Open Poetry #24 |
Summer Nights on Palestine Tanks |
Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
I want to take the summer night outside my window and stick it on the tanks in Palestine. Or pluck a rainbow from the grey sky and cover porno mags with them. I want to put sunsets and sunrises into bongs, and syringes and spoons; Put poetry on fashion labels, and laughter into cannons and guns... Maybe then, people will see. The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
maybe, then... |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
oh wow. i'm speechless. there a poems that you read and enjoy, then there are poems that tend to slip into the crevice in your heart and stay there. this poem's touched my heart. it's on of those poems thatre stuck to hallmark cards, you know? and you smile whenever you read them. the ones that can change the world, almost. gorgeous. -chris. |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
ps: i loved it. but i hated how it ended so quick. erhg, more more. |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
I wish, your wishes would come true--excellent! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Am not ashamed to say that when it comes European or Australian version of English am pretty ignorant. Actually am an ignoramus. Period. Period squared. What the heck is "bongs". I feel that a fulsome appreciation of this poem would require me to understand that darn word you got there. "am a tourist not a terrorist, don't shoot, cause we are all on a journey to God" Michak |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Yes, yes, and yes. I love your style, straight-up-front, no bull or gravy covering up the message. LOL, I just read Winston's Q. A: Bong, as in a wonderfully creative device for smoking pot cooled by wine or other liquid. At least, that's the bong I know. LOL. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (12-22-2002 08:31 PM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is Awesome! adding to my library. will be looking oout for more of your work. Maree |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
er just came back to add to my library |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
Hehe... Winston, I do apologise for not stating what a bong is! Thanks for clearing it up though MidniteSun. Chris, I did try to make it longer, but it lost all its punch and became too dilute. If you can come up with any other lines, I'd love to hear them. Everyone else, thank you so much for reading! The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rainbowdust There was a poetry challange here a couple of years ago, to use "if poetry were magic" in a poem. This reminded me of a world changed by such vision, perhaps even into peace. Thankyou for this! |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
SWEEEEEEET. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it would be nice if we could replace evil |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Midnite you kidding?! So that's what a 'bong' is? This makes me think of Rainbow in a different light. "am a tourist not a terrorist, don't shoot, cause we are all on a journey to God" Michak |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Rainbowdust, I wish for these things, too. Very good thoughts you've written here.... "Love makes the world go around" |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is just wonderful, Shereen. Warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Best wishes here too. |
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