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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars 
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Emptiness comes rushing in As happiness fades out No one now is here with him No one hears him shout. He says his life is perfect And that everything is great Everybody loves him But for himself he feels hate. He stares into the mirror And glares at his reflection He’s screwed up so many times No chance now for perfection. Nothing seems to work for him Everything goes wrong When things are looking up They never last for very long. People reach out their hand to him He draws back into his shell Won’t let anyone get close Life for him is hell. So now he sits here by himself Pushes everyone away Waiting for something, though he doesn’t know what, And for another day. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This is a very real piece....there are sooo many people that are locked inside like this. And in varing degrees. Very sad piece!!! Bridgette  |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Very heartfelt piece. I really liked it. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent and a perfect choice for the book. Gets my vote! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) Oh Elizabeth, this is so sad but true, sweet friend, I see this ever so much and believe true happiness begins with yourself and I think so many doubt themselves at first and believe they can find joy in others! (sad sigh) This illustrates the real meaning of joy, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, you have my vote, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Enjoyed the read Charisma |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sure speaks to those lacking confidence well, and you got my vote! |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Lots of feeling here and true to some sad lives. Joyce |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Extremely poignant piece and definitely book worthy. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
A powerful and heartfelt poem. Great job. "If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
there is so much of this, that folks I'm sure, can relate to...yes, this is very very real....I like it |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
well done! ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You had something to say, and we were all listening. Beautifully written. Warm morning hugs, Earth Angel P.S. Love your user name! |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
The emptiness and happiness reads like the ebb and flow of the tides. Nice. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Thank you to all who voted and commented! I appreciate it lots.  --Liz It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got... |
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LoveBug
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
What a sad situation you wrote about... but a good story that needs to be told! Oh, make me Thine forever |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Even though this is sad, it written very beautifully. A good book submission...  Ethel |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
It's very hard to want something..but not know what exactly you want. Life..sigh...I like this.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
that poem could be about me...very nice work and a good choice. M |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I know this man and you portray him very well.... |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Thank you! Everyone knows a person like this. In fact, I think that everyone IS a person like this at one time or another. Thanks again for your words, everyone, I appreciate them all! Elizabeth It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got... --Sheryl Crow [This message has been edited by skyshine (03-10-2003 11:15 PM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Elizabeth, I remember that feeling. Excellent write. Here's my vote. Hope it makes the book. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
skyshine You got a winner here and my vote. |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
A beautiful poem. Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Reflections should contain all ways of how we look at ourselves, even if it is from the inside of our self-made shells... Well done, skyshine...thank you! |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Thank you Larry, Sy, Kielo, and Sunshine! I appreciate it! Elizabeth It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got... |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
This is such a sad poem, very heartfelt, very real and honest. I believe all of us at times have either had a friend like this, or have been through the same circumstances in a personal way. This belongs in the book and will certainly have my vote. Excellent, my friend. Hugs to you |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Thank you Michael! I appreciate your words. Elizabeth It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got... |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
I love the way this poem was written. It shows that no one can be perfect.  Always remember to forget |
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Yitzy Junior Member
since 2003-05-12
Posts 30 |
I can relate to that for sure, it evoked familiarity and a well constructed piece People spend a lifetime searching for happiness; looking for peace. They chase idle dreams, addictions, religions, even other people, hoping to fill t |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Thank you FlyingCloud and Ritzy! I'm glad you liked it, and boy do I know not everyone is perfect....people like the guy in the poem need to realize it though...well, it was so neat to wander in here and see my poem at the top of the page. thank you again! ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
I ought not admit this, I don't think, but you could almost swear you had written this about me. Except that nobody has ever liked me much and that I don't claim my life is perfect i just tell people I don't have problems. I wonder how many figure out that I'm lying? Anyway it's a very good poem and devastatingly true. I don't know if today is a good day, or if yesterday was, or if tomorrow will be, but I'd like to think so. |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Thank you teenpoet...I'm sorry to hear that you feel like this guy in here. Don't worry about people not liking you. The "everybody loves him" line doesn't have to mean popularity, it just means that there are more people who care about you than you know about. Well we all like you here at Passions so it's been nice to meet you. Well I hope you get everything figured out. Good luck! ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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