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regards2you
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0 posted 2003-02-22 01:11 PM

Your phrases,
     raw or steamed,
  consumes the cliched
       components of my core.

Munching,
Quenching,
Chewing me,

with your,

Heart touching,
Soul searching,
Gut  wrenching.

And, I, stand by.

Admiring your ability to
   bump a bruise
        on my existence.

Yet, I'll walk away
my own person,
ever, a thank you for that.

Married to self,
     I am singly pleased
           allowing divorce,
~we are no longer ~us~

But, when you penetrate
     my aliveness,
where skull and scalp
          covers consciousness
of the ~god of me~,
     not the God I answer to,

but, the

~Goddess of my Essence~,

when your thoughts
     smear your soothing salve
          on my ~Mind~,
touching that most

precious part of ~who I am~,
then, I am,  eternally yours.

       Can you have me?

     ~Just Touch My Mind!~
.
.
.
.
.
.

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

aries_luv_ppl
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Universal Mind

1 posted 2003-02-22 01:19 PM

I like your style. So unique. Vote in!

~Every girl has a dream within.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-02-22 01:20 PM

OHMYGOSH!! This is beautiful..
Are most certainly belongs in the book Pat.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Mistletoe Angel

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3 posted 2003-02-22 01:24 PM

(smiles) Oh Patricia, this is beautiful, sweet friend, and may true love come and cradle your mind in lullaby of eternal promises! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patricia, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2003-02-22 01:24 PM

Pat, your poetry never disappoints me! It is full of pearls of wisdom and yet you still manage to convey that through your eloquent "quillmanship"!

~ May your pen never dry up!

Warm hugs,
Linda

the_loner_23
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5 posted 2003-02-22 05:41 PM

This gets my vote for uniqueness. I LOVE it.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Chanson
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6 posted 2003-02-22 06:35 PM

Very lovely, regards! *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

garysgirl

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7 posted 2003-02-22 08:23 PM

Well, look who I found here tonight....my friend, Pat. (it's about time, Lady)

I like it and so...*click* my vote's in>..

Hugs,
Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-22-2003 08:24 PM).]

ellie LeJeune
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8 posted 2003-02-22 11:02 PM

This is a deep and incredibly beautiful poem! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Martie

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9 posted 2003-02-23 12:05 PM

Pat...Strength and character in this uniquely you poem. Enjoyed!

Duncan
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10 posted 2003-02-23 12:46 PM

'And, I, stand by.

Admiring your ability to
   bump a bruise
        on my existence.'

Love that line!

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now

11 posted 2003-02-23 12:49 PM

regards2you - what can I say, you're writings are suberb, a vote from me...

BC

Justbleu
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12 posted 2003-02-23 01:12 AM

This is really interesting.....the style...is very unique...and that is good!!!!

COOL!!!

Bridgette

dhicks03
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13 posted 2003-02-23 01:22 AM

Yes Maam

GG
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14 posted 2003-02-23 02:36 AM

Pat, I love this,
soemtimes I wish we had a voiced section here, to hear the way people read their own poetry.. I'd like to hear you read this one!
Like the whole idea of this, trying to choose a favorite line, think its:
....your thoughts
smear your soothing salve
on my ~Mind~,
touching that most

precious part of ~who I am~,

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Sudhir Iyer
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15 posted 2003-02-23 03:24 AM

beautifully written...

regards,
sudhir

kaile

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16 posted 2003-02-23 05:50 AM

Duncan just picked up my favourite lines..

regards2you
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17 posted 2003-02-23 11:12 AM

I am surprised at the response here and pleased that all of you took the time to read and reply and vote, whoa...that's wonderful!

This does happen to be a favorite of mine and it makes me happy to know others have found something within that they, too enjoy....

To Aries, NancyLee, Noah, Linda, The Loner, Chanson, Ethel, Ellie, Martie, Duncan, Bill, Justblue, Dennis, ALyssa, Sudhir, Kaile......

Appreciate all of you taking your time to read and reply and vote. Thank you so much. Smiling here.....

I wasn't going to submit a poet for most poets here, are so much more skilled than I, and mine always seem to be a work in progress. Whether my poem makes it into the book, or not,  I'll be just as happy to have a book with my favorite poets and their best poems.

I thank Janet Marie for suggesting I submit poetry, too. This is a fun experience and hope to find  several hours today to spend reading this board.

The best of the best. what a treat!

Again, I thank each one of you for your generous replies.

