..

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89 posted 2003-04-24 01:17 AM




A marvelous story!!!!!

It had me captivated throughout...




Cheers!

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91 posted 2003-05-06 03:28 PM


I do love a good story poem.  
This is a good story poem.
Thanks

Arthur

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92 posted 2003-05-06 10:28 PM


What a gifted and polished story-teller you are sir.  I thoroughly enjoyed this wonderful tale of reunion and love, laughter and hope.

A tale of the tallest measure!

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93 posted 2003-05-10 12:30 PM


Amazing... story telling and poetry blended perfectly as one... gets my vote.

One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world...

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94 posted 2003-05-10 12:40 PM


My sincere heartfelt thanks to all of you
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95 posted 2003-05-18 12:42 PM


I see in the months I been gone you continue to write the best ole Balladeer
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96 posted 2003-05-18 02:44 AM


Your writing style and the way you told this story in the tone and feel of a ballad held my attention all the way. Certainly richly deserves a place in the anthology. Have you ever read any of the work of Australian "Bush Balladists" such as "Banjo" Patterson (of *Walzing Matilda* fame), Henry Lawson and John O'Brien (*Around The Boree Log*)? I think you would enjoy them. Anyway, thanks for this extremely well-written piece.

Patrick Talty

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97 posted 2003-05-18 06:12 PM


CAVECANEM...thanks for the kind words. Ole Balladeer thanks you!!!

pjtalty...I have the greatest respect for the AUstralian bush poets from Banjo Paterson to Gordon, Lawson, O'Brien and Olgivie, among others. They had a flair of tale-telling and mixing in the full flavor of their thoughts in every word. I think my favorite of Banjo's would be The Man from Snowy River and the Geebunk Polo Club. To be even mentioned in the same breath with these giants of the written word is a huge compliment...I thank you.

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98 posted 2003-05-27 02:32 AM


I bet those bush balladists talked faster than you though, but I wonder if they could recite their long stories in rhyme from memory?  You amazed me beyong belief and I haven't quit telling people about that you realize?
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99 posted 2006-02-11 12:47 PM


Michael, I really love it when you tell stories like this.  You have such a way of relating history in a way that it touches the present very poigantly.  The foibles of life come through this in such a sad way.  Some thing throughout the ages don't change much:  The magnetism between men and women, mistakes and secrets, a father's love for his daughter, and regrets.   This is a wonderful ballad.

Karen  

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100 posted 2006-02-11 05:54 PM


Thank you, Karen, for clearing away the cobwebs to find this one

You're right....the world changes but basic values don't....thank God!

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