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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2002-12-30 06:59 AM

Shadows

Calm, the after-shadows of all yesterdays
having passed in a tense culmination
to get the day beyond itself
and we feel so superior
to those who came
before us, because we are
in the here and now, with times
"better" for some and "so-so" for others.

We would
take it
all back

Frantic, the shadows so clearly stand in
today's light, trying to grasp the hand
of the clock as it ticks
by and by and by
losing grasp
of all reality in a
moment of time as it
whisks by in a blink of an eye and
with the rise and fall of a breast's breath.

Would we
give it
all away

Beckoning are yet-to-come shadows so faint
but we do see them in the sparkling light
of today, chanting "tomorrow,
tomorrow" as fervent
hope looks
forward to
a bright future where
all hopeful people are, in like
with their dreams that won't die,
to see a calm in their tomorrow that
will only visit their yesterdays after the panic.

There, light
eternal in
shadows

~*~

©Karilea Rilling Jungel
27 September, 2000
ever-so-slightly revised
30 December 2002

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-12-30 07:55 AM

This is amazing Karilea. Fluid, but tight. The message is gorgeous but I am fascinated with the construction here. Mind if I keep this one awhile to study? wow.

me likes muchly.

CSKpoet
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since 2002-07-12

Posts 845
Island in Paradise

2 posted 2002-12-30 08:20 AM

deep thoughts flow with blessings to this reader. thanks, Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

3 posted 2002-12-30 10:46 AM

Frantic, the shadows so clearly stand in
today's light, trying to grasp the hand
of the clock as it ticks
by and by and by

I love this verse! The poem is exceptional, Karilea. But that verse...I could see.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

4 posted 2002-12-30 10:59 AM

yes,nice

Sunkissed
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

5 posted 2002-12-30 02:47 PM

I've read and therefore I've felt.

Beautifully written.

Sunkissed.

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

6 posted 2002-12-30 03:02 PM

Wonderful to read and read again. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

7 posted 2002-12-30 03:02 PM

Karilea, your talent is so unique, and you put your poetry together with such excellency that I am always left in awe.

I love the way you do that. I hope that one day, I will learn....not to necessarily write the "way" you do (because then it wouldn't be me), but to put poetry together in the different forms and techniques that you use.

Thank you, Karilea, for showing me ways to really write........

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

dhicks03
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since 2002-12-26

Posts 267
Missouri,USA

8 posted 2002-12-30 04:16 PM

This was beautiful. I re-read and will continue some more!!

passing shadows
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Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2002-12-31 12:57 PM

you know this one caught my eye...beautiful read for me

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

10 posted 2002-12-31 06:20 AM

So soft, so meaningful.....
and very much a

This speaks to me Lady.....
very gently....

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

11 posted 2002-12-31 09:22 AM

Very very beautifully done Karilea!
Love the words and the pattern formed.
~Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

12 posted 2002-12-31 10:31 AM

Beautifully expressed, Karilea! Lovely and deeply meaningful indeed!

NewEnglandlazurlu
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

13 posted 2002-12-31 11:53 AM

Again you have outdone yourself. This is a wonderful and fascinating work of art. A showpiece for all novice poets, like myself, to study and learn from.

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

14 posted 2002-12-31 12:39 PM

Karilea,

this really is an amazing piece....I read so many meanings into it.. (thank you)...Happy New Year....

Lauren~

I sing to life
To it's tragic beauty
To pain and strife
Let all that dances through me
The rise and the fall, I lived through it all

Sandpiper
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

15 posted 2003-01-01 08:33 AM

enjoyed the "hope" within your words--Happy New Year!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

Sunshine

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Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

16 posted 2003-01-16 05:27 PM

Hey, my poet friends...
thanks so much for your kind words!

Sandpiper
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

17 posted 2003-01-17 05:36 AM

Much enjoyed the message and structure!!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

enchantingvamp
Member

since 2002-12-21

Posts 214
Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas!

18 posted 2003-01-17 05:38 AM

I second Sunkissed notion.

Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell

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