Love and hugs,  Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Midnitesun

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18 posted 2003-02-23 06:44 PM

"Admiring your ability to
bump a bruise
on my existence."
What a powerful line! Yes, click to submit. Well done!

Elizabeth Santos
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19 posted 2003-02-23 06:53 PM

Misdnightsun just said what I was about to say, an excellent line indeed, an interesting poem, You wrote the topic very well.
You are to be commended on this one
Liz

Jamie
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20 posted 2003-02-23 07:15 PM

I think this is wonderful, and would be a fine addition to the book.

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Janet Marie
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21 posted 2003-02-24 04:43 PM

Your phrases,
     raw or steamed,
  consumes the cliched
       components of my core.

=====================================
And, I, stand by.

Admiring your ability to
   bump a bruise
        on my existence.
======================================

well those are just two of the coolest verses I will read today...
I love those analogies.
Very well done poetess Pat, this is a perfect choice to reflect your writing in the book, perfect theme!!

oouuu eeee oouu ah ah ting tang walla walla bing bang ...
oouuu eeee oouu ah ah ting tang walla walla bing bang
;)

Denise

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22 posted 2003-02-25 09:41 PM

Indeed!

catalinamoon

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23 posted 2003-02-26 08:01 PM

Fantastic! Well said.
Sandra

Larry C

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24 posted 2003-03-02 03:58 PM

Unique indeed. Voting now.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Mysteria

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25 posted 2003-03-08 05:53 PM

I liked your poem and your attitude and you get my vote on both counts. When we write it has to be for ourselves first and foremost, and the rest is gravy.

Good Luck.

R.E.S.P.E.C.T.
Aretha Franklin

Mysteria

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26 posted 2003-03-08 05:55 PM

Sorry catching up here, and this was way cool -

Admiring your ability to
bump a bruise
on my existence

you get my vote Pat!

R.E.S.P.E.C.T.
Aretha Franklin

hoot_owl_rn
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27 posted 2003-03-08 06:25 PM

Unique, and worth a vote

Ratleader

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28 posted 2003-03-09 08:50 PM

Yes -- going in. Tried to vote for this one before, but dunno if my vote talled....

Poet deVine

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29 posted 2003-03-19 10:23 PM

Yes..I like this one too. Voting now.

suthern

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30 posted 2003-03-20 02:50 PM

I would have tremendous difficulty picking a favorite part... it's all excellent. *S*

KristieSue

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31 posted 2003-03-20 03:30 PM

I like this...unique says it! I'll vote just for your bravery to post. I disagree that you aren't a wonderful poet! Keep it up!

KS

Cpat Hair

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32 posted 2003-03-21 07:51 AM

very nicely done... I enjoyed...

regards2you
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33 posted 2003-03-21 08:18 AM

Just to say thank you once more for all the replies.

It tickles me when ~my favorite poets~ reply to my poetry...as well as those whom I've not met through their poetry.

Very nicely done was achieved by the patient help of one of the best...
sometimes an inspiration for many of my poems.

Forever grateful, Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

[This message has been edited by regards2you (03-21-2003 10:54 AM).]

Cpat Hair

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34 posted 2003-03-25 07:56 AM

yes... I have read this several times now..and am now..finally going to at least let you know I did

well done ...

Larry C

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35 posted 2003-03-27 11:25 PM

Here's a little bump.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

regards2you
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36 posted 2003-03-27 11:34 PM

Cpat/Ron,

Okay...glad you read it and let me know you did. Guess you mean the very nicely done comment by me.

Larry,

Thanks so much for the bump. What a sweet thing to do. Smiles here.

Hugs to you both, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Susan Caldwell
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37 posted 2003-04-03 01:29 PM

Very touching. I loved it.

Susan

passing shadows
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38 posted 2003-05-31 01:51 PM

Marge Tindal

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39 posted 2003-07-12 06:49 PM

Pat~
Do you have any idea how big I'm smiling just knowing you'll be in this book ?????

The very thought of it just *tickles me to pieces*~
Just think ... for all of time to be tucked in the pages with such wonderful poets and friends ... doesn't it just do your heart GOOD to know that the circle widens to touch other hearts ~:hearts:

Beautifully done, sweet poetess~
You DESERVE to be here for sure !!!
Love ya'
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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passing shadows
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40 posted 2004-05-06 12:49 PM

beautiful!

Marge Tindal

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41 posted 2005-08-21 01:58 PM

MyFriend~
You might not be here ... but you are certainly not forgotten, for you left a legacy of poetic footprints for us all to follow ... leading straight to your heart ... or is that your mind?~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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