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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
These words will fail me As I try in this longing To tell you how I would taste the salt of you So that my soul would be seasoned As I felt you move beneath my touch And I would know the offering of tender The surrender of eyes Slow wrapped tangle of us Sliding through a time would In knots hold us bound deeper than surface To settle rhythms pounding Then simply beating Dip the pen of your tongue Into the well of my mouth That I might find the words That will not fail me |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ron, you know I LOVE your poetry....all of it...but this  wow...major *sigh* definate vote! |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Ahhh words didn't fail you here!!!! Wonderful!!! Bridgette |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron "Dip the pen of your tongue Into the well of my mouth That I might find the words That will not fail me" I do think you found the words...this is a beautiful love poem! Voting! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Ron, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, I agree that it is always much easier to write better love poetry when a sweetheart will actually let you look deep in the mind or the heart and observe, then you know so much more! (big hugggssssss) This is a well of poetic passion, sweet friend, I love it, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I am so intrigued! Are you as sensuous as your writing? Do you walk your titillating talking?!?... Very warm hugs, tehe EA |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sea... thank you. You are always kind... Bridget.. thank you ma'am Noah... you sir are always on the spot with a kind word and encouragement.. thank you marti... dear friend.. thank u EA.. nah.. I'm a big tease.. three left feet and warts... do well to walk let alone try and be sensual (chuckling) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Somehow... your words never fail... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
sunshine.. or always do..depends on where you sit doesn't it? thanks friend for the visit.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I would taste the salt of you So that my soul would be seasoned As I felt you move beneath my touch And I would know the offering of tender The surrender of eyes Slow wrapped tangle of us Sliding through a time would In knots hold us bound deeper than surface To settle rhythms pounding Then simply beating Dip the pen of your tongue Into the well of my mouth That I might find the words That will not fail me ======================================= oh my...oh my... oh my... oh my... Oh sigh... *will ya look at that*...you just turned a moth in to a stuttering puddle  Oh and btw ... the words didnt fail not the reader nor the poet. So glad you joined the rest of us nervous moths *L* *thank you* *doing moth happy dance*  " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You know what I think? I think you're a poet. So I'm going to voet(I spelled it this way to rhyme with poet!). Sigh. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
JM.. thank you Mothy one.. you are always too kind.. always.. Ms Devine.. now Voet... seems to be a word to me..and poetic license is indeed allowed to someone of your skill. thank you |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
I also "voet" Jason |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This has so much good in it, but I thnk this sentence was so original and descriptive "So that my soul would be seasoned" Sandra |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I would taste the salt of you So that my soul would be seasoned As I felt you move beneath my touch And I would know the offering of tender The surrender of eyes ====================================== OH YEAH....gets better each time I read it. (you oughtta try it) LOL |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Wow - this evokes some great images. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
But the words *don't* fail you, as always. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Mmmmmmm. This is the best of your love poems that I've read. So special. Enjoyed, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
yes,i'll vote for this one good poem |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
beautiful |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
WOW you got my vote. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I need a drink of water -- and to vote for this! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
You know this hopeless romantic loves this....   Hugs, Ethel |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
WOW Ron you knew I would love this one...don´t you..... Charisma |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
this is great ... really great... and "voet" is cool as well... regards, sudhir |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Love it!  [This message has been edited by SPIRIT (02-21-2003 09:23 AM).] |
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lorenlynn Member
since 2003-01-27
Posts 203California Beaches |
Great! |
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cupcake Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 116 |
Wonderful! Really liked this one very much. Certainly gets my vote I'm a reader - not a writer. [This message has been edited by cupcake (02-21-2003 09:26 AM).] |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Slow wrapped tangle of us Sliding through a time would In knots hold us bound deeper than surface To settle rhythms pounding Then simply beating Dip the pen of your tongue Into the well of my mouth That I might find the words That will not fail me' I read something like this from you and I remember why I 'try' to write...  ! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Ron, i appreciate your self-deprecating sense of humour because you should know just how good you are! |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
You will not throw that pen and paper away! Lovely lovely - voting here. |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Very Beautiful. Sunkissed."I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Um... YES!... ...  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Gets my vote Excellent poem here |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
(Big Smiles) I think under such conditions that my pen would equally fail me for quite some length of time. This poem definitely gets my vote simply for erotic value and content. Good job. -Bob |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Oh yeah...absolutely, positively, YES!! Wonderful, Ron. "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Dip the pen of your tongue Into the well of my mouth That I might find the words That will not fail me WOW! Absolutely love it! and am voting! Maree |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sometimes I wonder what English I took at school, especially when I read your poetry |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ron this is just pure liquid - awesome - you have my vote xxoo |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yup what they all said. When I grow up I want to see things through your eyes so I can write one line with that much punch. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Wow....this left me speechless....wonderful words.... Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
...the pen of your tongue.... Darn nice! Makes me think about the taste of ink...and "ink".... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Brilliant (I know how you love the praise). Susan |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I can't believe I missed this one. Must have been when my computer was oput of order. I love it. Uniquely descriptive of fresh ardor. Joyce |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, wow. *S* I would have sworn the werk monster had dulled my senses. *G* But they came alive with this reading! *G* |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Oh yes, yes, yes! Hugs, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
A master of the pen to find such words and feeling. Fantastic...gentle smile |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Superb! I loved every single word. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
It's about time you got published, my friend! Add my vote to the tally. This is pure Ron in its style, sensual impression, dense detail, and "deceiving simplicity" which lingers down a road of thought... -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
good to see that this will be in the book hugssss you... Lauren~ Here I am |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Just came back to see if I'd read this..yup. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thank you everyone...the kind words..and the votes are appreciated... it is in so many ways..a touching experience to write something and have people appreciate it. To have fellow poets appreciate what you write makes such an experience one that touches even deeper. Many many kind thank yous...for the thoughts and the words... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is a wonderful piece of writing Ron, and it has my vote...  K |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
this is the kind of thing... that leaves one ...breathless...h |
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waldopepper Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 157Tennessee, USA |
I see no failure of words here my friend. Palpable, sensuous, and heartfelt. I enjoyed this very much. [This message has been edited by waldopepper (03-20-2003 08:23 PM).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Softly sensuous - you have my vote! Cor |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Yes, this is very fine. It touches me, especially during these trying moments. Let me say that is a splendid addition to the book. I hope I can get you to autograph it. SG [This message has been edited by SimplyGold (03-22-2003 08:24 AM).] |
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